导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
咸咸的海风,金黄的沙滩,蔚蓝的海水,无不展示着创世神对美的见解,这里便是我最喜欢的海滨景区——小梅沙。虽然这里并未有传说中的椰林树影,但是仔细玩味,你就会发现小梅沙与众不同的美。
清晨的小梅沙,有一种静谧的美。我早早起床来到这里。虽然是清晨,但这里丝毫不平静。层层叠叠的水波,前推后涌地形成巨浪,在跃到最高处的一刹那,便凌空盛开出一朵朵白花。海水溅在沙滩上,发出清脆响亮的声音。阵阵海风带着大海独有的清新与湿润,把游人旅途中的疲惫吹得一干二净。在这里,耳边是自然的天籁之音,脚下是细软如棉的黄沙,沐浴在如母亲手掌般温暖的阳光下,惬意极了。
转眼到了下午,小梅沙逐渐呈现出一种热闹的美。金黄的沙滩上人山人海。有的在堆着堡垒,有的在玩“大埋活人”……海面上也是热闹非凡。滔天白浪从天际滚滚而来,由远而近,越近越高,越高越响,犹如千军万马一般的巨响瞬间奔腾而至。海水冲刷着沙滩,冲刷去内心的烦躁。人们的欢呼声此起彼伏,欢乐的笑容洋溢在每个人的脸上。
天色渐晚,小梅沙自然和谐的美扑面而来。太阳将海水映得通红,仿佛给大海披上了一件薄薄的红纱衣。海面上闪耀着一串串五彩的花圈。在夕阳的照耀下,每个人的脸上都镀上了一层金色光芒。这一刻,天与海仿佛融为一体,分不清哪儿是天,哪儿是海。这真是天中有海,海中有天。在那个瞬间,我突然感觉自己就是大自然的一个分子。
小梅沙那无与伦比的美,已经深深刻在我的心中。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成\"总—分—总\"结构
点亮蛋糕中间插5字形状的彩色蜡烛,关灯、许愿、吹蜡烛、切蛋糕,我和爸爸妈妈一起分享蛋糕。妈妈亲了亲我的脸,说:“过了今天,佳逸就5岁了!”我对爸爸妈妈说:“过元旦的那天,爸爸说已经到了新的\'一年,我们都长大了一岁。除夕夜,奶奶把压岁钱放在我的枕头下面,对我说到大年初一,就长大一岁了。现在,我过生日,妈妈说我长大了一岁,那是不是一年长3岁呀?”
爸爸妈妈听了,一个是哈哈“小”笑,而另一个却笑得眼泪都流成大海了!我摸摸头,说:“怎么了,我说的不对吗?”妈妈说:“当然不对了!你这个小笨笨!”说罢,又笑起来了。
后来,我才知道,不是一年长三岁,但元旦,春节,生日是三个与我们的生长有关的节日。
I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
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