Last Saturday,with all my classmates and teachers,I went on a trip to the nature park .We departed from school at about half past seven and spent about 40 minutes travelling to our destination.When we first entered into the park,all of us were shocked by the natural beauty and the hamonized ecosystem of the park.Then,happily we were playing games on the sand; swimming in the pool and taking with our friends on the grassplot.After lunch break,our programs were continued with an contest of story narating held and each of us was immerging within the funny stories We left the part at about 5 o'clock,and unitl now,most of us are still haunted by the beautiful memory of that trip.
In haimen there is a park. it’s a big and beautiful park. it has two gates. they are the north gate and the west gate. many people park their bikes in front of the gates.
There is a shop at the north gate. when you go into the park through the north gate, you will find a large square on your right and you will see lots of trees and flowers around you. in the west of the park, there is a playground.
Sometimes some children fly kites on it and some people sit on the grass and chat. in the middle of the park, there is a lake. there are many boats on it. there is a hill in the east of the park.
The park is very beautiful. i love it very much. will you come to visit it some day?
Green grasses,blue lakes and beautiful mountains are waiting for you!Welcome to colorful nature pare!
There is a clean river. There are some colorful flowers. There is a beautiful mountain near the nature park. The air is fresh. The sky is blue. The clouds are white. The tree is green. The bridge is tall. The grass is green. I can run on the grass. There is a path near the lake. There are many fish in the lake. There is a forest in the nature park. There are many trees on the mountains. There are many flowers near the path.
Look! There are some birds in the sky. One, two, three…… oh! So many!
We take out our kites, mine are butterfly, my friends are birds, all are so funny. I start to let my kite fly, but it could not, so I run faster and faster, then my kite flies, I go let go it gradually. A few minutes later, my friends’ kites are also flying.
Seeing our kites flying, I feel so free. Today, I have a great time.
现在我已经放寒假了,我很开心,可以和朋友们玩。朋友们和我约定风来了,我们就去公园放风筝。今天风终于来了,早饭过后,我和朋友们去公园。我们拿出自己的'风筝,我的是蝴蝶样,朋友的是鸟的样子,都很有趣。我开始让风筝飞,但是飞不起来,因此我跑得越来越快,风筝终于飞起来了,我慢慢放飞。不一会儿,朋友们的风筝也飞起来了。看到我们的风筝飞着,我觉得很自由。今天,我玩得很开心。
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