Most female consumers shop unwisely and spend too much money.
这里的shop and spend就是复合谓语结构,但是到目前为止,这仍旧是一个简单句,我们继续丰富它。
虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
这个暑假,我们一家三口畅游了风景秀丽,历史悠久的英国。那里有很多古老而又神秘的城堡,更有一大片一大片令人心醉的山坡和草地。
我们的车在乡间小路上飞驰,两边的坡地上到处都是成群的牛羊,它们悠闲地在柔软的草地上漫步,享用鲜嫩的青草,别提多自在了。
我们在伦敦参观牛津大学时,妈妈惊喜地喊:“快看啊,那儿有一只松鼠——”果然,我注意到草坪上有一只小松鼠,鼻子还不时地动一动,蓬松的大尾巴上还有一圈白毛,它敏捷地跳到树干上,那双黑眼睛打量着四周,可爱极了。我举起相机,“咔嚓”一声,拍下了这个珍贵的镜头。
到了苏格兰,那里的小动物们的胆子就更大了。那天,我和爸爸在晨练时,发现了一只野兔。它的皮毛是棕色的,尾巴象一个白色的绒毛球。它一点儿也不怕人,看到我们没有恶意,它也不跑,还在那里吃起了草。我扔给它一块饼干,它竟然吃了下去,好像还意犹未尽。我又扔过去一块,它又津津有味地吃了起来,直到我们离开酒店,这只小兔子还是没有离开,搞得我心里怪舍不得的。不过,英国胆子最大的动物当属海鸥。
那天,我们在湖边喂天鹅和鸭子。天鹅吃东西的样子很优雅,但是它们太懒了,面包一定要丢到它的跟前,不然它是不会游过去吃的。哎呀,没想到天鹅也那么有公主范儿。比起天鹅,鸭子可灵活多了,只要有食物,它就立马过去抢,然后就迅速躲到一边,生怕天鹅啄它。海鸥比鸭子更厉害,它会一下子俯冲下来,抢走人们手里的食物。如果你把食物往空中一抛,它也会飞到半空中用又长又尖的嘴巴接住。
小动物们的胆子越大,越说明英国人对它们是多么友好,人与自然是多么和谐。
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