一提起,人们总会想起西湖十景,因为它们是美丽的;它们是动人的;它们是神奇的。我经常游览西湖,最最让我期待的就是西湖十景之一——灵峰探梅
周日阳光明媚,是出游的好日子,我们来到了“灵峰探梅”,我兴奋无比。走进探梅区,映入眼帘的是一个巨大无比的仙桃,周围十几根藤条攀沿着,犹如一架架滑滑梯,周围还有一只梅花鹿傲立其中,漂亮极了!我忍不住依着梅花鹿尽情当了一回圣诞老人呢!再走进去,就是漫山遍野的梅花了,阵阵清香扑鼻而来。
梅花有红的、有粉的、有白的……好多的花瓣随风而动,撒落在每一棵梅花树下,好似一片花海。我张开双臂,闻着花香,轻声慢步地走在梅花树下,细细地观察着盛开的梅花,一朵朵形态万千,有的像一个害羞的小姑娘;有的像一个亭亭玉立的少女;有的簇拥在一朵梅花的周围,好像一位皇后身边围着几个大臣;有的梅花的花瓣只有指甲盖大小,嫩嫩的,好像一个娇弱的女子……可是,爸爸告诉我:“鱼儿,梅花的生命并不娇弱,它们的生命力很顽强!”听了这些话,我顿时感到:梅花不仅美丽,而且生命力更顽强呀!
今天在灵峰除了探梅还玩了好多好多有趣的地方,小溪、独木桥、石板路……让我大开眼界。天色已晚,我和爸爸妈妈一起回家了,我走一步,回头望一下,依依不舍得离开了灵峰探梅。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
天空黑沉沉的,无情的乌云遮住了太阳公公灿烂的笑脸。
乌云越压越近,似乎想要把整个天空吞没。过了一会儿,天空下起蒙蒙细雨,就像牛毛般落到脸上,让人感觉非常舒适。可美好的时刻总是过的很快,不一会儿,顿时下起了倾盆大雨,无数的小雨滴,乘着降落伞来到人间。风姐姐把它们吹的飘来飘去。手中的伞就像无数朵小花在一瞬间绽放开来。好看极了!
下午,雨停了,我推开窗户发现世界变了一个样子。清新的空气迎面扑来,小雨滴给娇嫩的小草和美丽的花儿痛痛快快的洗了个澡,她们变得更加生机勃勃,更加摇曳多姿。柳树也变成了美少女。叶子变得更加碧绿。好像把它全部的生命力展示给我们看。太阳公公又露出了灿烂的.笑脸。突然,天空出现了一道亮丽的彩虹,只可惜不一会儿就消失了。这都是秋雨的功劳,如果没有它就没有这么美丽的景色。
秋雨真是魅力无穷,我爱秋雨!
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