中考英语作文进步了【一】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后：
The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
中考英语作文进步了【二】
来到游泳馆，教我的教练是很严肃的人，我穿好救生衣，废话不多说，跳进水里。因为我经常来游泳馆，看过别人游泳，回忆起别人练的动作，果然有用。
但是天有不测风云，谁知我憋气憋不住了，身体也失控了，接着就手忙脚乱的'拍打着水，有点落在小河里的鸡。教练看见我这副模样，知道了我现在的处境，游到我旁边，把我举起来，把我举到岸边。那些游泳高手都捧腹大笑起来，之后就纷纷下水游泳。看他游到岸边只用了30秒，上岸后，他们双手交叉，好像在说:“要超过我们还要100年呢!”自此之后我决心要超过他们。
于是，我勤学苦练泳技，暑假差不多每天都去学。我学会了蛙泳、狗刨式泳，还有蝶泳。
不久以后，我和他们比赛。比赛规则是看谁做的花式蝶泳最优美。我先和叫明丽的那个人比，他的花式蝶泳是他的弱点，我一下子做了一个高难度的动作，他就败下阵来了。下一个和一个叫张聪的人比，他是副队长，结果我们好多次打了个平手，最后我赢了，打败了他们。他们脸都红红地说：“我们全军覆没了，我们让你当队长。”我也很高兴。
我进步了！
中考英语作文进步了【三】
马上又到了一年一度的'学校游泳比赛了，这两天我去练习了一下25米蛙泳，速度终于有了突破。
昨天，我和好朋友孙懿路去新河游泳，爸爸把我送到后有事先走了，让我们自己游。大约过了半个小时，他回来了，要检验成果。抱着满怀的信心，我像箭一样游了出去，大约到了深水区，我想：加油，就要到了！所以我游得更加快了。老爸兴奋地过来说：“假小子，不错嘛，游了三十九秒！”
我的游泳速度居然有了突破，时间不再是4字开头了，自己都觉得有点难以置信。
眼看着游泳馆要关门了，老爸又让我游了一次，要求我必须在38秒以内，于是我又拼命游了过去，这次老爸似乎更兴奋了，“38秒！正好38秒！”听得我心里乐滋滋的。
回家后，我立刻把这好消息告诉了妈妈。妈妈说：“真不错，坚持就会有收获，只要每天去游，一定会进步。”
中考英语作文进步了【四】
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
