我的家乡在衡阳的一个美丽的小镇,那里山青水秀,民风淳朴。
家乡有座美丽的山叫“七宝山”。为什么叫“七宝山”呢?因为有一个神奇的传说:有一个猎人,他每日都在这座山上打猎。有天晚上,他做了一个梦,梦见一个仙人告诉他山上有七只不同颜色的鸟,每只鸟代表一种宝贝,打中哪只鸟山上就会出哪种宝贝,如果打中金色的山上就出金子,打中银白色的就会出银子,打中红色的.就会出铜。
第二日猎人一起来就去寻找那七只鸟。猎人找呀,找呀,终于找到了。他想:我打哪一只呢?如果打中其中的一只,其他的鸟会飞走的。猎人干脆不想了,他开了一枪,一只黑色的鸟应声而落,地马上变成了黑色。猎人把地挖开,下面露出好多好多的煤炭。七宝山的名字就是这样来的。
家乡还有一座水库叫“乌山冲水库”,他是由几座大山围起来的。山里还有许许多多的茂盛的花草树木,有杜鹃花、金银花、竹子、板栗树、蕨、山药等等一些植物。
我爱我的家乡!小朋友们,欢迎你们来我的家乡观光。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
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第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成\"总—分—总\"结构
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
This is my first week in ** Senior Middle School.Everything here is new for me.Our school is an old school but it`s very beautiful.I have 50 new classmates in my class.They`re all very excellent, I think, and I felt a little sad.Because I`m too common.But come to think of it,it`s a very good thing.I believe I can also be very excellent if I study with such excellent classmates.I didn`t know why Ms *** chose me to be the committee of study.But I know it`s a good chance for me to raise my ability.All I can do is do my best in the future.I am sure that Ms *** and my classmates can help me when I do something wrong. Because they`re all very kind.It`s a pleasure to work and study with them.I`m really very happy.I`m not an outstanding student in this class,but I can do the same thing like others.I believe I won`t make anyone disappointed.
美丽的衡阳,如花。四季美,好爱她。春天观雨绵绵,恰是面纱。夏天看白云,梦幻蓝天下。秋天望日出,山似海伴云霞。冬天赏雪情咏诗,神游酒醉怎不夸。市区平整的柏油大道取代了坑洼不平的马路,低矮杂乱的房子不见了踪影,陈旧灰暗的沿江地段已变为美轮美奂的风光带。基础设施完善,“一岛二岸三园六路”。
“一岛”即开发东洲岛,“两岸”即建设湘江、蒸水、耒水两岸风光带,“三园”即新建黄巢、虎形山、雁栖湖3个公园,“六路”即重点推进衡州大道、蒸阳北路延伸、衡云快速干线、船山东路、107国道石鼓段城市化改造、南外环城市化改造等6条主干道建设。文化建设科学“五馆一院一场一廊”,即科学馆、博物馆、图书馆、文化馆、群艺馆、衡阳大剧院、市民文化广场和湘江文化长廊建设。民生项目健全“两区三房”,即城市城区和棚户区提质改造,廉租房、公租房、经济适用房建设。
近年来,衡阳加快推进万套保障房建设、旧城片区改造、“四场一厕”建设、“公共服务六进社区”等家门口工程。片区改造给百姓美丽家园,经适房、廉租房、公租房建设正在实现“居者有其屋”,“五馆一中心”等地标性建筑和景观丰富了市民生活,碧水绕城、绿树成荫、文化味儿十足的沿江风光带成为衡阳新的城市名片,红星美凯龙加快建设、华阳城欣然进驻、城市综合体横穿出世,正给衡阳人带来精彩每一天。不断长大的城市,必然要汇聚越来越多的财富、资源和机遇,催生越来越强盛的产业体系,带来越来越多的发展机遇,并使越来越多的城乡居民享受到高质量的教育、良好的医疗、便捷的交通、发达的信息服务和宜居的生活环境。衡阳的城建理念,正随着城市不断“长大”而“长大”。
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第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
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第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
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