1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
1、探究下笔的角度
(1)视角的转换
同样一件事,观察者的\'身份、角度、立场、观念、态度不同,得到的印象和结论也不会相同。如果我们能换一个视角来叙述生活中的平凡小事,就能发掘出新意来。如同样是写我在公共汽车上让座,有位同学的满分作文就改变了习惯的视角,借一位需要座位的老大爷的心灵和眼睛,生动表现了一位中学生在让座与不让座之间徘徊犹豫的复杂矛盾的心理。
(2)故事新编
对于人人所熟知的材料,我们可以结合主题,从全新的角度下笔,设计出合理的细节,使自己地文章脱颖而出。如诚信为话题的满分作文《赤兔之死》,题材出自《三国演义》中关羽走麦城一节,通过虚构的赤兔马与伯喜的对话,对比董卓、吕布、关羽等人在诚信方面的表现,最后得出士为知己而死,人因诚信而存的观点。
故事新编必须注意三个方面:①对原着有较清晰的印象,避免张冠李戴,闹出笑话;②想象要合理;③要突出中心。
我们生命与众不同的地方,就是群居,群居让我们有了彼此之间沟通的机会.通过心与心的交流与碰撞.让情感慢慢生根发芽.人间便有了爱,大爱.
我们通常更理解的是爱情,是的,男人与女人这间的这种奇特的爱情魔咒,是天地之间,于人与物原本初定,谁也难逃.在那人生的一瞬间,那爱情的魔咒,让你,让我,也让他,一下失去了原形.自己一下就不是自己,自己再也看不到自己的影子.一向暴虐,突然就温顺,一直乖巧,突然倔强.常常说爱情是盲目的.这千丝万缕剪不断,理还乱的情感,这千百年来,悲欢离合的事事非非,谁对,谁错,清官难断,有了这份牵挂,有了这份真情,海可枯,石可烂,还有什么寂寞不能守,还有什么苦,还有什么孤独?一份情,一份爱,让你,让我,让世界的每一个角落,充满活力.洋溢着爱,洋溢着幸福的温情.生活快乐无比.有了爱的人生,是最幸福的人生,有了爱的人生,就步入了一个最坚强,最无畏,最让人称羡的生活.对世界一切都充满着希望,充满了憧憬,充满着渴望.生活充实,生活无不在奋斗,遇逆境而更顽强,遇顺境而策马.爱情,人间本性.魔咒无限.
而人间大爱,也是人间快乐的源泉.世间万物,生有其源.存在有其存在的意义与价值,区区蝼蚁,威威巨象.林木挺拨.山岩崴峨.大海广阔.溪流弯延.百花吐蕊.群鸟鸣琴.而为万物之灵的人,更是世界奇葩.善与万物,机慧百巧,更有细密心思,情爱独享.爱兰之幽.爱石之精,爱体格是健,爱容颜之秀.可人之处无不爱,世无不可人.这份人间大爱,让我们无时无刻,不觉得生在快乐中,生在幸福里.
人生百年,岁月无情,在生命的每一天,也都充满着与爱背离的黑夜.在灿烂的阳光下,总有那么一片乌云.人性不同,生活环境的`差异,文化素养的质别.一切的一切.有时真是让人感慨万端.缺失了爱,在凄惨,悲凉中,孤寂,苦痛,迷茫,那样的无助.丧失生活的勇气.哀大,莫过于心死.哀,情感低迷,于黑夜中,无一处星光.此时此刻.人生的光芒,暗淡了,爱缺失了.
有爱,有人生,有真情,有人生,在逆境中,因爱而崛起,无论是何时,胸怀真爱,胸怀大爱,让你处处充满生活的快乐.让你百年不孤独.一草一木尽在爱中.
高尔基说过,“最伟大的胜利——战胜自己”,是啊!一个人总是在不断战胜自己的过程中成长的,有时需要战胜懒惰;有时需要战胜平庸;有时需要战胜挫折。
记得有一次上作文课。“铃 …… ”,演讲比赛开始咯,我的心一下子提到了嗓子眼,“怦怦”地跳个不停。当老师宣布演讲比赛开始时,教师里顿时鸦雀无声,同学们你看我,我看你,都希望有哪个胆子大的先开个头。看来同学们和我一样紧张。突然,“我先来!”一个响亮的声音从我的右边传来,打破了教室里的寂静。我转头一看,原来是邱佳辛同学,只见她大大方方地走上讲台,开始演讲,显然,她是有备而来的,演讲得有声有色,博得了同学们热烈的掌声。我的心跳得更快了,可是仍然鼓不起勇气,在我由于之中,同学们一个接一个地走上讲台。
我的手心也捏出汗了,去不去呢?不去就错过了机会,大家都表现得那么好,我怕什么?我看了看老师,老师正用期待的眼神看着我,我又看了看周围的同学,心头一热,“呼”地站了起来,走向讲台。刚开始,我只顾埋头读着自己的,读着读着我反觉得轻松了许多,我听到了自己响亮的声音,看到了同学们倾听是神情,见到老师满意的笑容,我更加自信了。演讲完了,同学们给了我热烈的掌声,我突然觉得,走上讲台表现自己的感觉真棒!
演讲比赛结束了,老师走上讲台说:“同学们,今天大家的演讲都很精彩,现在,老师整理一下各位同学的分数。”这时,我心想:无论我能不能得奖,我都格外高兴,因为我战胜了自己。
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