叙事具体教学目的:
通过讲练结合,让学生的写记叙文叙事具体。教学重点:
记叙文讲练结合的写法。教学过程:
一、积累展示
2、点评。
二、导入新课
2、明确:无话可说,或者说得过于简单
3、让学生把自己印象最深的事说出来。
三、明确示标
如何把事情写得具体?
四、写法讲练
(1)案例:
姚明带着球,飞速冲向对方篮板下,跳起来将球扣入篮中。(26字)
(2)师生点评:太笼统,不具体。
(3)学生尝试分解过程:
接到传来的球——在地上拍了几下——对手拦截——将球传给前方的伙伴——飞速向前冲,绕过对手——又接过球——晃过对手拦截到篮板下——纵身跃起——扣篮进球
(4)让学生再想想每个动作的具体场景,把这一连串的动作连起来,写一段具体的话:姚明在后场扬起右手熟练地勾住了同伴传过来的球,习惯地在地上轻轻地拍了几下,猛地将球从拦截过来的对手头顶砸向在前方招手的同伴,同时迈开双脚,闪电般地越过对手。刚刚接到球的那位同伴见姚明已冲过了中场,就把球又传给了姚明。姚明跳起,接过了球,便运着球,以灵活逼真的假动作一连晃过两名后卫的阻击飞速冲到篮板下,纵身一跃,同时右手持球扣篮,对方还没有反应过来,球已经从篮网里撞到了地上。(188字)
(5)明确:分解法,就是把一个场面分解成几个部分,把人物的行动分解成若干个动作,然后对每部分、每个动作都作一些描写,最后把这各个部分、各个动作按一定的顺序连接起来。
(1)案例:
我们常常看到同学们写出这样不具体的文章:
“有一次,我在教室里做作业。做着,做着,遇到了一道难题。我做不下去了,这时我的同学就耐心地帮助我。最后,我把那道题给做了出来。”(64字)
(2)师生点评:太笼统,不具体,缺少过程,没有让人如闻如见之感。
(3)学生尝试多问几个“怎样”:
碰到的是一道怎样的难题?——我是怎样对待这道题目的?——难题做不出,我的心情是怎样的?——同桌是怎样帮助我的?——他对我是怎样说的?又是怎样耐心指导我的?
——我是怎样开窍的?等等。
(4)通过一系列的自问,可以唤起作者对当时生活情景的回忆,从而在脑海中呈现出一幅幅生动形象的画面。让学生把这情节给写下来,然后交流。
参考例文:
当我做到第三道应用题时,我想了好久,就是不知道该怎样做。我把题目看了一遍又一遍,几乎是一个字一个字发苦想了,可不知怎地,脑子里就像打了死结似的,一点也想不出来。
眼看天色一点点暗了下来,我心里急得火烧火燎的,这么晚回去,妈妈一定又要追根问底了。唉!
这时,同学王明见我正对着作业体子发愣,就走了过来,轻轻地问:“你哪道题不会做?”我抬起头,看了他一眼,就用手指着那道令人讨厌的难题,无可奈何地说:“喏!”他仔细地看了那道题目,默默地想了一会儿,然后又轻轻地问我:“这道题要我们求什么?”我望着他的脸,摇了摇头。他指着题目最后一行字提醒我说:“你再看看这句话什么意思?”我看着他手指的地方仔细地想了想,忽然明白过来,情不自禁地脱口而出“要我们求这个街道每户储蓄多少元。”“对啊!”他的语气也兴奋起来,“那么要求平均数,只要……”“拿总数除以户数。”我不等他说完就抢上去说。他笑着点点头:“对,对,那你看这道题怎么做呢?”经他这样一启发,我完全明白了,高兴地拿起笔,刷刷刷地做了起来……(440字)
(1)案例:
上文的事情写得很清楚,但我们发现字数还是不足,而且总觉得缺少氛围感。怎么办?
(2)让学生试图在文中某些处添一两句环境描写的语句。
(3五、揭示文题
文题:那件事,让我难忘
要求:写一篇不少于600字的记叙文,叙事具体。
六、审题立意
1、引导学生交流对题目意思的理解。
明确:
(1)文体:记叙文;
(2)视角:“我”(主人公可以不是“我”);
(3)数量:一件事;
(4)重点:渲染“难”字。
2、引导学生进行立意交流。
明确:
(1)文章意义:陶冶或教育性质的;
(2)创作情感:怀念或警戒
七、列纲起草
1、学生列提纲。
2、师生交流提纲。
明确:
(1)事情来龙去脉要交待清楚;
(2)详写难忘的那个场面或镜头;
(3)要有必要的抒情议论。
3、学生修改提纲。
4、学生起草。
八、修改誊写
1、修改草稿。
2、誊写
初二叙事作文:饭桌上的'故事饭桌上的故事
我有许多难忘的事,而其中最难忘的一件事情,却是发生在饭桌上的故事。记得在我上一年级的时候,每个星期三都要上一节长达三小时的英语辅导课,所以每次上完英语课回家,我的肚子就会饿得咕咕叫。
那个星期三也不例外,我一回到家,就听到自己的肚子在打鼓了。于是,我急急忙忙放下沉重的书包,奔到饭桌前拿起筷子吃起菜来。我夹起了一大块平时最爱吃的糖醋鱼,咬了一大口,禁不住称赞道:“真是太好吃了!”疼爱我的奶奶嘱咐道:“小心点!要是被鱼刺卡到喉咙里就糟糕了!”奶奶话音刚落,我就觉得自己的喉咙被什么东西卡住了,每咽下一口水都很疼。我又惊又急地想:奶奶怎么说得那么准呀,我好像真被鱼刺卡着了!见我的眼睛瞪得一只大一只小的,奶奶很奇怪地问我:“你这是怎么了?”我怕奶奶担心,就忍痛挤出两个字:“没……事!”可是细心的奶奶还是发现了问题,问我:“是被鱼刺卡住了?糟了!”她急忙夹了许多青菜给我,叫我大口吃下去。可是我吃了几口青菜之后还是很痛,这时奶奶也急了,眼里还闪着泪花。我忍住痛,突然想起以前在电视上看到的方法,大声说:“喝醋!我在电视上看到有人被卡了鱼刺后都是这样解决的!”奶奶经我一提醒,连忙给我倒了一小碗醋来。我一口气把它喝了下去。过了几分钟后,喉咙中的刺痛感慢慢消失了。
经过这件事,我明白了吃鱼时要细心,这道理还不仅体现在吃鱼这件事上,不管做任何事都要仔细、小心,这是我从饭桌上得到的教训和启示。
译文:今天,我在淘宝网看到很美味的草莓。我第一时间跟我自己最爱的人分享了。他很喜欢。可是他没有吃过这种草莓。这种草莓的'味道是牛奶味的。他觉得这很奇怪。所以他想尝尝这种草莓。而且价格也不昂贵,还有5元的红包。我觉得很值得。所以,我打算给他买一箱的草莓。一共是5斤的草莓。我想他收到的时候一定会很开心吧。一定会感觉到很幸福,很惊喜吧!我觉得,花费一点点的钱就可以给自己最爱的人一个惊喜,这是很美好的事情。不过,草莓一定要尽快的吃完。5斤的草莓一共是100个左右,要看草莓的大小和它的重量。草莓是易腐蚀的食品,所以要放进冰箱里。但是在冰箱里的草莓也不能保存很长一段时间。
I tried my best to calm down for a long time. Then I went to the platform to begin my prepared speech.
I felt my brain was blank when I was having my speech.
Before the election, I was confident for this position, but I still so nervous when I was in the platform. Thanks for preparing in advance; otherwise, I must be embarrassed. But the result was what I want. It’s a happy thing.
今天,我们班竞选班长了。`我成为了新的'班长。我很高兴,不过我现在仍然很紧张。竞选开始的时候,我好紧张,我都可以听到我的心怦怦跳了。我努力了很长一段时间才平静下来。然后我才走向讲台开始我已经准备好的演讲。在演讲的时候,我觉得我的大脑一片空白。在竞选之前,我对这一职位是很有信心,但当我站在讲台上时还是很紧张。幸好提前准备了;否则,我肯定很难堪。不过结果却是我想要的。这是一件值得开心的事
Green grasses,blue lakes and beautiful mountains are waiting for you!Welcome to colorful nature pare!
There is a clean river. There are some colorful flowers. There is a beautiful mountain near the nature park. The air is fresh. The sky is blue. The clouds are white. The tree is green. The bridge is tall. The grass is green. I can run on the grass. There is a path near the lake. There are many fish in the lake. There is a forest in the nature park. There are many trees on the mountains. There are many flowers near the path.
Look! There are some birds in the sky. One, two, three…… oh! So many!
非谓语动词系列训练(二)
一:在句子意思不变的情况下用分词或不定式改写下列句子:
1.When he saw from the top of the mountain, he viewed a beautiful city.
-----___________from the top of the mountain, he viewed a beautiful city.(用分词
2.When it was seen from the of the mountain, the city looks like a garden. (用分词 ------_____________from the of the mountain, the city looks like a garden. city. (用分词
3.When he was asked why he went there, he said he was sent there to be trained for a space flight.
-------When ________ why he went there, he said he was sent there to be trained for a space flight. (用分词
4. Do you know the boy who knows Japanese?
----- Do you know the boy ___________ Japanese? (用分词
5. Do you know the boy who is called Tom.
---- Do you know the boy ________Tom.- (用分词
6. This is the man who organized the activity.
This is the man________________ the activity. (用分词
7. He followed his students and came in.
------ He came in, ____________ his students(用分词
8. He came in and was followed by his students
----- He came in ,____________by his students(用分词
9.The woman who was dressed in a blue skirt delivered a speech to us.
---- The woman _____________ in a blue skirt delivered a speech to us. (用分词
10. Because he is a physicist, he could well explained how to do the research.
---- _______ a physicist, he could well explained how to do the research. (用分词
11. He was born on the 18th of January, 1979 in Taiwan, and he was raised by his mother and was shy and quiet during his childhood.
----- ____________on the 18th of January, 1979 in Taiwan, and he was raised by his mother and was shy and quiet during his childhood. (用分词
12. The flowers his friend gave him will die unless it is watered every day.
---The flowers his friend gave him will die unless ____________ every day. (用分词
13.When we were walking dogs, we came across a famous professor.
------ When ____________ dogs, we came across a famous professor. (用分词
14. He donated over 10 billion dollars in order that he could sponsor education, culture, sports, and public welfare in the earth-stricken area.
----- He donated over 10 billion dollars _____________education, culture, sports, and public welfare in the earth-stricken area.(用不定式
15 After he had finished his homework, he played the piano.
----- ____________ his homework, he played the piano.
16. After the bridge had been completed, it went through a hard time because of the bad weather.
----______________________, it went through a hard time because of the bad weather.
17 It is said that Bell invented the telephone.
18. Bell is said __________ the telephone. (用不定式
19. I don’t decide what I should do.
I don’t decide what__________(用不定式
20. It happened that he had been invited
---- He happened _____________
21.He was so young that he could not go to school. He was too young __________ to school.
22. When the test was finished, we began our holiday.
----- The test __________, we began our holiday.(用独立主格结构
23. As time goes by ,he becoms aware of it.
With time ________ by, he becomes aware of the significant of it.
24. The moon, which travels round the earth once every month, is a natural satellite of the earth.
---- The moon, ___________ round the earth once every month, is a natural satellite of the earth.
25. Though he had been told several times, he didn’t understand me.
-----_______ several times, he didn’t understand me.
26. After the problem was solved,he took a rest.
----With the problem ____________, he took a rest.
27. If time permits, we will
28.He lay there, his hand clenched, his eyes looking straight up.
---He lay there, his hand_______, his eyes looking straight up
29.I once read a book called Man, Woman and Child, which enabled me to understand the love in a family.
------I once read a book called Man, Woman and Child, ______________ me to understand the love in a family. (用分词
30.There are many places of interest, among which is the Yunji mountain,whose scenery is very beautiful, which attracts lots of tourists from different places every year.
------There are many places of interest, among which is the Yunji mountain,whose scenery is very beautiful, ____________ lots of tourists from different places every year. (用分词
二:非谓语动词完成句子练习
there was no doctor available. (only
, playing cards at home or taking a walk in the park? (spend
. (think
包括三名儿童). (child
5. 根据他的话判断), he did well in his exam. (judge
the Tang Dynasty. (date
7. This is an article (由五部分组成)five parts. (consist
five parts.(make
as soon as possible. (solve
bored a lot of fans to death. (concern
, l cannot object to your marriage. (concern
子)at school? (keep)
(躲在木箱里)behind the door. (hide
,we had to walk home last night. (be.
in the broad daylight yesterday. (rob
(满是脚印). (mark
(石油价格上涨), the economy of that country is slowing down. (go
18. When the national flag is being hoisted, all the students stand at attention, . (fix
him, I decided to write again. (hear
20. He doesn’t seem to mind by others. (make
next week is of great importance. (hold
is very important. (hold
is of great importance. (hold
the Third World. (belong
(致力于研究), the professor paid little attention to his surroundings. (devote
in the morning. (come
(为了确保那孩子尽快康复),five doctors took turns looking after him day and night. (ensure
,the old man struggled to his feet. (help
, the parents were taken to the dining room. (show)
(.support)
. (drop)
, I am not familiar with this kill. (tell
(为了不被注意)by others . (notice
三:合并下列句子
1. The annual school sports meeting was held yesterday. It presented a marvelous opening ceremony.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2. After the opening ceremony, we sat in the base of our class. We waited patiently for the beginning of the race.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
3. Some of my classmates work very hard, and they hope to fulfill their dream. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
4..My friend Christine took part in the 800-meter race. She had received training many times, so she kept calm before the race. After 400 meters, though she looked tired, she still tried her best to run. We screamed and beat the drum when we saw she passed by. She won the medal, and we were proud of it. (把短文中的从句或并列句改成非谓语动词
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四:语篇填空 用所给动词的适当形式填空。(一)
Freud was one of the first scientists [1]_________(make)serious research of the mind. The mind is the collection of activities [2]_________(base) in the brain that involve how we act, think, feel and reason. He used long talks with patients and the study of dreams [3]___________(search) for the causes of mental and emotional problems. He also tried hypnosis(催眠. He wanted to see if [4]________(put)patients into a sleep-like condition would help ease
[5]________(trouble) minds. In most cases he found the effects only temporary. Freud worked hard, although what he did might sound easy. His method involved [6]________ (sit with his patients and [7]________(listen)to them talk. He had them [8]________(talk)about whatever they were thinking. All ideas, thoughts and anything that entered their mind had to
[9]___________(express). There could be no[10]________(hold)back because of fear or guilt. 基础写作 :最近,你就读的学校——广东实验中学高中部将举办开放日。 你将作为学校的
学生代表向前来参观的英语老师介绍高中校区的基本情况,请准备好你的解说词,文章的开头和结尾已为你写好。(学会用非谓语动词表达)
?位置交通:位于广州市西部,荔湾区;出行便利,步行到地铁站约10分钟。 ?学校历史:逾120年的悠久历史;现高中校区于2004年 竣工并投入使用。 ?校园环境:占地面积约125,000平方米;植物繁茂,绿树成荫,环境优美。 ?校园设施:课室宽敞明亮,配备齐全;拥有标准运动 设施,
其中综合体育馆可用于举办比赛、会议和典礼。
?师生情况:目前学生约3000人,教师约200人;全体师生正在
为学校更美好的明天共同奋斗。
?【写作要求】
?只能用5个句子表达全部内容。?【评分标准】 ?句子结构准确,信息内容完整,篇章结构连贯。
Good morning, teachers! Welcome to Guangdong Experimental High School!.....
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非谓语动词练习答案
1.Seeing 2.Seen (原句有误,请改成When it was seen from the top of the mountain,the city is beautiful (用分词 3. asked 4. knowing 5. called 6. organizing 7. following 8. followed 9. dressed 10. Being 11. Born 12. watered 13. walking 14. to sponsor 15. Having finished 16. Having been completed 17 18.. to have invented
19.to do 20. to have been invited 21. to go 22 finished 23. going 24. travelling 25. Having been toldTold 26. solved 27.permitting 28. clenched 29.enabling 30. attracting
二:非谓语动词完成句子练习
Keys:
1. only to be told (that 2. to spend your spare/free time
3. thinking about 4. including three children/ three children included
5. Judging from / by his words/what he said
6. dating back to/from (which dates back to/from
7. consisting of / which consists of
8. made up of/which is made up of 9. to solve the problem
10. concerning the football match 11. As/So far as I am concerned
12. (in keeping five children 13. hidden in a wooden box
14. There being no bus 15. to have been robbed
16. Seen from the top of 17. Seeing from the top of
18. To see 19. marked with footprints
20. the price of oil going up 21. fixed on/upon the national flag
22. with (both his hands tied 23. Not having heard from
24. (his being made fun of 25. to be held
记叙文作文题目精选(120个)
作文题目
⒈《——是一道靓丽的风景线》
⒉《——,我永远的天空》
⒊《都是——惹的祸》
⒋《笑傲——》
⒌《生活需要——》
⒍《何以解忧,惟有——》
⒎《假如我是——》
⒏《告诉你,我很——》
⒐《我眼中的——》
⒑《生活需要——》
⒒《——在我的身边》
⒓《——也是一种美》
⒔《——是最美的行囊》
⒕《与——同行》
⒖《——伴我成长》
⒗《——三步曲》
⒘《——和我有个约会》
⒙《我发现——》
⒚《真想做个——》
⒛《世上只有——》
21.《我——故我在》
22.《永远的——》
23.《——,我恨你》
24.《——,做我自己》
25.《——的风波》
26.《我和——的距离》
27.《——着并快乐着》
28.《给自己找个——》
29.《永远说——》
30.《那一次,我——》
31.《——不同情眼泪》
32.《带上——上路》
33.《我与——面对面》
34.《——是一盏明灯》
35.《那段——的日子》
36.《一个——的心灵独白》
37.《——,让我欢喜让我忧》
38.《爱上——》
39.《欣赏——》
40.《
我眼里的——》
41.《那—那—那—》
42.《想起——》
43.《———的遐想》
44.《第一次——》
45.《给心情涂上——》
46.《人生路上——多》
47.《——,我的最爱》
48.《——的故事》
49.《——是一种养分》
50.《那年,我——》
51.《和——赛跑》
52.《我——,我——》
53.《有——才有远方》
54.《——在,梦就在》
55.《还有多少——可以重来》
56.《明天,我——》
57.《我的——我做主》
58.《——,是这样炼成的》
59.《不想——》
60.《将——进行到底》
61.《人生没有——》
62.《——是一瞬间的事》
63.《有一种——叫成功》
64.《——伴我少年行》
65.《带上——上路》
66.《——是一首歌》
67.《——是一种美丽的痛》
68.《——的回忆》
69.《有——陪伴的日子》
70.《——,没有什么不可以》
71.《与——一起走过》
72.《——,让我欢喜让我忧》
73.《拒绝——》
74.《让——为——着色》
75.《我——故我在》
76.《——,妙不可言》
77.《读懂——》
78.《我总是——》
79.《——一族的幸福生活》
80.《——拍卖会》
81.《——永不下岗》
82.《那次,我与——擦肩而过》
83.《——在我胸》
84.《——是一种牵挂》
85.《
——带给我的快乐》
86.《——也是一种享受》
87.《——让我如此美丽》
88.《——,其实你不懂我的心》
89.《最近比较——》
90.《将——进行到底》
91.《——,我的最爱》
92.《下辈子我做——》
93.《谁都可以——》
94.《——是金》
95.《拿什么拯救你,我的——》
96.《怎一个“—”字了得》
97.《——拍卖会》
98.《留些诚信给自己取暖》、
99.《敬畏——》
100.《——不需要理由》101.我难忘的_____
102.假如我能_____
103.我想对_____说
104.我的梦想
105.生活需要_____
106.教养是一种____
107.生活教给你____
108.我劝_____
109.我家的喜事
110._____就是这么简单111、初中,一首难忘的歌112、与你在一起
113、课间花絮
114、我的心事我知道115、打开窗子好心情116、“猪头”班标趣事
117、写给xx的信
118、期待秋天
119、故事发生在我们小组120、我与伙伴
121、青春作伴好飞翔
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