周五,学校举行了“逗拼比赛”,我们全力以赴,拼了一场!
我们与其他三班的合作,拼成的是“元旦快乐”四个大字,材料是书,挺有创意的!
比赛开始了,大家拿着书,有秩序的排成四排。我们拼的是“快”字,而我则是“快”字中的“丿”的第一个,对于我来说是一个极度的挑战,如果我排的有些什么小差错,则会联系到整个“快”字。同学们一排紧接着一排,仔仔细细地摆放整齐,不错,很漂亮,轮到我们这一排了,我的手心在冒汗,跑到指定的位置,我小心翼翼地放下书,其他同学也依次按着顺序,放了下来。乍一看,哟!不错!可又有一个大难题等着我们,书本不够了,怎么办?
“临危不惧”的杨老师神机妙算,动身将一本本书隔些空儿,书不但够了,而且多出了几本!
唉!字儿有些歪,同学们一个个走上前,将书一本本摆正。左看看,右看看,确定摆齐了才肯罢休!原本难度挺大的“快”字在全班同学的共同合作下,迅速地成形了!虽然没有多长时间,但同学们都已经大汗淋漓了!
最后,各班的作品都井然有序地摆放在操场四周,欣赏的时间到了!这是大家最期待的时刻。我们都兴致勃勃地观赏者各班的作品,真是精彩纷呈,让人大饱眼福,收获多多!最令我记忆深刻的是那庞大的龙舟,即使材料用的是泡沫,也能让人眼前一亮,色泽艳丽,大多呈红色,造型奇特。肃然面积巨大,但做工精致,三面红旗迎风招展,上面写着“新年快乐;一帆风顺,前程似锦”等。很有气派,让人见了就生爱慕之心!此时,我浮想联翩,这船前的两条巨龙,栩栩如生,活灵活现,气势磅礴,无人敢来冒犯。如果我们的祖国也能像这两条龙一样宏伟雄大,成为一条所向披靡的“中国龙”,那该多好哇!
“逗拼比赛”,可真逗!我们拼得很快乐,也很尽兴,这个比赛让我懂得了:团结的力量,合作的重要!
一、何为“折衷观点”和“折衷方案”。
很多雅思写作考题的提问方式都是“Do you agree or disagree?”或者“To what extent do you agree or disagree?”。很多刚刚接触雅思的学生甚至是老师认为对于这种提问方式无非就是yes或no两种答案,所以文章的观点也就只能是同意或者不同意了。其实,对于这类提问,也可以采用“折衷”的观点,即“partly agree,partly disagree”(部分同意,部分不同意)。但是前提是一定要在文章中从支持和反对的两方面都阐述一些理由,而且最好再提出一种“折衷”方案。例如,考题问“现在很多人用动物做试验,你同意吗?”,考生可以在文中分别讨论支持和反对动物试验的理由,最后提出动物试验既有好处也有坏处,这就是一种“折衷”观点。除此之外,作者还提出了是否能用动物来做试验主要是取决于试验是否能给人类生活带来显著的改善(比如帮助人类发明治疗Aids的药物),这就属于“折衷”方案。
二、“折衷观点”和“折衷方案”的几种形式。
那么如何提出“折衷观点”呢?“折衷方案”又有哪几种形式呢?下面笔者将对常见的几种安排折衷观点和折衷方案的\'形式,结合相应的考题进行总结。
(1) 兴利除弊
“兴利除弊”应该是一种比较简单的折衷方案,在优缺点类文章中特别常用。即在分析完考题所涉及事物的优缺点之后,在结尾段提出“优缺点都有,我们要兴利除弊”这样的折衷方案。例如以下考题:
The advantages brought by the spread of English as a “global language” will outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
在讨论完英语作为全球性语言的利与弊之后,结尾段可以这样提出折衷观点:
To sum up, it is difficult to tell whether or not the advantages outweigh the disadvantages regarding the spread of English as a global language. What we may have to consider is how to accept this trend as positive while at the same time staying away from its drawbacks.
(2) 平衡发展
很多考题需要考生讨论两种观点,通常会有“discuss both views and give your own opinion”这样的提问要求。很多情况下,文中说到的两种观点表面上看来是完全相反,但其实并不矛盾,可以用“平衡发展”的思路来提出观点。例如考题:
Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.
在讨论完发展旅游的必要性和保护文化传统的重要性之后,结尾段可以这样提出折衷方案:
We should find the right balance between tourism development and cultural protection and I believe the government has a very important role to play here. In my own country, for example, many tourist cities have made effective development plans to successfully attract large numbers of visitors while still preserving their distinct cultural traditions.
(3) 取决于……
有时在讨论完A和B两种观点以后,可以提出类似于“同意A还是B要取决于……”这样的折衷观点,前文讲到的动物试验是否可以进行取决于试验的性质就是属于这样的方案。再比如下面这个例子:
Some people think that the animals should be treated as pets; others think that animals are sources of food and clothing. What is your opinion?
在讨论完动物当宠物养的理由和动物当食物吃的理由之后,结尾段可以这样提出观点:
From my point of view, there is no absolute answer as to whether animals should be treated like pets or as sources of food and clothes. It largely depends on what kinds of animals they are. But what remains undoubted is that we should treat animals with a humane attitude and bear in mind that they are important in preserving nature’s ecological equilibrium.
(4) 解决方法
很多双边讨论型文章中所讨论的两种观点其实是可以通过某种方案来“化解矛盾”的,例如这道考题:
In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should wok in rural areas for a few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss and give your own opinion.
在讨论完“支边”的利(缩小城乡差距)与弊(年轻人丧失自由)之后,我们可以提出这样一种解决方案:
The best solution, therefore, is not to order, but to encourage. We should instill a sense of responsibility in young people and give more incentives to those who are willing to work in difficult areas, so that we can address the problem of urban-rural disparity while respecting whatever decisions new teachers or doctors have made.
太多专业数据会给人捏造的痕迹,缺乏真实性。考官会质疑数据的出处。
例:A survey indicates that the number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 percent in China.(一项调查显示。。。)
"65%"让文章看起来有些假,有捏造的嫌疑。"A survey"又不够具有代表性。
童年就是那些很久没有听到那些很熟悉的名字了,像什么小涣熊方便面,瓶装牛奶,等等一些很小的东西组成的回忆。
记得那个时候经常去买方便面就是为了里面的那一张小小的卡片,得到了卡片之后就不知道面要怎么办了,带回去又怕挨骂,就只有给别人吃了,别人吃完了之后会觉得很可惜,自己的东西就这样被别人吃了心痛很久。可是在和别的小朋友玩的时候,拿出自己收集的卡片的那种自豪就会取代了心痛。
关于瓶装牛奶,我映像最深的就是送牛奶的`阿姨送来的牛奶上经常飘着一层奶皮,我最讨厌喝那个了,可是每次一煮好牛奶,我还是不得不去乖乖的把它吃下去,玻璃瓶子是要留起来的,第二天就有人来回收。
那个时候小,出远门要坐公交车的,被父母带着,在永远拥挤的车子里,听那个售票员嚷,没有买票的补啊,然后一个个把他们找出来,催促着要买票。
现在的我,经常在寻找,在这个城市的角落里找寻,找和我童年有关的回忆,牛奶在超市里买的,不需要再去煮了,自然也不会有那些讨厌的奶皮,可是,不知道为什么,那些牛奶比原来的要难吃很多,味道也不纯正了,公交车换成了无人售票的,车上开始空空荡荡的,很少有人愿意去挤公交了,吃方便面的日子不少了,可是,再也不关心卡片了,焦急的扯开包装,看着表把一顿饭吃完,大概才15分钟的样子,就要象另外一个地方赶,忙碌,越来越忙碌的我,感到的是空虚,开始怀念童年的时候,时间已经不允许了,现在也很难再有那些时候的东西了吧。
虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这时主语和谓语都已经进行了改善。但是你问还有提升空间吗?当然有!
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