三十而已,到底是在揭露现实的伤疤还是在丰满理想的羽翼;
它讲述的是现实的故事,贴近人们的生活,各个层级,用女人的口吻讲述这个世界对人们的安排;
觉得这是一个很好的角度,男人做了太长时间的主角,为了平衡,这是迟早的事情。
但这个故事对于我,二十几岁的我,我看到是是理想的羽翼在展翅,首先,是许幻山的家庭,在上海的立足的资本,美好的婚姻,能***老婆;或者是身在美好之中,才让许幻山迷失了自己;但这确实我的梦,或者说是我们的梦,千千万万人的梦。
它在讲述故事的同时,他还在勾芡我们梦想的样子,在故事里,我们起码有了选择的资格,在这里,我们只能像是王曼妮一样,漂泊着,没有任何的归属感,或是某一天又离开着个匆忙的城市,终归于在那小街小巷,兴不起一点风浪;又或是在街巷中受不住尘世的重量,又想回到那城市之中,做一个漂泊者;让人羡慕的还有那钟晓芹,又是一个完全不同的人设,映照的是更多的人,生活中的每一个人都能找到归属的情感;最让人羡慕的莫不是那财务自由的梁正贤,绝大多数男人都想要的样子;但是几乎没人能做到。
不仅是三个人的感情还是三个人的胸怀,能力,都是在努力和汗水中得到的;
这才是生活的意义。
剧中有一段钟晓芹妈妈在得知晓芹离婚后,对两个人的谈话,在我眼里看来,堪称父母的典范,不得不说,这位妈妈的三观很正,这才是做父母的应有的样子。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
王漫妮在上海打拼了8年,从合租房变成了郊区的独立租房,大牌衣服、包包、鞋有很多,每天还要装个小资的喝杯拿铁,时不时的还去酒吧消费一下……这样的消费,恐怕也只有在电视剧中才有。当然,现实生活中可能这种人也有很多。
作为一个普通的工薪阶层(土豪除外),这样的消费方式未免太过奢侈了。
相比与王漫妮,我工作9年给自己置办一套房产,也算是对自己的努力付出、加班熬夜有个交代了。
您好!
您知道吗?每当我走过语音室时,总会透过明净的玻璃窗去看看里面的设备,语音室里的一切对于我来说都是那么新奇,那么吸引人。跟着您,在高科技设备装配的语音室里学英语,是我当时最大的愿望。可是,自语音室建好以来,您从未带同学们进去参观过,更没带同学们进去上过一节课,这使得我的愿望变得那样渺茫。
王老师,记得您每次在我们教室里上课时,起码有三分之一的同学在小声说笑,因此,教室里总是乱哄哄的`,可您却很少制止。王老师,维持课堂秩序是您的职责呀,您为什么不去制止他们?还有,您每次提问学生时,一旦同学回答不上来,您总会露出一副不耐烦的神情,为此,许多同学感到很伤心,好多同学也不喜欢上您的课。
王老师,学校培育了我五年,我希望学校越办越好,希望老师能教得开心,我们也能学得开心。因此,我诚心诚意地给您提几条建议,希望您能采纳。
一、每周带同学们到语音室上一次英语课。
二、您不要不管那些上课小声说笑的同学。作为一名教师,您有责任对他们进行批评和教育。
三、今后,请您对那些回答不上问题的同学多一些宽容和理解,并耐心地讲解,这些同学会非常感激您的,他们也会越来越喜欢您的。
王老师,如果您能采纳我的建议,我将十分开心。我坚信您一定会成为我们心中的好老师!
祝您工作顺利!
您的学生:张辉君
3月26日
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