所谓议论文,最关键之处在于论述得当。支持句应使主题句更加令人信服,令考生的想法更加鲜明的呈现在考官面前。然而,中国考生在论述时往往存在一些误区:
选好词汇之后,就选择搭配,但搭配的组合一定要与自己的观点相符:
influences我们通常都和positive / negative 搭配;advertisements也可以分为commercials和non-profit adverts;people可以用the general public替代,所以句子如下:
Commercials and non-profit adverts have both positive and negative influences on the general public.
这就是将简单句进行华丽变身的方法啦~最后环球君要给大家出个题目哦!
本周考题
Community service is helpful for both students and society.
这句话老师的扩句版本为
Establishing community service as a compulsory part in high school education is not only helpful for students but also meaningful for whole society.
虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
妈妈单位发了几张《唐山大地震》的电影票,因为妈妈要参加市里的培训班,不让请假,所以我就和哥哥的同学,还有姑妈一起去图书馆的放映厅去看这个大片。
这个故事是讲:在唐山大地震中,有一个女孩她和她的弟弟同时被压在了巨大的石板下时,当时只能救一个人,这时她的妈妈选择了弟弟。这个可怜的\'小女孩在坚硬的石板的压迫下,还要承受被亲生母亲抛弃的伤痛,为此,这个小女孩恨死了她的妈妈。
还好,在幸运之神的眷顾下,这个小女孩活了下来,被一对好心的解放军夫妇领养,并且健康地长成了一个漂亮懂事的好女孩。她的养父母为了让她去寻找亲生母亲,给她留了一大笔钱,这是一种多么伟大的高尚的情怀呀!
在汶川地震时,这个女孩积极地参加了救援工作,无意之中遇到了她的弟弟。到了弟弟家,她的亲生母亲跪在地上,请求她的宽恕。女儿通过这次汶川救援工作,、理解了母亲当时无奈的选择,原谅了她的母亲。
这部片子带给我的震撼不仅只有这些,还有那些在影片中,满身淤泥的解放军叔叔们,他们在抗震救灾的过程中,奋不顾身,英勇拼搏,有的伤了,有的还奉献出了自己的生命,却从没发出怨言,这些人更值得我们尊敬、爱戴。
自然灾害是可怕的,但只要我们万众一心、众志成城,就一定能战胜困难,赢得胜利!
灾难只会让我们更加团结,团结必定使我们战胜灾难!
此类段落不论字数多少,都给人空虚的感觉。考生往往为了凑足篇幅而“不择手段”。表面看来扩展了许多,但仔细永远只有一个意思。不得不让考官觉得即单调又啰嗦。
2. Many schools demand the students wear uniforms. Some people think that such a practice can undermine their personality and individuality. What is your opinion?
3. Some people believe that pet animals such as cats and dogs cannot be kept in the cities, especially in busy modern cities. Do you agree or disagree?
4. Nowadays, teenagers cause a lot of social problems due to lack of discipline. Some people think that parents should spend more time staying with their children. Do you agree or disagree?
5. Nowadays, many children have their part-time jobs. Some people say that doing part-time jobs is useful, but others argue that children should enjoy their childhood. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
6. Some people think if students want to learn a foreign language, it is advisable for them to learn it in the native countries where the language is actually spoken. Whats your opinion? Give your reasons.
7. In some countries, there are women taking the positions of police officers, while some people believe that women are not suitable to work in the police force. DO you agree or disagree? Write your reasons and give examples in your experience.
不能过于空洞,也不能脱离现时,否则就失去了举例的意义。
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这时主语和谓语都已经进行了改善。但是你问还有提升空间吗?当然有!
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