童年,是五颜六色的。今晚,我们走进小菜叔叔的童年,听他的趣事。
小菜叔叔露出洁白的牙齿,笑眯眯地说起一岁时的故事。他讲的时而快时而慢,还一边做着风趣幽默的动作,有时把手举得老高,有时掐住自己的脸,有时走来走去像回忆什么,搞得大家哭笑不得。
在他讲述完趣事,还让我猜故事名。有的.同学不假思索地举起手,小菜叔叔却在黑板上写了3个字—30法则(思考30秒后再举手),大家只好把手放下来,个个绞尽脑汁认真思考起来。30秒一到,同学们争先恐后地举起手来抢答,“瀑布”、“反击”、“改诗”……,答案许许多多,可小菜叔叔都说是错的,回去再好好想想。
因为时间的关系,所以从一岁,直接连跳到七岁了。这次他想听听同学们七岁的趣事,大概是有些同学胆怯,或者一时想不起什么趣事,所以举手的人很少。见此情景,他说:“想要学习好,就要当小老师。”这话一出,空中立刻出现了密密麻麻的小手。同学们各自讲说了童年发生的趣事,终于轮到小菜叔叔讲了,好奇的我一直在想:什么事情是他七岁时最深刻的呢?是不是和我一样?结果他记忆犹新的是面试,他讲的绘声绘色加上夸张的动作,让所有的同学听得都入了迷。
调皮的时间总是喜欢出来捣蛋,一转眼,就结束了,好想和大家一一分享太多的童年,因为它总是将不完!
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
星期天晚上,我与妈妈一起去诗墙玩。
刚开始我在草坪上又蹦又跳玩得可开心了。过了一会儿,只听见“哎哟”一声,我往远处望去。只见一位小朋友摔倒在在草坪上,正在呜呜地哭呢!他的家长把他连忙抱起来问:“我的小宝贝,你怎么了?”小朋友边哭边用手指指地上,我往地上一看,看见一块香蕉皮。非常显然,小朋友的家长也看到了这块香蕉皮,变高声嚷道:“是谁这么不讲卫生呀?到处扔垃圾。”说完便气冲冲地走开了。我心里也非常气愤,是谁这么不讲卫生呢?
我抬头望去,只见一位青年妇女,边走边吃香蕉。我刚要上前跟她讲道理,只见一位红领巾走到那位妇女眼前,说道:“阿姨,请您不要乱扔垃圾好吗?如果每个人都这样一来,那么这个公园将会成为垃圾场的。”那位妇女低下头,感到非常难堪,忙说:“对不起,我不应该乱扔垃圾。”说完便走了。红领巾走到香蕉皮前,弯腰捡起垃圾扔进垃圾桶里,便离开了。
看到这一幕,我心想:世界上如果这种红领巾越来越多,世界将会越来越美好。
在我的脑海里,有许多记忆珍珠:红色代表开心、蓝色代表难过、黄色代表童年、黑色代表委屈……今天,我又打开了脑海,捧起一颗黄珍珠,一瞬间,我好像又回到了那一天……
那一天下午,爸爸妈妈出去到楼下的超市给我买吃的去了,临走前,妈妈对我说:“如果有事给我们打电话;还有,有人敲门不要开。”我点了点头,便开始拼积木。
我正拼得起劲,突然看见地上有一个黑色的东西,吓得我跳起来就退,可是它紧紧地跟着我。我心想:“这是啥呀?黑不溜秋的,还会追人!它一定是个鬼,我要摆脱他!”于我连滚带爬地跑到了厨房。
这时我看见了一个筐子,便顺手盖了上去。哈!它出不来了。我得意地走起来了,还对它做鬼脸。可是,他竟然出来了,并且筐子也没有动。这可吓了我一大跳,心想:“啊!这个鬼还会穿墙术,我好像打不过他。”我想甩掉它,晕头转脑地跑到了客厅。偶然看到了电话,想起向妈妈求救,马上拨通了电话,带着哭腔向妈妈喊道:“妈妈快来救我,有个鬼要吃掉我!”这时,我看不见了“鬼”,以为它已经走了,就长舒了一口气。这时,妈妈赶回来了。我一回头,又看见了它,吓得一屁股坐在了地上,妈妈问我:“儿子,鬼在哪?”我用颤抖着的手指着它:“那不就是吗!”妈妈见我手指着影子,一头雾水,当她明白是怎么一回事后,大笑起来。我差点就哭出来了:“人家就要被鬼吃掉了,你还笑!”妈妈勉强止住笑对我说:“傻孩子,那是影子。”经过妈妈半天的解释,我才明白那是影子。
轻轻关上我的记忆脑海,我的回忆也戛然而止。
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