雅思5.13作文【一】
虽然来源于身边社会，但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮，拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到，只需要把事件中某一个具体的你，我，他，变成是客观群体，比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式：
for example,/for instance,（后加句子）
Such as/ like （后加词组）
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次，在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称，为了加强客观性，应将人称写成第三人称。
改正：Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.（那些养宠物，例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感）
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究，并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉，用含糊的方法表示。
改正：There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. （大量证据表明。。。）
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家，尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正：Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.（在全世界，许多孩子在屏幕前待太久，导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式：around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
雅思5.13作文【二】
雅思考试有条写作指令叫做：Include relevant examples from your own experience. 所以很多考生在考试时都喜欢使用举例法（exemplification。这一扩展方式本身无可厚非，然而在使用时几种例子是不适合的。
雅思5.13作文【三】
Most female consumers shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这里的shop and spend就是复合谓语结构，但是到目前为止，这仍旧是一个简单句，我们继续丰富它。
雅思5.13作文【四】
此类例子往往缺乏客观性和说服力，由于第一人称的局限导致所叙述事件难免“鸡毛蒜皮”。要明白，个人不代表整体。
例：I keep my dog to avoid my loneliness and I find a lot of fun.
这样的例子让人犹如在看记叙文，和议论文很不搭调。
雅思5.13作文【五】
太多专业数据会给人捏造的痕迹，缺乏真实性。考官会质疑数据的出处。
例：A survey indicates that the number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 percent in China.（一项调查显示。。。）
"65%"让文章看起来有些假，有捏造的嫌疑。"A survey"又不够具有代表性。
雅思5.13作文【六】
Most female consumers and their girlfriends shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这时主语和谓语都已经进行了改善。但是你问还有提升空间吗?当然有!
雅思5.13作文【七】
2. Many schools demand the students wear uniforms. Some people think that such a practice can undermine their personality and individuality. What is your opinion?
3. Some people believe that pet animals such as cats and dogs cannot be kept in the cities, especially in busy modern cities. Do you agree or disagree?
4. Nowadays, teenagers cause a lot of social problems due to lack of discipline. Some people think that parents should spend more time staying with their children. Do you agree or disagree?
5. Nowadays, many children have their part-time jobs. Some people say that doing part-time jobs is useful, but others argue that children should enjoy their childhood. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
6. Some people think if students want to learn a foreign language, it is advisable for them to learn it in the native countries where the language is actually spoken. Whats your opinion? Give your reasons.
7. In some countries, there are women taking the positions of police officers, while some people believe that women are not suitable to work in the police force. DO you agree or disagree? Write your reasons and give examples in your experience.
