一篇完整的记叙文应该有一个贯通始终的“主干事件”,而八九百字的短篇更是要求作者应该握紧“主干”展开叙述,少生旁逸斜出之笔。否则,将有损于叙事的集中性、连贯性,甚至是全文的中心。如在一篇母爱主题的记叙文中,作者着意叙述的事件是:母亲思儿心切,赶了几十里路来学校看“我”。可就在这“主干”之上,却有一个不小的“枝节”:行文中间
作者用一大段文字专门叙述了母亲捎来的妹妹的信,妹妹在信中鼓励“我”好好学习,而“我”也由衷感慨“有个妹妹真好!”这一旁生的“枝节”,不仅影响了“主干”的自然生长、简约精炼,而且还容易分散甚至误导观赏者关注的焦点。而驱除“枝节”干扰的根本在于:动笔前心有“主干”,过程中咬定“主干”,结束时回望“主干”。
为使所写的'文章,赢得更多读者的喜爱,达到人人乐读的地步,除保留原文的韵味外,应有自己的独到见解,尤其是内容和结构一定要不拘泥与原文,这样,写出的文章才会有新意。还要在反复阅读的基础上,进行合理的加工、修改,使改写后的文章更完美。虽然是改写,也要注意讲究条理清楚、层次分明,前后的照应,保持结构的完整性。
此外,改写还要注意以下几点:
A、注意改写文与原文的联系,明确改写文是建立在原文的基础之上的,两者千万不要割裂开来,两者是相辅相成。
B、改写的时候可以适当发挥想象,围绕原文的中心增加必要的情节、细节和语句。但要注意详略安排要得当。
C、改写不能大段大段地抄写原文,要在理解原文的基础上,用自己的话来写。
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Different people have different views on_____.Some people think that_____,whereas others aegue that __________.
As far as I am concerned, I agree with the opinion that ___________.For one thing,I firmly believe that ___________.For another,_____________.Just think of________,who/which_______.
Taking all these factors into consideration,we may safely come to the conclusion that______.Only if_______can we _______,just as the saying goes,________________.
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In recent years there have been many reports of ________.It turns a new chapter of _________in China,and will have far-reaching effects in the forthcoming years.
The biggest benefit,in my eyes,is that_______.In addition,_______.Finally,______________.
Apart from the benefits mentioned above,we should also face several unavoidable challenges.In the first place,_____________.In the second place,________.What’s more,_______________.In summary,we should_______________.
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Nowadays more and more ______are commonly and widely used in everyday life,ranging from __________to_____________.
The popularity of _______will have a great influence on ______.On the one hand,_________.On the other hand,__________.
To conclude,____________are just like a double-edged sword.With them we may________.However,one point should be kept in mind that we should make sensible use,always being a master instead of slaving of them.
叙事过程中或结束时抒发的感慨、议论太多或明显多余,也是记叙文叙事方面的“多发病症”之一。有作者直接站出来发表大段议论的,也有在人物对话中借某一人物之口“语重心长”般代言的。感慨、议论的“泛滥”不仅直接破坏了叙事的连贯性,甚至还冲淡了叙事,并最终影响了记叙文文体的鲜明性。要避免此类失误,切记一条原则:叙事、描写方是记叙文为文之“主业”,感慨、议论适时点到为止。
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