我曾经听到过这样一句话:“每一个生命都有一段故事,每一个生命都是一个不朽的传奇。”或许你会说:“有谁在意过一只小小的蚂蚁?它虽有生命,但不值一提。”如果你这样想就错了,每一个生命来到这个世界上都不容易,所以,请尊重每一个生命。
10月5日下午,我跟着德州晚报的小记者去德州人民公园里的去看那些大自然的精灵——动物们。一进门就看到一只大灰狼,懒懒地趴在笼子里的地上。老师说:“它是狗的近亲。”嘿,长得还真像一只大狗。它对我们的到来一点儿也不感兴趣,眯着双眼理都不理。别看它现在老实,可是我知道,在草原上可是连豹子都不敢轻易招惹它的,威风得很呢。继续往前走,我们还看到了高大的双峰驼、笨重的黑熊、健壮的果下马、美丽的孔雀、凶猛的老虎、强壮的狮子。小时候,我走到这里就不敢走了,跟个老鼠似的躲在爸爸怀里,不敢抬头。现在想起来还挺不好意思呢。一会儿就来到了我最喜欢的猴山,里面有好多猴子,你追我跑,爬上爬下,一个个玩得兴高采烈,猴王高高地坐在山顶,傲然地看着它的子民,还真有大王的样子呢。我们都哈哈地笑了起来。
出了动物园,我们又去了旁边的趣味园。这是让游人和动物们亲密接触的地方,人们在这里可以亲手喂动物吃东西,还能轻轻地抚摸它们呢。
这次参观动物园我有了深深地感触:动物们也是地球大家庭中的一员,它们和我们一样也有生存的权利,它们是我们的朋友,是我们的邻居。我们应该去了解它们,爱护它们。这样我们的地球才能健康、美好,才能更加丰富多彩!
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
A tiger is a kind of catamount animal. It looks like a cat, but much bigger than a cat. A tiger is very ferocious and it eats mainly meat. It has yellow and black streaks all over its body and it looks very beautiful. Its tail is long and strong and it can hit its quarry dying.
Tigers live in the thick forests and small animals in the forests are tigers' food.
During the past years, many forests have been cut down and the living conditions of the tigers are becoming worse and worse. There are fewer tigers left in the world now. Tigers are the animals of the world, and they should have their own living spaces. We must do our best to protect the tigers and their living environment.
动物是人类的好朋友,我们应该爱护它们、保护它们。可今天的一幕却让我十分气愤。
今天,我在散步时觉得有些累,便准备休息一会儿,然后回家。忽然两个男孩吸引了我,他们一起拿着废弃的档杆,我开始没有看懂它们在干什么,后来,当他们将档杆对向鸟窝时,我才发现他们是要掏鸟窝,我想去阻止,可晚了,鸟窝已经“扑”的一声掉在了地上,我看不下去了,准备回家,可一不小心瞥见他们刚才掏的\'燕子窝,里面趴着奄奄一息的小燕子,嘴里发出近似绝望的般的微弱哀鸣声。看到这里一丝愧疚之意涌上心头。
等他们离开后,我想:如果幼鸟就这样死了,鸟妈妈一定会很伤心的。想到这里,我小心翼翼地将地上的鸟窝捡起来,然后用绳子将鸟窝绑在路边的小树枝丫上,以防幼鸟受到二次伤害。做完这些后,心里顿时轻松了许多,我便高兴的回家了。
回到家,我心想:他们长这么大,难道没有听说过要保护动物吗?它们可是一个鲜活的小生命呀!如果全世界的人都像他们一样,动物就会灭绝。我们的美好家园还怎么去创建?所以,关爱生命,共创美好未来的同时,也请我们一起保护动物吧!
今天中午,全家都在家中,很没劲,于是我们打算到外面去走走。突然,我看到在一家饭店前面摆了个笼子,里面放了一只小兔子,灰白色的毛,很漂亮!但当我看到笼子上面的时候,我很生气,你们知道吗?上面有一块木板,写着:野兔子,现***现烧。
我看到了以后,心里想:多么可恶的人类啊!竟然忍心***了这么可爱的小兔子,它是那么无辜,为什么要去***它呢?为了满足某些人的食欲而把人们的好朋友兔子***了,岂不太残忍?
多吃了野味会患病的!万一兔子吃了不好的东西,你吃下去了就会流入血液里。到时候你患病了不仅要去医院,还要花钱。我们可以不吃野味的。
马上要去秋游了,我们可千万不能给动物们随便喂吃的,因为动物们跟人类不同,有的动物喜欢吃草,有的动物喜欢吃自己的饲料……各种各样的动物喜欢吃不同的东西,如果你给猴子吃了点饼干,别人给它吃了些鸡蛋什么的,不久这只猴子就死了。什么原因?吃得多撑死的!
现在有好多人赶时髦,都爱穿皮草大衣,可那些人有没有想过那些皮草大衣是怎样做成的吗?是把动物的皮剥下来才做成的。但人们有没有想过呢?如果人们不再买皮草大衣,商家卖不出去,就不会有人去打猎,不会有人剥动物皮了!当你在美滋滋地看着皮草大衣的时候,却不知道动物们的心在流血。
动物是我们的朋友,保护动物从我做起!
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