1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
记得一位作家说过:重要的不是成功,而是奋斗。人的一生是奋斗的一生。人们为了成功不断努力着,不停地奋斗着。成功是奋斗的结果,奋斗是成功的必经之路。所以,重要的是奋斗。
诚然,谁都不否认,人们努力就是为了有一天能获得成功,在自己人生的书页上抹上辉煌的一笔,那怕是经历多次的失败。可是在我看来,这跌倒爬起、再跌倒再爬起的奋斗过程不也是很有意义,很辉煌的吗?成功的喜悦难以用语言表达,奋斗的意义则更值得回味。居里夫人曾把诺贝尔奖章给女儿当玩具,友人惊问其故,她说:“我把奖章给她当玩具就是让她明白,不仅仅为了荣誉而奋斗。”多好的回答!居里夫人奋斗了一生,得到许多荣誉。她成功了,而她留给后人的不仅是成功的荣誉,更主要的是这锲而不舍的精神。这精神不正体现在她的奋斗历程吗?
有许多人经过努力奋斗,像居里夫人那样,取得了成功,这是十分可喜可贺的。他们用自己的血汗换来了鲜花和掌声。也有许多人,他们也奋斗了,甚至他们的路比成功者的还艰辛,可是成功却与他无缘,或者没能看到成功。这时,我们能说“这是个失败者”吗?当然不能!他同样是成功者!他在奋斗中体现了自己的价值,他同样也应该拥有鲜花和掌声。不然为什么马拉松赛跑中即使是最后一位坚持到终点的运动员,人们还要为他鼓掌呢。
相反,一心要成功,却忽视奋斗的艰辛,这样的人是决不会成功的。取得了一次成功便固步自封,不再继续奋斗,他便会落伍,沦为失败者。还有,如果跌倒了一次便从此一蹶不振,不敢坚持奋斗的人,必然是一个与成功无缘的人。
真正的成功者总是敢于战胜自我、不断进取的人。他们成功后会躺自在荣誉的光环里,反而不断地寻求更高的目标,并为此而付出更多的努力。必须指出,奋斗者应该具有远大的理想和崇高的目标,应该为大多数人谋利益。唯有这样的奋斗才是富有价值的。
我们六年级学生正在攀登知识高峰。我们应当把每个成绩看做再次前进的起点,把每一次失败看作一副良药。在永不停息的奋斗中完善自我,超越自我。我们需要成功,我们也无法逃避失败,而成功与失败都是暂时的,唯有奋斗才是我们生命中永恒的财富和主题!
Children's finally here, it is our holiday, but imagine the children also accompanied by together, everybody is more excited.
Children on this day, white clouds float over the blue sky, the children also have made a hot air balloon, they sit together on yourself a hot-air balloon, extremely happy! Balloon flying high, and finally flew to the sky, the children are in the sky holiday, the children sit on clouds, umpa jump, like a frisky little monkey.
Playing children, suddenly to rain cats and dogs, the children of the balloon has stalled, baiyun sister swept away by the wind, the children fell into despair. Is a time of crisis, a group of dragonflies sister and sister flew caught the children, and the safety of the children to the ground.
On the ground, only butterflies woven into a rainbow "lei", the children wear a wreath, some like a fairy, some like a warrior.
Play tired, the children fell asleep between full of fragrance of flowers.
Children's good play my imagination, to one day be able to live in such a children's day.
What our life will be like in the future?When I was a little boy,I always asked myself this question.At that time,I had no idea what Internet was.But now,we use it every day.We can't live without it.Internet is become so popular and so convenient.
Just forget it.What our life will be like in the future?For example,in ten years.I think that in ten years our life will be much more colorful,our computer will be much powerful,and we can do almost everything on the internet including seeing a doctor.What about your future life ?Will you share with me?
Sometimes I dream about life in the future. What will it be?
Perhaps some people will go to the moon for a holiday or even live on the moon,and some scientists will build cities under the sea to make people live there. We can have a medical examination or do some shopping without leaving our homes,which makes the life more convenient. Maybe we will also do some shopping and work at home.
And I'm sure there'll be more educational programmes on the radio or TV or by the Intemet or videophones,so perhaps some children won't need to go to school every day. They'll study at home.
In the future,all electric equipment at home is under the con-trol of computers. People can learn about the situation of the house by working on the computer at the office. No people like doing housework. Maybe each family will have a robot. Every day we can tell the robot what to do-shopping,housework and so on. believe the dream will come true some day.
我们都知道,史蒂芬\"霍金是一位只能用手敲击键盘而其他部位均已瘫痪的坐在轮椅上的科学家。曾经有一位女记者悲悯地问他:“霍金先生,卢伽雷病已将你永远固定在轮椅上,你不认为命运让你失去太多了吗?”让我们听听霍金的回答吧:“我的手指还能活动,我的大脑还在思维;我有终生追求的理想,有我爱和爱我的亲人和朋友;对了,我还有一颗感恩的心……”是什么造就了这位被称作“当代爱因斯坦”的科学巨匠呢?就是一颗感恩之心!无论上帝给了他什么样的命运,无论命运给了他什么样的痛苦和挫折,他依然感谢上帝,感谢生活,感谢他的亲人和朋友!“感恩”成了霍金人生路上不息的动力!
你是否常常抱怨命运的不公呢?那么,想想霍金吧。生活就是这样,该属于你的终会降临于你,不属于你的永远也不能强求。少些抱怨之言,多些感恩之心,太阳会更加灿烂,人生会更加靓丽。永远不要因为抱怨而失去感恩之心。有一个人从小双目失明,懂事以后他天天烦恼,认定这是老天在责罚他,自己这一辈子算是完了。亲友、社会都来关怀他,照顾他,但他不愿在被怜悯中度过一生。后来一位老师开导他说:“世上每个人都是被上帝咬过一口的苹果,都是有缺陷的人。有的人缺陷比较大,是因为上帝特别喜爱他的芬芳。”他很受鼓舞,从此他不再生活在抱怨之中,从此他把失明看作是上帝的特殊钟爱,为了感谢上帝的这份恩宠,他不断地努力,若干年后,当地便传诵着一位德艺双馨的盲人推拿师的故事……
每个人的命运是不同的,然而这并不重要,重要的是你是否能以一颗感恩之心去对待它。与霍金相比,与这位盲人推拿师相比,我们有着健全的四肢,明亮的双眼,我们还有什么理由不怀有一颗感恩之心呢?鸦有反哺之义,羊有跪乳之恩;胡马依北风,越鸟朝南枝;乌鸟返故乡兮,狐死必首丘。大自然中,感恩种种,此情依依。鸟兽犹如此,人应如何呢?也许我们的人生路上会有风雨,也会有黑夜,但是,请不要因为风雨而忘记了太阳的明媚,不要因为黑夜而忘记了星星的灿烂。
带上一颗感恩之心去播种,你将收获累累硕果;带上一颗感恩之心去旅行,你将收获一路风景;带上一颗感恩之心去生活,你将收获丰厚人生!
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第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
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第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
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第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
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第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
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第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
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第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
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