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上海英语中考作文及格分【一】

Shanghai Disneyland will be open soon, as the day is so close, there are all kinds of trial run information released. The public is so looking forward to it and they want to have the honor become the first visitors. While after scanning the released information, they feel unsatisfied.

上海迪士尼乐园很快就要开放了,由于距离开放日子是如此的接近,各种各样的试行信息发布了出来。公众是如此的期待,他们希望能有荣幸成为第一批游客。然而在浏览了发布信息后,他们感到不满意。

The first is about the high entrance ticket. According to the average ticket of about 400 RMB, a family always need to pay at least for 3 persons, which means it takes them more than 1000 RMB. It is only the lowest budget for the local visitors, while for the nonlocal visitors, they need to pay for the hotel, which is a great expense.

第一个是关于高价格的门票。根据平均一张门票约400元,一个家庭总是需要支付至少3人,这意味着他们需要支付超过1000元人民币。然而最低的预算只是对于当地游客来说,而对于外地游客,他们需要支付酒店,这是一笔巨大的开销。

The second is the food in Disneyland. The offcial website has listed the price that offered in the amusement park. A beef burger with cheese is 80 RMB, a child-sized hot dog is 60 RMB and so on. Many people think it is such high price for them to pay. In that way, a family only pays for the food will cost more than 500 RMB!

第二个是迪斯尼乐园的食物。官方网站列出了游乐园提供的食物价格。一个牛肉汉堡和奶酪是80元,一个儿童的热狗是60元等等。许多人认为这是很高的价格。这样的话,一个家庭光支付食物就要超过500元!

The trial run of Shanghai Disneyland exposes many problems and the public concerns about the price. Maybe adjusting the price can attracts more tourists.

上海迪士尼乐园的试行反应了许多问题，公众关心的是价格。也许调整价格可以吸引更多的游客。

上海英语中考作文及格分【二】

导入：

第1段：提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题

正文：

第2段：Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法

结论：

第3段：These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法

上海英语中考作文及格分【三】

1。叙述的人称

英语的记叙文一般是以第一或第三人称的角度来叙述的。用第一称表示的是由叙述者亲眼所见、亲耳所闻的经历。它的优点在于能把故事的情节通过“我”来传达给读者，使人到真实可信，如身临其境。如：

The other day， I was driving along the street。 Suddenly， a car lost its control and ran directly towards me fast。 I was so frightened that I quickly turned to the left side。 But it was too late。 The car hit my bike and I fell off it。

用第三人称叙述，优点在于叙述者不受“我”活动范围以内的人和事物的限制，而是通过作者与读者之外的第三者，直接把故事中的情节展现在读者面前，文章的客观性很强。如：

Little Tom was going to school with an umbrella， for it was raining hard。 On the way， he saw an old woman walking in the rain with nothing to cover。 Tom went up to the old woman and wanted to share the umbrella with her， but he was too short。 What could he do? Then he had a good idea。

2。动词的时态

在记叙文中，记和叙都离不开动词。所以动词出现率最高，且富于变化。记叙文中用得最多的是动词的过去的\'，这是英语记叙文区别于汉语记叙文的关键之处。英语写作的优美之处就在于这些动词时态的变化，正是这一点才使得所记、所叙有鲜活的动态感、鲜明的层次感和立体感。

3。叙述的顺序

记叙一件事要有一定的顺序。无论是顺叙、倒叙、插叙还是补叙，都要让读者能弄清事情的来龙去脉。顺叙最容易操作，较容易给读者提供有关事情的空间和时间线索。但这种方法也容易使文章显得平铺直叙，读起来平淡乏味。倒叙、插叙、补叙等叙述方法能有效地提高文章的结构效果，让所叙之事跌宕起伏，使读者在阅读时思维产生较大的跳跃，从而为文章所吸引，深入其中。但这些方法如果使用不当，则容易弄巧成拙，使文章结构散乱，头绪不清，让读者不知所云。

4。叙述的过渡

过渡在上下文中起着承上启下、融会贯通的作用。过渡往往用在地点转移或时间、事件转换以及由概括说明到具体叙述时。如：

In my summer holidays， I did a lot of things。 Apart form doing my homework， reading an English novel， watching TV and doing some housework， I went on a trip to Qingdao。 It is really a beautiful city。 There are many places of interest to see。 But what impressed me most was the sunrise。

The next morning I got up early。 I was very happy because it was a fine day。 By the time I got to the beach， the clouds on the horizon were turning red。 In a little while， a small part of the sun was gradually appearing。 The sun was very red， not shining。 It rose slowly。 At last it broke through the red clouds and jumped above the sea， just like a deep-red ball。 At the same time the clouds and the sea water became red and bright。

What a moving and unforgettable scene!

5。叙述与对话

引用故事情节中主要人物的对话是记叙文提高表现力的一种好方法。适当地用直接引语代替间接的主观叙述，可以客观生动地反映人物的性格、品质和心理状态，使记叙生动、有趣，使文章内容更加充实、具体。试比较下面两段的叙述效果：

I was in the kitchen， and I was cooking something。 Suddenly I heard a loud noise from the front。 I thought maybe someone was knocking the door。 I asked who it was but I heard no reply。 After a while I saw my cat running across the parlor。 I realized it was the cat。 I felt released。

这本来应是一段故事性很强的文字，但经作者这么一写，就不那么吸引人了。原因是文中用的都是叙述模式，没有人物语言，把“悬念”给冲淡了。可作如下调整：

I was in the kitchen cooking something。 "Crash!" a loud noise came from the front。 Thinking someone was knocking at the door， I asked， "Who?" No reply。 After a while， I saw my cat running across the parlor。 "It＇s you。" I said， quite released。

上海英语中考作文及格分【四】

Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.

Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?

Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.

上海英语中考作文及格分【五】

如果树苗因为怕痛而拒绝修剪，那就永远不会成材。

——题记

时间如流水，匆匆而逝，转眼间，我已从一个稚嫩的女孩长成了一个落落大方的初三毕业生。一路走来，磕磕绊绊，经历过痛苦与悲伤，开心与喜悦，承受过从谷底走到顶峰，又从顶峰跌下谷底。在岁月的洗礼中，我尝试着去面对一切困难，尝试着坚强，在尝试中成长。

一岁那年，我尝试着走路。但胆小的我不愿意松开妈妈的手，死死抓住不放，就像抓住最后一根救命稻草一样。妈妈一面想抓开我的手，一面又小心谨慎的想扶着我，她希望我能够独自学会走路，又不想我受伤。最后，妈妈咬咬牙，把我松开了。没了妈妈的持扶，我有些慌了，摇摇晃晃的，可怜兮兮的望着妈妈，妈妈前进两步，但还是没来。看来靠妈妈是没用了，我也只好靠自己了。我尝试着迈开右腿，双手张开，一个踉跄，摔在地上，疼得我哇哇大哭，可妈妈没有来扶我，我只好自己起来。可是胖嘟嘟的我爬起来实在是太困难了，过了几分钟才爬起来。我决心要靠自己，一定要学会走路，不管摔倒多少次，接下来的几个小时里，经常听到“砰”的摔跤声，摔倒，爬起来，摔倒，爬起来，再摔倒，继续爬，周而复始……最终，我学会了走路，当我走到妈妈面前时，妈妈开心得眼泪都出来了。

八岁，我尝试着骑自行车。刚开始，爸爸一直在后面扶着，我一直叫着“别松手，别松手!”我很害怕，万一爸爸一松手，要是摔倒了，肯定很痛。可谁知道，爸爸已经偷偷松开了手，刚开始我还不知道，当我一回头，发现爸爸已经松手了，一下子从车上摔了下来，说实话，疼死我了。我问爸爸为什么松手，他说“相信自己”。我重新起来，骑上自行车.....经过几次失败，我终于掌握了要领，尽量保持平衡，终于学会了骑自行车。

回想以前，失败，我尝试着坦然面对失败，并努力学习，在下次考试中，取得优异成绩;与朋友吵架，我尝试着宽容，收获了友谊，在尝试中成长，让我的成长之路愈加精彩。