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前几周,家里电脑上了宽带网,我有幸浏览了你们的网站,致网站叔叔、阿姨的公开信。网站那些精彩纷呈的作文、妙趣横生的童话作品、生动活泼的动画、精妙绝伦的图案深深吸引了我的视线。特别是《小学生同步·互动作文训练》栏目中的\'训练要求、锤词炼句、同步训练……会提高小学生们写作能力,从中将增长知识、开阔眼界,受益匪浅。你们创办和维护网站,为此付出了辛劳的心血和汗水,勤勤恳恳耕耘着“小学生的乐园”。在此,由衷地感谢你们,道一声:“辛苦啦!”
叔叔、阿姨们含辛茹苦地建设网站,我决不辜负你们良苦用心,将加倍努力,锤炼文笔,写出更多、更好的精品文章。
前天,我将二年级至今所写得比较满意的作文(共6篇)一块投稿,其中《打电话》、《隔着铁门走棋》、《钓鱼》被刊登在网站《精品选登》栏目中;《烧火》成为《小学生网上作文》期刊入选作品,小学生作文《致网站叔叔、阿姨的公开信作文》。这些作文字、词、句、段都是经过反反复复地推敲、思考和选择,这些作文均历经了7遍、8遍、9遍……修改而成的作文。作文也陆续登上了《永安报》、《小学生学习报》、《小学生报》等报刊。
本人看了《小学生网上作文》期刊入选作品的通告,虽然这6篇文章都不符合入选的要求,但我迫切希望能入选,并得到稿费和《小学生网上作文》书等。
最后,我给网站制作方面提个建议:网站要是有个语音聊天室,那该有多好呀!这样小朋友们以及老师之间可利用语音相互沟通、交流、交换意见,共同提高写作水平,一定深受小朋友欢迎。
好啦!今就谈到这里,余音后叙!请别忘了发e-maill:给我,或写信哦!
祝网站越办越红火!
倪韵竹 xx年七月十七日
好的文章动静结合、张弛有度有节奏感。句式也是一样,要有变化性,这不仅能使文章更生动,也是语言表达方式的需要和表达能力的体现。句式的`变化,主要是要注意两点:
● 不要从头至尾使用一种句型。
● 长短句结合。
由于语言功底的欠缺和惯用思维,很多人写的文章一种句式到头,如:
I think …
I hope…
He does it.
He will take it
这样的文章虽然意思表达出来了,却显得呆板,欠生动。解决的办法是:
1.间或使用主从复句。
Because he is very much determined, he will carry it out this time. (原因
比较:He is very much determined. He will carry it out this time.
2.使用分词结构句。
The weather being fine, a large number of people went sightseeing.
比较:The weather is fine. A large number of people went sightseeing.
Africa is the second largest continent, its size being about three times that of China.
比较:Africa is the second largest continent. Its size is about three times that of China.
3.使用不定式句。
To be or not to be, that is a question. (莎士比亚
To study or not to study, that is much different.(引申
To do it well, you must plan it well.
比较:You want to do it well. And you must plan it well.
4.倒装句
Only when we fully recognize its importance can we have control of its essence.
比较:After we fully recognize its importance, we can have control of its essence.
No sooner had he arrived home than it began to rain.
比较:He arrived home. And it began to rain.
5.失衡句
whether or not he will come is still unknown to all the people present.
比较:No one present knows whether he will come or not.
That he has done it all by himself is known to everyone.
比较:Everyone knows that he has done it all by himself.
当然,句子并不是越长越好,也不是越复杂水平就越高。凡事皆有度。太多长句的堆砌让人觉得是买弄。有时侯,一个短小精辟的句子可以起到画龙点睛的作用。特别是在文末段尾。比如:
●As a creature, every one knows.
●Actions speak louder than words.
●Practice makes perfect.
“如果你有很多钱,你会干什么?”这是一个非常复杂的问题。有人也许想买一辆昂贵的车,还有人想买一栋豪华的房子。或着有人想经营一个公司等。我也有我自己的想法。
If I have a lot of money, I will publish an English book under my name. Maybe I will be famous someday, because everyone will know the fact that I'm good at English.
如果我有很多钱,我会用我的名字出版了一本英语书。也许有一天我会很出名,因为每个人都会知道我擅长英语的事实。
If I have a lot of money, I will help my best friend to set up a training school. Since this is his greatest dream. If I can make his dream come true, I will be very honorable. I will let him be the boss, but I only want to be his assistant.
如果我有很多钱,我会帮助我最好的朋友建立一个培训学校。因为这是他最大的梦想。如果我能实现他的梦想,我会感到很光荣。我会让他成为老板,而我只想做他的助手。
If I have a lot of money, I will travel to various coast cities. As they are facing the sea, I can spend a wonderful time at the seaside. It is said that the seaside is so wonderful and beautiful. The sunrise is glorious at the seaside and surfing on the sea is very exciting. While facing the sea, I can enjoy endless pleasure. How charming it is while feeling the sea wind blowing to us. It's also wonderful to enjoy the beautiful sunshine on the golden beach.
如果我有很多钱,我会去各沿海城市旅游。他们都面向大海,所以我能在海边度过一个美好的时光。据说,海边是非常美丽和美妙的。海边的日出很美,在海边冲浪也很刺激。面对大海,我可以享受到无穷的乐趣。多么迷人,感觉到海风吹向我们的时候是多么的迷人啊。在金色的`沙滩上享受美丽的阳光也是非常棒的。
These are my beautiful dreams. Even though I find it a little difficult to fulfill my dreams, it doesn't matter, because where there is a will, there is a way. I believe I can realize my dreams through my great efforts.
这些都是我美丽的梦想。虽然我很努力去实现我的梦想但是还是有点难度,不过没关系,因为有志者事竟成。我相信我能通过我的努力实现我的梦想。
一个好的主题句是文章成功的一半。不仅文章有主题,段落有纲,句也必有中心。文章失却主题,就会不知所云;落无纲,则一盘散沙,句缺中心,就无意义。所以,在立足于篇章时,一定要首先明确文的主题;在发展段落时,也要首先写好主题句。从PETS三的特点来考虑,主题句最好是置于文首或段首,这样让人一目了然! 以下就是两个实用的开门见山式发展主题句的方法。
●To begin with, we must attach the greatest importance possible to this issue/fact (key word.
●As is well known to all, it is now high time that we took this (topic word into serious consideration.
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还有,管理员们,你们可以欣赏一下我的作文吗,你们认真读的话,可能感到很有趣哟!如果你们觉得很有趣,就发个QQ邮箱吧,我的QQ邮箱号是:33728298@qq.com。请你们发一个QQ邮件吧,不喜欢的话,实话实说,也发来,如果你们喜欢,我会很开心的;如果你们说不喜欢,我也不会介意,可能是我写的作文不够好吧。
管理员,你们是网站的工作人员,我坚信你们是善良的,这封信我专门发送给你们的。我除了来你们的以外,我还去过另一个,叫小荷。他们的网站也和你们的网站一样,如果上网抄袭,扣信用。不过,我还是喜欢你们的\'网站,因为能赚钱,我不是贪钱,而是我家贫困。我每天去同学家发表作文,是为了一分一毫的把钱赚给我亲爱的爸爸妈妈。不过,你们的发表作文真的可以赚钱吗?
我家穷爸爸妈妈要供我读书,我不能什么事都让他们操劳,所以我一定要尽我所能,一分一毫的赚钱,我12岁了从不骗人,你们不信的话可以来调查,我家地址是:广东省茂名市电白区霞洞镇由甘由甘仔村!请你们帮帮我。
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201x年7月14日
Supposing I have seventy-two changes, I'd like to change into a big fire to make the World warm.
Supposing I have seventy-two changes, I'd like to change into a sturdy old pine to protect from wind and sand.
Supposing I have seventy-two changes, I'd like to change into a cup of tea to offer our teachers.
Supposing I have seventy-two changes, I'd like to change into a good medicine to make all patients healthy.
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Supposing I have seventy-two changes, I'd like to change into ...
In a word, I would try my best to let happiness and friendship live in the world for ever.
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