I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
今天来翰林写作。今天的课程和以前不同。今天老师让我们自己创作漫画。以前只看漫画,今天想创作漫画都想不起来了。
我正想着,突然眼前一亮,一个好主意浮现在脑海。然后,稍微修改一下,我就搞定了。故事是这样的:有一栋三层楼,上面住着三个人。一楼的人爱去外面喝楼上花的露水,二楼的人爱采石榴?三楼的人爱打大刀。有一天二楼的人来阳台或者晒石榴?一楼还接露水,但大刀手的大刀不小心掉下来打在石榴上。石榴?他被打了一拳,正好打到了喝露水的人,然后被送进了医院。
刚开始画的不好,修改了很多才画完。
当我拿出作品和同学一起看的时候,他们立刻笑了起来,这让我知道漫画有时候是有用的。
要求:1、主题明确。语言流畅。思路清晰。2、字数在100字以内。
思路点拨
写记叙文要按照事物发展的客观规律叙述,所叙述的内容要交代清楚,条理清晰,重点突出,主次分明,详略得当。
这篇文章也是记叙文,主人公应该用第三人称,时态以一般过去时为主。以主人公为中心线索,以一、两件事件为重点内事件为重点内容去组织材料,反映主人公的形象特征。整个内容情节要合情合理,有真实感,叙述时可按事情发展的顺序进行,同时加以点评。
参考范文
My Classmate
Liu Kai is my classmate. He is a good student and always ready to help others.
One day on his way to school, he saw a little girl crossing the road. A car was coming towards her quickly and the girl was too frightened to move. The car nearly hit her. Just then LiuKai rushed up to her and caught her by the arm. The little girl was saved. She told him where she lived, and he took her home. When LiuKai hurried into the classroom, the teacher had already begun his lesson. He told the teacher why he was late. He was then praised for what he had done.
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