我的家在托克逊县,我的家乡有一条河叫白杨河,她是我们的母亲河。
现在我给你们介绍一下她晚上的风景吧。到白杨河边上你就会看到五颜六色的灯光照得这里就像白天一样。绿草和鲜花散发着香气。河水清清的,可以看到下面游来游去的鱼儿和小石子。河边的广场有一个大大的电视屏。劳作一天的人们来到这儿散步,看电视,打球,有男的有女的,有老人有小孩热闹极了。
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第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
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第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
我们的家乡,有金黄黄的麦子,有清清的小河,有绿绿的青草,有美丽的柳树。
放眼远望,一片火红,那就是秋天火红的柿子。枫叶落了下来,像是一只美丽的蝴蝶。
那清清的小河清得能看到河底的沙石十分美丽。
果林里的果子非常美丽,给秋天增加了一些生机。苹果红通通的,像一个红皮球似的。
玉米黄澄澄的,像一块金灿灿的金子一样。
地里那金黄黄的麦子真像一片金色的海洋。
我喜爱家乡的景色。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
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The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
有人喜欢春天,有人喜欢秋天,也有人喜欢冬天。但我,喜欢让人热血沸腾的夏天。
夏天是小朋友们狂欢的季节。早上,六点钟时,天边就泛起了一丝鱼肚白。这一丝细长的`鱼肚白一点点地漫延,到了八点的时候,太阳公公就完全展示出自己灿烂、鲜艳的脸庞。太阳公公的后面不是蓝天哥哥和白云姐姐吗?它们都尽情释放出了自己最漂亮的一面。还有大山叔叔和小河妹妹,它们也溶进了这幅水墨丹青的优美画卷。
下午,知了叫个不停,几只鸽子飞来飞去,我和几个小朋友在森林里跑来跑去。前面是一棵参天大树,后面水潭静如明镜。太阳尽情地散发着光和热,强光直射森林,穿过叶子与叶子、枝与枝、树与树之间的空隙,投射进来,就像夜晚自由飞舞着的一只只萤火虫。
晚上,夏天的晚上可以用美不胜收这个词来形容。微风拂面,吹过草丛,也吹过大树,发出的窸窸簌簌声音,更加衬托出周围不寻常的宁静,让我想起“鸟鸣山更幽”的意境。天上繁星点点,银河灿灿,有像勺子的北斗七星,像卫星一样发出强烈光芒的北斗星。此外,弯弯的月亮,就像闪着银光的一片柳叶。
这样美丽的夏景,怎么能让我不喜欢呢!
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