“乱花渐欲迷人眼,浅草才能没马蹄”。
——题记
暖风习习,花香缕缕,春天又悄悄走来,都说“一年之计在于春”,春,确实活力四射的季节,它送走了冬的严寒冷酷,迎来了万物复苏、生机盎然。对于春的归来,我总能感受到一丝喜悦,然而,却似乎早已习以为常。今年春天,我开始有了新的感触,开始发现,春天里的一切,更能让我,收获一份感动!
春日晨曦下,微风中,我走进了自然,放飞身心,满怀着愉悦的心情,感受春风的强大力量。春风,在不知不觉间吹拂而过,吹散的一切对冬日的眷恋,吹醒了睡梦中的万物。大树脱下了沉重的外套,新芽也在春风中萌动;小草揉了揉惺忪的睡眼,伸了个懒腰,探头而出;簇簇迎春花的枝头缀满了黄色花蕾,像是在给路过的人们,展现自己的青春靓丽,春风用自己的温柔抚摸万物,唤醒自然,春风,感动了苏醒的它们,更感动了旁观者的我。
如果说春风是一首诗,那么河边杨柳定是诗中最令人流连的妙笔。古句道:“不知细叶谁裁出,二月春风似剪刀”,温暖又和煦的春风,造就了拥有纤细发丝的柳树。在春风的抚爱中,它们尽情地卖弄自己的秀发,浅浅的绿意渲染出浓浓的生气。细听春风絮语,我仿佛也感受到了春日的生机勃勃,而不仅仅只是喜悦罢了。
“好雨知时节,当春乃发生”,不经意间,春雨悄然而至,我静坐在窗内,观望窗外春雨把桃花染红,把山峰绘绿,把那门前小径,把世间万物,变得富有生命活力。观望着眼前春雨“润物细无声”的付出,我早已冥冥之中心头涌上一份感动……
待到雨后天晴,独自漫步于门前小径,也何尝不是一件有趣的事?因为你会发现,大自然里吮吸了雨水的万物似乎都充满了朝气。路旁不起眼的小草虽没有鲜花的缤纷美丽,却努力着、尝试着用自己不怕困难的坚贞与勇气去打动他人,让更多人成长。呢喃的燕子,欢快的百鸟,也都纷纷莺歌燕舞,为人们演奏出一曲春天的交响乐,为春天增添了一丝乐趣。
春风唤醒自然,春雨滋润万物,小草默默坚强,百鸟引吭高歌……春天里的一切都那么美好,春天里的它们把人类感化,从懵懂到真理,从仅仅喜悦到开始有了特殊感受,今年春天,我很感动!
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
导入:
第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
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