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雅思一对一作文修改【一】

要全面考虑，忌失之于偏

有一《关于命名表彰上海市双拥模范区县和爱国拥军模范街道(乡镇的决定》初稿，在决定命名16个区县为"上海市双拥模范区县"、146个街道(乡镇为"上海市爱国拥军模范街道(乡镇"后提出：

希望上述受到表彰的.区县和街道(乡镇再接再厉，不断创新，继续努力，开拓进取，进一步做好双拥工作，进一步巩固和发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶。

这段中，只是要求受到表彰的区县、街道(乡镇"进一步巩固和发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶"是不够的，本市各单位和驻沪各部队都要这样做。同时，表彰性的《决定》最后写"希望"时，希望的对象一般包括两个：一个是受到表彰的单位(个人，希望他们再接再厉，另一个是其他单位(个人，希望他们向受到表彰的单位(个人学习。公文中，特别是提出的希望和要求，要全面考虑，兼顾各方，反映出整体思维。

后来，这段修改为：

希望上述被命名的区县和街道(乡镇再接再厉，不断进取，争取双拥工作再上新台阶。

并在其后补充了一段：

希望全市各级党政组织和驻沪各部队向上述被命名的区县和街道(乡镇学习，进一步做好双拥工作，巩固发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶。

这样，"希望"的对象比较周全，所提的要求也比较切合实际。

雅思一对一作文修改【二】

不能过于空洞，也不能脱离现时，否则就失去了举例的意义。

雅思一对一作文修改【三】

这类考生往往缺乏刨根究底的精神，总是在主旨周围绕圈子，不达中心。这也是中国考生的通病，看似八九不离十，却总也不愿把话点破，让考官怎能不又急又气。

在所有的扩展方式之中，因果推理法是最受用也是最透彻的方法。凡事先追溯到其原由，再扩展其结果，这是将主题阐述清晰、论述有力并且具有逻辑感的最佳手段。例如在“出国留学利弊”这一题目之前，若考生单纯说“有可能会使青少年学坏”，难免缺乏说服力，但若紧接着扩展“因为孩子高中毕业后思想上还不成熟，若认识不好的朋友会难以抵抗社会上不好的诱惑”，那么此论点一定会让考官眉头舒展，点头认同。由此可见，善用此推理法会让议论文如虎添翼，事半功倍。

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雅思一对一作文修改【四】

阅读一直是我的强项，中国学生一般都是阅读很强哈，呵呵。在开始复习的前几天，我做了三套真题，分别错了9个，4个，3个，然后我就停下不做了，我想做真题主要是适应雅思考试的方式。接下来的日子，有空的话我就做做《雅思阅读真经》，但总共做了不到10篇。在最后一天做了一套真题，错了6个。考试的时候感觉还不错，但结果不是很理想，没有达到7。5的目标。

建议：1，即使是短期复习，也要尽力去适应雅思的方式，因为雅思很多是细节的题，所以要注意阅读的技巧（关于技巧，其他牛人已经说了很多了）

2，在最后复习阶段，一定要尽全力提高阅读速度（我也知道这不是说提高就提高的，但有这样的意识再加上一些对自己有帮助的方法，还是会有效果的）。我有个建议，大家在阅读的时候不要在心里默读，尽量做到一看到这个单词就反应过来它的意思，然后马上跳过；可以在复习的时候，每次做阅读的时候都这样训练。

雅思一对一作文修改【五】

2. Many schools demand the students wear uniforms. Some people think that such a practice can undermine their personality and individuality. What is your opinion?

3. Some people believe that pet animals such as cats and dogs cannot be kept in the cities, especially in busy modern cities. Do you agree or disagree?

4. Nowadays, teenagers cause a lot of social problems due to lack of discipline. Some people think that parents should spend more time staying with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

5. Nowadays, many children have their part-time jobs. Some people say that doing part-time jobs is useful, but others argue that children should enjoy their childhood. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

6. Some people think if students want to learn a foreign language, it is advisable for them to learn it in the native countries where the language is actually spoken. Whats your opinion? Give your reasons.

7. In some countries, there are women taking the positions of police officers, while some people believe that women are not suitable to work in the police force. DO you agree or disagree? Write your reasons and give examples in your experience.