1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
冬雪残,春日洒,枯老了一冬天的树上已然出现了绿,软软的,嫩嫩的。我看到它们柔柔的小小的身躯在寒风中咬着牙努力成长。真是春嫩不惧寒啊!我想起了运动会上我满是汗水拖着沉重的步伐冲向终点时的情景。
“要开运动会了,你参加什么节目?”校园中到处都是关于运动会的话语。我被老师报了800米跑。800米!对于我这种每天坐车上学的人,别说跑了,走我恐怕都走不下来!
时间一天天逼近,虽然练了几天,却一点速度都没提上来。老师对我说:别怕,不过800米,不到5分钟而已,不过就是带着一丝寒意的春风。
还是到了这一天。“请参加800米的女生到起点处准备!”我轻轻呼了口气,走向起点。和我一起走的女生竟都是又高又大!望着她们长长的腿,我低头看看自己的腿,叹了口气。唉!我怎么超过她们呀?我小心翼翼地走到我的位置,刚想长呼一口气放松一下心态,可“嘣”一声,枪响了。我被吓得身子一抖,没反应过来发生了什么,看到身边的人都冲了出去,便跟了上去。不到半圈,心中似是被掏空了般,腿脚也轻飘飘的,头却似千斤重,就像头要着地,脚想立起一般。我知道我是太紧张了,告诉自己没事,不到五分钟而已,坚持!腿脚的重量慢慢恢复回来,但却恢复得有点“过”。好重!腿脚竟迈不动了!抬头看一眼前方,那是起点处了。这么半天,只跑了一圈!接下来三圈怎么熬啊!体育老师说过,四圈中第一圈只用60%的力量,第二、三圈可以略微放松,最后一圈要用自己最大的力量,冲向终点。可是我才跑了一圈,就已经很累了。口中一阵腥苦,心中一阵酸苦,仿佛要吐出一口血来。我开始后悔参加800米跑了。“加油!加油!坚持!”我听见鼓声和呐喊声,五十多人大声喊着我的名字,就似那枝干输给绿的营养和水分。尽管绿不想、不敢、不愿意迎接寒风,可枝干猛地输给它营养,它知道它不该浪费了这些营养。冲!可我落下太远,身后没有人,只有前方那么多的背影……
第二圈、第三圈,我始终没有超过任何人,也没被谁超过。又一次经过起点,最后一圈了,此刻我眼前出现了一张软软的大大的床,美美地休息一会儿,睡上一会儿。可再一眨眼,哪里有床?只有无边无际的灰色的地和晕乎乎地看到自己的鞋。我大口大口的喘着气,心仿佛要跳出来。“加油!”一个成熟干练的声音不大不小的叫出来——我最喜欢的老师站在我前方不远处,眼神中满是怜爱与鼓励。这声“加油”似是真的给我这辆车加了油一般,我眼前一亮,加快了步伐。我脑中浮现出刘翔的身影,他仿佛在告诉我他比赛时也非常累,心脏似要跳得把身体捅破。他也要想着自己要超越,但想着的是超越自己,于是便到了终点。我也一样,超越自己就好。眼前的灰中出现了绿!是那冬雪春日中的绿,是咬着牙迎接寒风的绿!绿告诉我应该和它一样咬着牙努力!绿战胜了一切,迎来了春天。
我前面的那个人大口大口喘着气脚步慢下来!我一咬牙,一下子超过了她。我不是最后一名了!我后面还有人!也会有人望着我的背影了!已经有人到了终点,我要努力了!虽不是最早开放的花,却是不被寒风冬雪击跨的千万绿中的一点!
终于,我也开出了花。它不是最美,也不是最早,但却是我心中最珍贵的花。终点,在我身后。
很久以后,每当我想起这个情景,都让我浑身充满力量。学习生活中,也会有勇气和力量挑战困难与挫折。
冬雪残,春日洒,春嫩却不惧寒。绿开出了花,我继续努力!
初春的阳光照进屋内,肆意挑逗着屋内的我。我看着地上活泼乱跳的点点光斑,顿时泪水无声划过,滴落在受伤的腿上。
我是一个爱做梦的女孩,我爱跳舞,崇拜杨丽萍。我经常憧憬着像杨丽萍一样拥有自己的舞台,拥有自己的观众,在万众瞩目下,在万千观众的喝彩声中为他们彰显舞蹈的魅力,诠释舞蹈的真谛。
每天,当第一缕阳光射进小屋的时候,我总会沐浴着它翩翩起舞,我总认为拥有了阳光,便拥有了自信,拥有了坚持梦想的勇气。然而,“吱——”刺耳的刹车声打碎了我所有的梦想,我的腿受伤了,需要动两次手术,而治愈的.可能只有百分之五十,手术如果失败,我的命运只能是此生与轮椅为伴。
泪水再次划过我的脸颊,我害怕做手术,我害怕面对手术失败的命运。
“孩子,陪妈妈出去散散步吧!”妈妈轻轻地推开了我的房门。我转过身去,背着妈妈,闭着眼睛说:“我不去!”
“出去晒晒太阳吧,初春了,天气也不冷作文。”妈妈又说。
“妈——”拗不过妈妈,我被强行推出门。
一路上,我紧紧闭着眼睛,害怕注视太阳。但我仍然可以感觉到春日里阳光的温暖,她轻轻地洒在我的脸上、身上和受伤的腿上。周围依旧是车水马龙,没有因为我的悲伤而增一点黯淡。
“孩子,睁开眼看看。”妈妈不断鼓励我。
昂起头,我慢慢睁开眼睛,映入眼帘的是那熟悉的太阳,金光灿灿。此时的阳光仿佛比平时更加明媚,地上的点点光斑似乎也比平时更加活跃,好像是在为我打气
远处几朵迎春花在残雪中翩翩起舞,竞相开放,散发出迷人的清香。初春刚到,还透着几分寒意,但春嫩不惧寒,迎春花汲取天地雨露,顶着刺骨的寒风,开放了,报告着春天即将来临的信息。是啊,人不是也应该如此吗?只有凭借着坚强的意志,经历磨难才会更加成熟,才能迎接“天之大任”。
第二天,我被推进了手术室,手术很成功!康复后的第一个早晨,那一缕熟悉的阳光又射进我的小屋,我踏着陌生又熟悉的步伐,翩翩起舞。
春嫩不惧寒,生活的苦难更让人性情坚韧,意志增强。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
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