修改作文用英文怎么说【一】
要全面考虑，忌失之于偏
有一《关于命名表彰上海市双拥模范区县和爱国拥军模范街道(乡镇的决定》初稿，在决定命名16个区县为"上海市双拥模范区县"、146个街道(乡镇为"上海市爱国拥军模范街道(乡镇"后提出：
希望上述受到表彰的.区县和街道(乡镇再接再厉，不断创新，继续努力，开拓进取，进一步做好双拥工作，进一步巩固和发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶。
这段中，只是要求受到表彰的区县、街道(乡镇"进一步巩固和发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶"是不够的，本市各单位和驻沪各部队都要这样做。同时，表彰性的《决定》最后写"希望"时，希望的对象一般包括两个：一个是受到表彰的单位(个人，希望他们再接再厉，另一个是其他单位(个人，希望他们向受到表彰的单位(个人学习。公文中，特别是提出的希望和要求，要全面考虑，兼顾各方，反映出整体思维。
后来，这段修改为：
希望上述被命名的区县和街道(乡镇再接再厉，不断进取，争取双拥工作再上新台阶。
并在其后补充了一段：
希望全市各级党政组织和驻沪各部队向上述被命名的区县和街道(乡镇学习，进一步做好双拥工作，巩固发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶。
这样，"希望"的对象比较周全，所提的要求也比较切合实际。
修改作文用英文怎么说【二】
dear mike,
how are you? recently from the internet, i’ve found you a new book, the web’s greatest hits 20xx, by lynie arden, published by barnes & noble books in oct. 20xx. the book can be a good one-stop guide to the best sites on the internet, selected by a web expert. with its help, you’ll stop searching blindly through the internet.
the list price is $9.95, but you can buy one at $5.97, 40% 0ff. the membership can save you another 60 cents. the book can reach you within 24 hours under your order. if you spend $25 or more, the delivery is free. try www. barnesandnoble.com. i hope you will like the book.
yours,
li hua
修改作文用英文怎么说【三】
Dear mom:
This is the first time i write a letter to y ou in English,so i think i should say tha nks to you frist. That you give life to me,that you bring me to the world.
Sometimes i may make you angry,because i don`t adjust my fa ult.But i am sure i won`t do that things again,i think i have grown up,i must be able to tell the things true or fault.
My d ear mother ,you are the greatest perso n in the world,you are the most import ant person in my life.the love you give me is the greatst one in the world. My dear mother,i have to stop here,bec ause my vocabulary is very limited ,i wil l write more letters in the future ,at tha t time i can write a much longer one to you.
Thank you again ,my dear mother!
Yours son,
xxxx.x.x
修改作文用英文怎么说【四】
dear cathy,
i’m very glad to tell you something about china's second manned spacecraft shenzhou vi.
it was launched at 9 o’clock, oct 12, 20xx. and it returned to earth at about half past 4, oct 17. shenzhou vi orbited around the earth at a speed of 7.9 kilometers per second and traveled 3.25 million kilometers during the 115 hours and 33 minutes’ journey in space. the total cost is rmb900 million . aboard the craft were two astronauts, fei junlong and nie haisheng, who conducted a lot of scientific experiments. their journey in space was very smooth. the living and working conditions inside the cabin were very good. their health is in good condition.
ok, i have to stop here. looking forward to hearing from you soon!
yours,
li bo
修改作文用英文怎么说【五】
dear chen lin and li hua,
i’ve just been out of hospital for a couple of days. right now ，i am really fine, but without your support, i wouldn’t have got better so soon.
you know, the traffic accident gave me a very hard blow, both physically and mentally. in the first two weeks after my injury, i almost lost my confidence in my future life. it is the doctors’and your encouragement that rendered me much strength and determination。
anyway, i learned a lot from this unfortunate accident. i’d neverrealize how important your friendship was to me. i can’t say anymore to show my gratitude for your taking turns keeping me company,and getting me through the blue time.
next saturday, my mother would give a recovery party to thank myfriends. i really want to see you there. so, 7 o’clock at my place,ok?
your truly,
li ming
修改作文用英文怎么说【六】
Dear Tom,
亲爱的汤姆，
My name is Li Ming. I am a primary school student in Hunan province. I’m10 years old. I like English very much, i hope to be your best friend ,then i can learn english from you,and you can learn chinese from me ,too. My favourite fruit is apple, because it’s sweet and healthy. My favourite day is Tuesday, we have computer, P.E. and English. It’s a great day. Tell me somethingabout yourself, please
我叫李明，我是湖南一名小学生，我10岁。我喜欢英语，并希望能成为你的好朋友，那样我就可以向你学英语，而你也可以向我学中文了。我最喜欢的水果是苹果，因为它很甜，又有益身体健康。我最喜欢的日子是周二，因为那天有计算机课、电脑课和英语课。那天真是个好日子。请告诉我一些关于你的事情吧。
Your pen pal,
你的笔友
Li Ming
黎明
修改作文用英文怎么说【七】
要准确规范，忌前后不一
有一指令性通知的初稿，提出了三点要求：
1.明晰责任、齐抓共管。2.分流管理、分级负责;3.查改并举，重在治理。
这段中，第一点、第二点的前半句用的都是顿号，而第三点前半句用的却是逗号，前后不一致。还有，第一点的结尾用的是句号，而第二点的结尾用的却是分号，也是前后不一致。这些都应该统一起来，才显得对称。公文的标点符号使用不能马虎，要注意顿号、逗号、分号、句号等点号表示的是不同层次的停顿，使用得当，句子就能形成起伏均匀的节奏感。后来，这段修改为：
1.明晰责任，齐抓共管。2.分流管理，分级负责。3.查改并举，重在治理。
这样，通过标点的规范使用，可以表明"三点要求"相互之间的平等、平行关系。
