前天去了一趟兰州,在那儿呆了三天,看到我们甘肃的省会城市如此的雄伟壮观,我不禁感到了由衷的感叹和自豪!
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火车坐到五点多,我们来到了兰州。兰州是我们甘肃省的省会城市,它十分大,也可以这样来形容,它大得有好几个清水县那样大,大得让人难以琢磨到它的位置,我刚开始还担心兰州会不会很热,但是这个假想立刻被胜于雄辩的事实所代替了。兰州很凉,就像兰州铁路局早上的广播主持人说的:“三伏天下雨还能把人的身体浇透,除了兰州也是没哪儿了。”我坐在火车上,看着窗外淅淅沥沥的小雨,想着兰州的温度,不禁忍俊不禁,笑了起来,思绪万千。
刚到兰州的时候,气温逐渐降低,由刚在火车上看见的牛毛细雨到了足以震天撼地的瓢泼大雨,虽在当头是艳阳高照但是那雨仍然像断了线的珠子似的飘飘洒洒的落下来,落下来再溅到地上,从地上又飞速的弹到人们的身上,只要遇见一辆很大的公共汽车,那么你就要遭殃,因为这些公共汽车会让你的身上全部都是水。
初至兰州,眼里全是新奇,想着我们甘肃省的省会城市到底是一座怎么样的城市,或大、或小、或威武、或雄壮、或凉、或热,面对这座未知的城市。我不禁感到了一丝丝的茫然无措,但是很快,这种心里就被那一丝丝的惊叹、快乐所代替了。
兰州里的\'美食很多,但是我最喜欢的还是兰州的牛肉面,兰州牛肉面不同于我们这儿的一样,他们是把牛肉面当做早餐,早上起来,吃一碗牛肉面神清气爽,再乘上一碗滚烫的面汤,难道不是人间一道独特的美味吗?
兰州的第一天就在还欢声笑语中度过了,好期待第二天的到来!
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
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第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成\"总—分—总\"结构
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第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
当一觉睡醒来时,兰州早已是天明,已经十分暖和,我走出宾馆,看着那灿烂的阳光,不禁觉得十分开心,因为今天我要去兰州最棒的一个景点,那就是兰州的五泉山。
兰州的五泉山是一座十分高的山峰,它里面有兰州的唯一一个动物园,我十分喜欢动物,所以也就愿意去五泉山的兰州动物园去看看,去长长见识,去看看那些只能在电视中看见的一些凶猛的动物,一想到这些,我就觉得十分的开心。
坐上了兰州的137路公交车我们就到了五泉山的山脚下,仰望着这座高高的山峰,我不禁感到十分的畏惧与敬畏,刚到那山脚下,我就觉得十分激动,没等爸爸妈妈说话,我就一股脑的跑了上去,那仿古的建筑群的上面一个横匾,那个横匾上有书法家五泉中人刘尔析提的三个苍劲有力的大字:“五泉山”,可能不管是谁来看时都会有一股简简单单的敬仰之情吧!
走进里面,我看到了一座威武庞大的雕像,雕刻的是汉朝的大将军霍去病,我很不解为什么兰州市的五泉山要雕刻霍去病将军的雕像,再后来才得知在有一次霍去病大将军在行军的时候。他的军队们都十分饥渴,所以他便拿着他自己的马鞭,在皋兰山北侧捅了五口洞,过了不一会,就有五眼泉水涓涓细流般流出,这五眼泉水都十分的清澈,也十分的美味甘甜可口,大家都抢着喝,喝了之后,大家都神清气爽。这五眼泉水一为甘露泉,。二为掬月泉,三为摸子泉,四为蒙泉,五为惠泉。这些泉水位置不同,味道也不一样,所以这五眼泉水便成了五泉山的一大景观。
兰州的人们只要来了五泉山都就会来到霍去病大将军的雕像前,虔诚的作做着礼拜,一直用手摸着“去病”二字他们一直在祈祷着能将身体里所有的病痛都去掉,这虽然是一些力所能及的礼拜,但是却仍然展示到了兰州人的虔诚。
五泉山之旅让我十分开心,下午就要去看动物园了,我的心情已经被动物园拉向了远方!
战争是残酷的,一场战役结束,整个战场往往是尸体遍布,这就意味着战场上就不会有温暖。真的都是这样吗?不,当然也有例外,比如彼克和特然的故事。
彼克是一名海军陆战队中士,在第一次世界大战时,他被任命到后勤部服役。彼克刚到后勤部服役的第二天,特然也来了,特然是一只战场上的流浪小猫。他们相逢在有些许弹片的战场上,他们没有发现彼此时双目无光,发现彼此后先楞了一下,继而微笑着面对着彼此。彼克见特然既可怜又幸运,可怜的是它已经饿得皮包骨了,幸运的是特然居然在残酷的战场上没有像那些短命的士兵一样死去,同时又很幸运的遇到了心地善良的彼克。我更佩服特然,它已经饿得两腮深陷,走路打晃了,还能鼓起勇气朝彼克微笑,好像在说:“你是个好心人,求求你,赏给我点吃的吧”!霎时间彼克本能地从内衣口袋里摸索半天,才摸出仅剩的自己都舍不得喝的一袋牛奶,毫不犹豫地喂给了这只可怜的小猫咪。不仅如此,彼克看到牛奶就像一支水枪喷出的水柱似的涌入猫儿的口中,他的嘴角露出了微笑。从此,他们两个成了形影不离的伙伴,互相温暖着彼此。你瞧,他们携手迎向远方的脚步都变得轻盈起来了。
即使是在战争时期,只要我们心中有爱,温暖的画面也不会受到炮火的影响,更何况是和平年代呢?让我们的身边多些温暖的时刻吧!
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第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
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