虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
这是我最头疼的地方,我BEC的成绩里听力是WEAK:(而我在复习计划的前几天是听真题,做点分析,但做下来的效果很差,基本都是错20到15个,虽然天天在空闲的时候都挂着个MP3听真题和BBC,但真的进展很小。听力这玩意,确实不是一天两天的'事情,是长时间积累的结果。所以在最后8天,我改变了策略,我在这里下了听力机经,发现其实版本并不多(没我想像的多,我想起码100来个VERSION),而且每个SECTION的主题很少有重复的,这就为牢固的记忆提供了保障,雅思英语《很高兴,10天,7分》。所以我用了7天,每天4个小时来背机经,然后最后一天把全部看了一遍,然后运气特别好,在考试的时候正好遇到两个SECTION(考的时候我都快笑出来了),而且另外两个部分我都听的不错,虽然最后一篇很有几个没听清楚。
建议:短期复习的朋友,在最后一段时间去背机经是很有用处的,因为听力这东西一定要经过长时间的锻炼(虽然背机经是一个很痛苦的过程),既然没有足够的时间,那就背机经当抱佛脚吧。
毕业前,我把旧书拿出来整理,看到一本本装订好的学习单,从字迹中,我看到自己六年来的变化,感觉是那么模糊,又好像似曾相识,让我不知不觉的跌进了记亿的深渊。
因为妈妈的关系,刚入学的我,对学校一点也不陌生,但是样子像极了木头人,下课时间就做在教室,哪里也不敢去。二年级的我已经知道下课先去上厕所,在去荡秋千,但是偶而会玩到四下无人,才知道要回教室。
三年级是加入武术队的第二年,在懵懂的情况,参加几次比赛和表演都得到大家的肯定,更提升了我对武术的热爱。四年级的时候,因为同学的妈妈很会做点心,所以我学到很多制作点心的方法,也品尝到“铜锣烧”、“姜饼屋”的美味等等,至今心中还浮现一道道香喷喷的甜点,让我不禁想流口水。
分班后的五年级是再次面临另一种心情的开始,因为这时的我们好像长大的更多,已经是学校的高年级。印象最深刻的是运动会的大队接力,在我们同心协力的合作 下,打进了强敌环伺的绝赛,最后夺得冠军。升上六年级后,我也成熟了不少,已经懂得做读书计划的重要性,凡事都能在自己规定的时间内完成。最近刚结束的园游会,是六年来最后一次,也是最精采的活动。那一天,大家在叫卖声、欢笑声及喧哗声,让心中的情绪“HIGH”到最高点。
六年即将过去了,虽然心里有百般不舍,但是现在回想起来,在这些日子里,我学会了适应新的环境,也学到了如何过团体生活,更知道如何关心週遭的人事物,也能适时的原谅别人。最后我将带着六年的“学习财富”及满满的祝福,展翅高飞。
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这时主语和谓语都已经进行了改善。但是你问还有提升空间吗?当然有!
太多专业数据会给人捏造的痕迹,缺乏真实性。考官会质疑数据的出处。
例:A survey indicates that the number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 percent in China.(一项调查显示。。。)
"65%"让文章看起来有些假,有捏造的嫌疑。"A survey"又不够具有代表性。
雅思考试有条写作指令叫做:Include relevant examples from your own experience. 所以很多考生在考试时都喜欢使用举例法(exemplification。这一扩展方式本身无可厚非,然而在使用时几种例子是不适合的。
2. Many schools demand the students wear uniforms. Some people think that such a practice can undermine their personality and individuality. What is your opinion?
3. Some people believe that pet animals such as cats and dogs cannot be kept in the cities, especially in busy modern cities. Do you agree or disagree?
4. Nowadays, teenagers cause a lot of social problems due to lack of discipline. Some people think that parents should spend more time staying with their children. Do you agree or disagree?
5. Nowadays, many children have their part-time jobs. Some people say that doing part-time jobs is useful, but others argue that children should enjoy their childhood. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
6. Some people think if students want to learn a foreign language, it is advisable for them to learn it in the native countries where the language is actually spoken. Whats your opinion? Give your reasons.
7. In some countries, there are women taking the positions of police officers, while some people believe that women are not suitable to work in the police force. DO you agree or disagree? Write your reasons and give examples in your experience.
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