本文格式正确,意思表述完整,行文流畅自然。作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用,还使用了以‘which,’引导的非限定性定语从句,从而使文章层次分明,富于变化,不愧为考场佳作。
猴年的春晚,我听到一声之前从没有听过的曲子“老腔”——那黄土地黑皮肤锣鼓喧天吼声震颤八百里山川河岳的歌!我愿意把它令人震撼的力量归结为一个词——接地气!“老腔”不是曲高和寡的阳春白雪,它不适合浅斟吟唱。很简单,在大西北粗砺的风沙中,阳春白雪扎不下根来,浅斟吟唱传不到远处,它吼出的是底层草根心里的呐喊,它体现的是生民发展的原生态艰难岁月。
“老腔”牵系着那么多,承载着那么多——俗称之为民俗,雅称之为文化!它有令人震撼的力量,因为它的真实,它的本色,它的温情,也因为它深深扎根于这片热土的执着——它荣,他们荣;它辱,他们辱;它兴,他们兴;它衰,他们衰!
陈道明曾在一次电视节目上发飙,几十个来自山西稷山的农村孩子表演了一出高台花鼓,满堂喝彩,却被几位评委贬低得一无是处。陈道明怒斥:你们对传统文化毫无理解,居然就直接否定了这个节目。你们可能读过不少书,有很高的知识水平,但对中国传统文化和农耕文明却知之甚少、理解不了……震撼,真的不在于文化程度有多高,无所谓见识有多广,而在于能不能放弃那种矫揉造作的势态,以赤子之心感受到一种发自心底的冲动与虔诚。
老腔、秦腔、花鼓的传承者们,骨子里就是一种这样动人的虔诚。只是我们误解了这种虔诚,甚至蔑视地称它为“愚昧”。于是我们看到令人落泪的一幕——义务宣发方负责人方励现身某直播平台用下跪、磕头的极端方式,恳求全国院线经理为《百鸟朝凤》增加排片!《百鸟朝凤》仅仅是吹唢呐吗?错,它坚守的是在东西方文化八面来风中,可贵的文化自觉和文化定力;它表达的是对中国优秀传统文化的认识和传承,以及对现实中普通人的细致关怀……中华大地,沉默无言,山重水复,莽莽苍苍,它的激情,只为生于斯长于斯逝于斯的人而奔泻,而我们的文化便被这种奔泻所裹卷,吞吐千年,涵纳古今!为什么我的眼里常含泪水?因为我对这土地爱得深沉。期待如“老腔”般的传统艺术能更多地走进人们的视野,老腔变红腔!
【名师点评】
这是一篇考场佳作。本文以立论深刻、流畅自然、层层深入而被阅卷组评为一类卷。具体特点如下:
1.文思泉涌,立意高卓。作者的思维与情感应问而笔尖舞动,直击要害,一针见血地指出,“它令人震撼的力量”在于“接地气”。深刻地揭示出老腔粗犷个性的根源在于大西北这一片粗犷的热土。
2.底蕴深厚,自成一格。作者的笔触并不停滞于对老腔的感悟,而是把老腔扩展到“秦腔、花鼓”等传统的接地气的艺术唱腔形式;作者又对以“老腔”为代表的中华民间传统艺术演唱形式所遭遇的逼仄与尴尬处境给予揭示与评价,体现作者对老腔的历史文化价值的理解、忧思和赞美。
3.层层深入,引人思考。全文层层深入,思绪纵横,开阖自如,力透纸背,激情磅礴,在感人肺腑的同时,带给读者深刻的思考和启迪。成功公式:立意高卓+底蕴深厚
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上个月我去北京看望我的一个朋友,因为我们有将近两年没见,而我刚好有假期。这是我第一次游览北京,这座全中国人都向往的城市。我对北京的.所以认知都来自电视和书本,而现在我有机会亲自来看这个城市、来了解她。我多么地兴奋!
There were so many tourist areas in my plan list, like Tian’anmen Square, Forbidden City, the Great Wall, the Perking University and so on. However, due to my short holiday I only visit several places of my list, with my friend’s companion. I will take a long tour to Beijing next time if I have the chance.
在我的旅游计划表上,我罗列许多要去的地方,如天安门广场,紫禁城,长城,北京大学等等。然而由于假期太短,朋友只陪我参观了计划表上的几个地方而已。如果有机会,我下次一定会到这来个长期旅游。
I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.
Hope you will come here soon!
All the best!
Yours,
Li Hua
英语范文一:
On summer holiday my parents took me to Beijing. We stayed at Huabei Hotel. On the first day, we went to the Great Wall. The Great Wall is very long and old. It has millions of bricks. Each brick is very big and heavy. Lots of people from different countries like climbing the Great Wall. We felt very tired when we climbed to the top of the Great Wall.
We also went to the Palace Museum. The Palace Museum has 9999 palaces. It has a very long history. I bought a lot of souvenirs of the Palace Museum. What nice palaces these are! I visited the Palace Museum and felt excited. If you want to know more about the Palace Museum, you can go to Beijing and have a look. The following days, we went to the Summer Palace, Tian Tan, North Lake and Xiang Hill. I now know more about the history of China. I also like modern Beijing. The 2008 Olympic Games will be held in Beijing.
Later, I went back with my parents by train. I really enjoyed the trip to Beijing. I like this trip!
英语范文二:
From the great wall. Those made me feel that I was proud to be a Chinese. there were many antiques which we could espy the great culture ,.It was a wonderful trip,
We all had a great time,,it was a well-known wonder in the is made of big stones which was too heavy to bring even uesing it to buil a construction of ruggedization。!We went to see the Imperial Palace and the great wall 。.
The Imperial Palace noted the historyLast summer holiday I have been to Beijing with my friends for a travel。
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