我说童年是母亲充满暖意的襁褓,我恬静安然,酣睡其中;我说童年是父亲像粗布一般的胡须,我细拣一根,断然便拔;我说童年是满满一爪色彩鲜艳的糖果,我捧在手心,护其不化;我说童年是被绚烂烟火点亮的`星空,我高仰小脸,尽极己夸。
他说童年是黄昏饭后滚动在凹凸不平的水泥地上的弹珠,折射出几张写满快乐的晶莹笑脸;他说童年是嬉闹时突然误撞大树而脱落的门牙,噘嘴抱怨又比小伙伴多怪了一分;他说童年是高耸的大槐树下结实的秋千,荡到高处看邻家稀有的灰色狼狗。
三人言成画,你我他皆是画中倾心勾勒的一笔。
你说婚礼殿堂应充斥着百合的清香,有马尔代夫的阳光,有爱尔兰的清新,有地中海的温暖,有意大利雏菊处放的声音,还要有维多利亚瀑布的川流不息。
你说婚礼的殿堂要有身着白色礼服的教父,要有发鬓微白的父母欣慰的泪光,要有挚死相许永不离弃的诺言,要有情意绵绵的长吻,还要有裙摆飘逸的洁白婚纱。
他说婚礼的殿堂是爱铸成的层层阶梯,顶端缓缓露出的面庞,你曾所思,夜所想,如今已不再是飘渺虚无的梦境,不用患得患失泪湿枕旁。他就在那,在那用温柔似水的目光抚摸他最美的新娘,透过因他而生的红妆,将爱注满心房。
三人言成诗,你我他都为诗中动人巧妙的一词。
你说你要沉睡在珠穆朗玛峰山上,化作尘埃与闰土,为这宏伟的山峰填一丝令人惊叹的高度;你说你要沉睡在撒哈拉沙漠的扬沙中,凝视仙人掌坚强不屈的一生;你说你要沉睡在埃及夺目的金字塔下,感受几千年文化带来的深远气息。
我说我要沉睡在爱人身旁,十指相扣,兑现白头偕老的诺言;我说我要沉睡在父母墓旁,默默感谢他们曾赋予我珍贵的生命;我说我要沉睡在旧址故土旁,守护陪伴我多年冷暖的屋房。
他说他要沉睡在洒满金色光芒的柔软草地,生出嫩叶,亲吻后人的脸颊;他说他要沉睡在长有深绿苍耳的田野,为追逐野兔的人留下回忆;他说他要沉睡在大槐树的根底,用血肉固定快脱臼的秋千。
三人言成曲,你我他尽成曲中悠长深远的一音。
你说我说他说,不同的是期许,相同的是心底对美的追求。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
亲爱的李华:
很高兴收到你的来信。一切都好吗?你上一封信中说你才刚跟你父母从夏威夷度假回来。我真的很开心你能有这个开心的一段旅途。从你跟我对夏威夷的\'描述来看,那真的是一个很美的地方。我希望有一天我也能到那里旅游。我最近有点点压力,因为我准备要考期末了。我对英语,语文还有数学很有信心,但是很担心化学。你知道的,我化学一直都不好。我很怕因为化学把这次期考给弄砸了。噢,别想我的烦恼了。圣诞节就要到了,你现在肯定是在忙着准备吧。提前祝你圣诞节快乐。
李
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