千里之行始于足下。前行之路沟沟坎坎,走稳第一步,才能走好今后每一步。
请以“第一步”为题写一篇记叙文。
要求:1.立意自定,将叙述与描写结合起来演绎主题;2.不少于600字;3.文中不得出现泄露考生真实身份的地名、校名和人名;4.书写要正确、规范、美观。
今天,我和妈妈去购物,我们打算上午买菜,下午买鞋子。
上午,我们一走进菜场,那些蔬菜们仿佛在说:“快来买我啊!快来买我啊!”它们好像在比谁更漂亮。西红柿在阳光的照射下,变成金色的.,成了“西金柿”;花菜像花儿一般美丽,散发出淡淡的清香;红萝卜也不甘示弱,它们像灯笼一般,向人们招手……看着这些漂亮的菜,我们不费吹灰之力就挑选好了许多可爱的菜,回家了。
下午,我们去了商场,买鞋子时,妈妈讨价还价,本来200元一双的鞋子,妈妈最终只用180元买到了手。讨价还价的时候,妈妈说:“我每次都在您这边买的,可以给我便宜点吗?180元?”老板笑嘻嘻地说:“本来要220元的,我已经给你便宜了。”不过,最终还是妈妈赢了。
回到家,我偷偷地问妈妈:“您这样讨价还价会不会觉得不好意思?”妈妈微笑地回答:“这就是生活,这就是买卖呀。”我追问道:“为什么您出的价格,老板会卖给您呢?”妈妈想了一会儿回答道:“因为我已经跑过好几家商店,知道什么价格可以买,而且我的心里有一条底线,守住自己的底线,不随意迁就别人。”“噢,原来是这样啊,要有自己的底线,做人也应该如此。”我心想。
这一次购物我看到了很多琳琅满目的商品,学会了如何讨价还价,坚持自己的底线,今天和妈妈购物,收获多多。
小松鼠明明一家生活在一片美丽的大森林里,爸爸妈妈都很爱明明。明明像一只快乐的小精灵,整天在松枝间来回穿梭。一天,松鼠妈妈生病了,家里的松果也吃完了,怎么办呢?让明明去买吧,妈妈还不放心。可是松鼠爸爸不在家,妈妈没办法,只好叫来了明明。还没等妈妈把话说完,小松鼠明明就兴奋地答应了,这可是明明的第一次购物呀!
小松鼠明明拿着五十个森林币.一蹦一跳地来到了森林超市。超市好大呀,各种各样的松果把明明的眼睛都看花了。最后明明挑了自己认为最棒的一种松果,想象着妈妈吃松果时的幸福样子,明明偷偷笑出了声。松果只花去了二十个森林币,明明想:还剩下三十个森林币,爸爸妈妈那么辛苦,给他们买点什么吧!买什么呢?明明看看这儿的椰果糖想买,可是爸爸妈妈不一定喜欢。又看看那儿的动物保健品,也想买,太贵啦,钱不够。最后明明的眼睛停在了松脂茶上。一瓶松脂茶爸爸妈妈都可以喝,就买松脂茶吧!
拿定主意后,明明叫来了店员兔子阿姨,一手交钱一手接东西。明明特别有成就感,心想原来买东西这么简单啊!和来的时候一样,明明还是一蹦一跳地往家里赶。可是不知什么时候,右手提的松脂茶不见了。明明急得大哭,那可是自己的一片孝心呀!怎么办?正在明明又急又恼的时候,猴子警官笑呵呵地走了过来冲着明明说:“明明,你的松脂茶找不到了吧?”明明一愣惊奇地问:“咦?叔叔你怎么知道的?”猴警官不慌不忙地说:“刚才在巡逻的时候看到小狐狸鬼鬼祟祟地拿着一个袋子,叫来一问,他就承认了。来,给你的松脂茶,以后可要小心啊!”明明脸红了。
回到家,妈妈看到明明买的松脂茶,感动得稀里哗啦!明明没有告诉妈妈松脂茶的曲折经历,他在心里告诉自己,以后做什么事情都不能掉以轻心。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
Expert tips on how to prevent avian influenza H7N9 collated by current argument data dictionary
1.平时加强体育锻炼,多休息,避免过度劳累,不吸烟,勤洗手;注意个人卫生,打喷嚏或咳嗽时掩住口鼻。
1 usually strengthen physical exercise, rest more, avoid excessive overworked, do not smoke, wash their hands; pay attention to personal hygiene, when sneezing or coughing and cover your nose and mouth.
2.保持室内清洁,使用消毒液清洗的地毯,避免使用难以清洗的地毯,保持地面、天花板、家具及墙壁清洁,确保排水道通畅;保持室内空气流通,应每天开窗换气两次,每次至少10分钟,或使用抽气扇保持空气流通;尽量少去 空气不流通的场所。
2 keep the room clean, use disinfectant cleaning carpets, avoid the use of hard to clean the carpet, keep the floor, ceiling, furniture and walls clean, to ensure smooth drainage channel; maintains the indoor air circulation, ventilation windows should be at least two times a day, 10 minutes each time, or use a fan to keep air circulation; as little as possible to airless places.
3.注意饮食卫生,进食禽肉、蛋类要彻底煮熟,加工、保存食物时要注意生、熟分开;养成良好的卫生习惯,搞好厨房卫生,不生食禽肉和内脏。解剖活(死家禽、家畜及其制品后要彻底洗手。
3, pay attention to food hygiene, eating meat, eggs should be thoroughly cooked, processing, preservation of food to the attention of raw, cooked separately; develop good health habits, good kitchen hygiene, do not eat raw poultry meat and offal. Anatomy of living (dead to wash hands thoroughly, livestock and poultry products.
同时,在户外洗手不方便的时候,可以使用免洗洗手液,随身携带,随时随地隔离病菌,呵护您的健康。
At the same time, when the outdoor hand-washing is not convenient, can use hand sanitizer, carry whenever and wherever possible, isolate the pathogen, take care of your health.
4.发现疫情时,应尽量避免与禽类接触;公众特别是儿童应避免密切接触家禽和野禽。
4 found in the epidemic, should avoid contact with poultry; the public especially children should avoid close contact with poultry and wild birds.
5.注意生活用具的消毒处理。禽流感病毒不耐热,100°C下一分钟即可灭活。对干燥、紫外线照射、汞、氯等常用消毒药都很敏感。
5 pay attention to disinfection and living appliances. Avian influenza viruses do not heat, 100 ° C, one minute can be inact
在浩瀚无边的宇宙里,漂浮着一个巨大的红苹果,它是一个苹果星球。
在苹果星球里,住着一条胖乎乎的肉虫子。
它每天除了吃苹果肉,喝苹果汁,就是躺在苹果核中间的苹果洞里睡大觉。
有一次,它吃得太多了,一路啃啊,啃啊,啃到了苹果皮上。粉红色的苹果皮,被它啃成了半透明的。这时,它看见了从外面透过来的几束光亮。
“这是什么?”肉虫子想,“这墙壁外面一定有一些我没见过的东西。”它感到有些害怕,就赶紧又缩回了苹果核里。
可是,从此以后,肉虫子每天都会梦见外面的那个宇宙,每次的`梦都不太一样。有时,是红彤彤,暖洋洋的;有时,又是黑洞洞,冷冰冰的。它醒来之后,就越来越想知道,外面究竟是什么模样呢?
因为想得多了,睡得少了,它就觉得更饿了,它吃得越来越多,越来越快,最后,苹果星球被它啃得就剩下一层薄薄的皮了,而它却长成了一条很大很大的肉虫子。
终于,有一天,这层皮“啪”的一声破了,肉虫子从瘪了下去的苹果星球里钻了出来,它看见了一个无边无际的世界,四面八方都有星辰在闪烁,真是太美了!
可是,肉虫子却觉得有点透不过气来,它的身体里似乎有什么东西正在迅速膨涨,涨得它快要裂开了。“我快死了吗?”肉虫子颤抖着想。
就在这一瞬间,一条闪闪发光的银丝忽然从它的嘴里喷了出来。这条银丝越来越长,长得缠住了肉虫子,把它和苹果星球裹在了一起,变成了一个圆圆的、闪闪发光的银茧。
苹果星球就这样消失了。又过了很久很久的时间,从这个漂浮在宇宙中的茧子里,钻出了一只七彩斑斓的大蝴蝶,它衔着一颗金色的苹果种籽,向着宇宙的最深处飞去——它是要去寻找一片最宽广的土地,好种下这颗种籽,让它长成一棵开满花朵的大树,那时,宇宙间就又会飘起一阵阵苹果的香气……
这是一道命题作文。首先,审题要准。抓住三点:“第一步”并非实指,而是比喻,把双脚跨出的“第一步”与比喻意义的“第一步”结合着写,更容易出新;所写必须是“第一步”,而不是人生旅程中随意的一步;“第一步”与后来的人生步履有什么关系,有什么影响力,文章应该点到;其次,确定文体——必须写记叙文,记叙描写不得少于全文篇幅的四分之三;再次,明确表达要求——将叙述与描写结合起来演绎主题,特别注意在做到叙述清楚的同时,要在描写的细致和多样上下工夫。
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