雅思例题作文多少字【一】
时间状语和地点状语，都是你的扩句好朋友，不信我们来看：
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money in their early ages.(时间状语
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money on luxurious purchases.(名词状语
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money on souvenirs.(名词状语
即使是状语，也可以通过叠加将句子变得更加丰满。有能力的烤鸭当然可以通过状语从句定语从句等等来让句子更不一样。
雅思例题作文多少字【二】
太多专业数据会给人捏造的痕迹，缺乏真实性。考官会质疑数据的出处。
例：A survey indicates that the number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 percent in China.（一项调查显示。。。）
"65%"让文章看起来有些假，有捏造的嫌疑。"A survey"又不够具有代表性。
雅思例题作文多少字【三】
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这时主语和谓语都已经进行了改善。但是你问还有提升空间吗?当然有!
雅思例题作文多少字【四】
此类例子往往缺乏客观性和说服力，由于第一人称的局限导致所叙述事件难免“鸡毛蒜皮”。要明白，个人不代表整体。
例：I keep my dog to avoid my loneliness and I find a lot of fun.
这样的例子让人犹如在看记叙文，和议论文很不搭调。
