学生互评英语作文做法【一】
改写括号中的内容，使其句式整齐，韵律和谐。
醒来眼里布满了泪水；（大病之后我疲乏，依依不舍的离别，旅行途中的辛苦，到家后可能的恐怖的事实，）都到心上来了。
分析：这是一道典型的语言运用试题，在近年中考语文试卷中经常出现。这类句式修改，一般要求句式整齐，语意连贯，可调整个别词语和句子顺序，但不得改变句子愿意。
句式整齐，语意连贯，其实就是修改为整句。整句是什么呢？整句就是把结构相同或者相似的一组句子整齐地排列在一起。整句形式整齐，音律和谐，气势贯通，能够把内容表达得鲜明集中，有利于突出作者的思想感情。
本题的实质是将原句修改为排比句（排比句就是整句的一种），但在题目中并没有明确指出，意在降低试题难度，只要句式基本整齐，意思和原句差不多都能得分。
查看本题中要修改的部分，我们很容易发现，出现了“大病之后”、“旅行途中”、“到家后”三个时间状语，只要第二个短语“依依不舍的离别”可以修改为时间状语修饰，句式基本上就整齐了。“依依不舍的离别”就是离别的时候依依不舍呀，“离别时”不就是一个时间状语吗？
看看，这样修改后就变成了“大病之后我疲乏，离别时的依依不舍，旅行途中的'辛苦，到家后可能的恐怖的事实”
是否还需要进一步修改呢？同学们在修改中也要试着读一读，看看还有不有别扭的地方。我们很快就可以发现，第一个短语和后三个是不同的。我们只需要把第一个短语也修改成的字短语修改的偏正短语就行了。
“大病之后的疲乏，离别时的依依不舍，旅行途中的辛苦，到家后可能的恐怖的事实”
这已经非常不错了，当然，你还可以进一步美化。
“大病后的疲乏，离别时的不舍，旅行途中的辛苦，到家后可能的恐怖的事实”
前三句字格式、字数完全相同了，最后一句是不能改为“到家后的事实”的，也不能改为“到家后的恐怖事实”，因为去掉“可能”，就改变原句的原意了。
学生互评英语作文做法【二】
"Freedom and progress are the goals of art, just as they are the goal of our whole life," said the great musician Beethoven.
This winter holiday, I read a great book - celebrity biography. The book touched my heart deeply. The author of celebrity biography is French romain rolland. The book is composed of three biographies of Beethoven, Michelangelo and Tolstoy.
Each of these three biographies enlighten me. One of the things that struck me most was Beethoven. Beethoven devoted his life to music, but fate always played a trick on him. He was sickly and sickly in his childhood. At the age of 3, hearing gradually declines, as a musician, this is a fatal blow, and his character, determined, does not bow to fate and continues to advance on the music road. Middle-aged, he hearing has completely recession, can only use to communicate with people, but this does not make him stop writing, but not to abandon all, into the arms of nature, continue to compose the immortal music chapter.
"Man, you must strive for yourself!" This is one of the words Beethoven tells people. Yes, people can't cling to vegetation, create life with tough, bold heart and create art! Read more book notes in YJBYS!
学生互评英语作文做法【三】
This "celebrity biography" is about the tribulations and difficulties of the three famous men on the road to fame, from the power of persistence to the disintegration of power even to despair. They abandoned a lot of love and friendship on the way to fame. Finally, they set foot on the road to success.
The first is a belief that, suffering from pain, still does not put down music -- Beethoven. Although he was deaf, he said proudly, "listen to my heart music, you don't understand how I feel! A band can only play music that I expect to write in a minute!" Yeah! His music set of classicism is the beginning of romanticism, and its creation reflects the progressive thoughts of the rising period of the bourgeoisie.
Then a tragic, still sculptural belief - Michelangelo. His pain came from human malice. He was born to fight, to conquer! It is precisely because of this that his artistic creation has been deeply influenced, often with the realism of the civil class at the time of the patriotism and freedom of the struggle of the spirit of the painting. This kind of cup is presented in grand and magnificent form, and his hero is both an ideal symbol and a reflection of reality.
The last is a mirror that Lenin once called "the Russian revolution." Looking around Tolstoy's life, he was not only a literary giant, but also the narrative of life, religion, and society that made him a world-leading thinker. Tolstoy never laid down his obsession with the meaning of life.
