【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
爱在萌芽,体在升温
淅淅沥沥的雨不停地下着,望向窗外的一幅幅画面,我不由使目光投向了一位中年妇女,和那一个天真烂漫的孩子。妇女用湿湿的手环在孩子的腰上,用单薄而湿的衣服将孩子包裹。可雨下的更猛,风刮的更烈,看着他们俩瘦小的身躯,怎能受得住雨的敲打!回头看了看身旁坚实而柔软的.衣服,再看看那动人心弦的画面,我拿起了衣服在窗外愣着。我不知我还在犹豫什么,不知自己的心里在想些什么,不知自己下一刻应该怎么办!这时,邻居家的小孩拿起了他的衣服和伞,冲下了楼,雨随着风飘到了阳台上,我才知道这雨是这么的冰凉入骨。才知道自己和小孩比起来是多么的渺小无比。这一刻,我的爱在萌芽,体在升温……
爱在成长,心在喜悦
走在大街上,人还是那么拥挤无常;在人行道上,人还是鱼贯而入,鱼贯而出;在我的心里,人还是那么冷漠无情。一个老人走在人行道上,因为腿脚不便,所以走得很慢。然而,走在后面的人便窃窃私语起来。说老人当着他们走路,说老人耽误了他们的时间。更糟糕的是,有一个青年人便故意走过去挤了老人一下,还不怀好意的说:“死老头,你为什么撞我!”说完便扬长而去。看得出来,这个老人是一个无家可归的人,他还是默默无闻的走着,仿佛这个世界与他无关。我走过去,买了一些食物给他,并问了他的由来,只发现他眼里闪着泪光。他接了我的食物,他没有白要,而是用他唯一的2元钱给我换(这也是他捡垃圾卖的),然后就走了。我喜的不是这2元钱,而是爱在成长,心在喜悦……
爱已长大,我心永恒
院子里,王大爷身体瘫痪,行动不便,我很想帮助他快点痊愈,但是我小小年纪又应该如何帮助他呢?于是我用我的零花钱买了一个按摩仪。本想送给王大爷,可王大爷坚决不要,于是我放在自己家里,每天让王大爷来,5个月过去了,医生说好多了,叫坚持做按摩,听了可别提多高兴。我真的长大了,真的长大了!心灵真的开阔了许多!爱已长大,我心永恒……
从小事做起,从小时做起。心灵如人,越来越好,终究会长大的!
今年五月是自治区第32个民族团结教育月,新疆天山电影制片厂将阿尼帕·阿力马洪的真实故事改编拍摄成电影《真爱》,在五月开始全国公映。5月24日,公司组织全体员工观看影片,《真爱》用真实自然的故事与唯美的表现形式感动了我,观影中,我的眼泪止不住的流淌,即使写这篇观后感,我也能感觉到自己内心的激荡,我的眼角竟然再一次泛起泪花,我甚至无法找到合适的语句来做这篇观后感的题目,人间的伟大莫过于此,如此的真爱该如何诠释?
《真爱》是一部主旋律电影,它拍摄得如此唯美, 在讲述故事的同时让观众产生了心灵深处的共鸣,让大爱广为传播。影片讲述的故事是新疆各族人民长期以来相濡以沫、共同建设新疆、守望美好家园的心灵路程,影片中所表达的“母爱”就像是一条宽大的河流,在人间温暖的河床上流淌,而这个河床是不分民族和地域的。这部电影中有很多留白,就像泼墨的国画一般,季节性画面呈现得美轮美奂,音乐如同天籁,景语已经变成了情语,这也是这部电影为什么会使观众们潸然泪下的原因,质朴的情境留住了观众的心。纯净的天空、温暖的毡房、风吹草动的画面,表现了剧中人物在现实中经受了种种磨难之后,内心是如何获取踏实和希望的。
《真爱》是触及人们命运和灵魂的电影,影片中,19个孩子从过去的苦难到现在的幸福,用了3个时空来表现,其中最难的是上世纪70年代,在那个时代还没有进入商业社会,人和人之间的感情直接简单,那时生活条件虽然艰苦但是幸福指数并不低,虽然时代不一样,但人们对幸福的感受都一样,那就是“爱”。阿尼帕妈妈的事迹让我们感动,影片中老人沧桑的脸,她那双粗糙的手,我们可以想象阿尼帕妈妈抚养19个孩子的不易,能感受到剧中人物的丰富情感。
《真爱》强大的感染力,让人震撼不已,真爱的情怀和力量足以征服观众。伟大的母亲,伟大的付出,伟大的真爱,这是跨越时代、民族、文化和一切社会界限的,所有的人生都是被这样的爱滋养着,托举着的。
《真爱》是真心之爱,人人身上皆有之,人人心中向往之,所以它在不同民族、不同地域都产生了强烈共鸣,这是良知与爱的力量的传递过程,也是构建和谐社会,传递正能量的和谐音符。《真爱》强大的感染力,让人震撼不已,真爱的情怀和力量足以征服观众。以下是小编整理的相关范文,希望对你有帮助。
在常人心中,爱是?献,爱是付出。可是,这样的爱又太仁慈,太小心了。她把花儿栽到了温室里,却没想到,没有了风雨,没有了挫折,美丽的花儿只会凋零、败落。爱要有度,否则大爱只会沦为无爱。
有度才是真爱。北海爱鲲,她包容,她广博,她将鲲视为掌上明珠,北海把自己的一切奉献给鲲,从而成就了“鲲之大,不知其几千里也”的壮景。但她的爱不是将鲲束缚于自己的怀抱中。鲲长大了,他向往比北海更广阔的蓝天,他争着向上,变鳞为羽,化尾为翅,是北海的爱成就了变鲲为鹏的飞跃。
从这里,我们可以清楚地看到北海的爱是有度的,在付出爱的时候?成就了灿烂,在收回爱的同时,又成就了辉煌。爱要有度,在需要爱退出的时候,爱的退出便是爱。
我们更不会忘记我们伟大的领袖***,他的伟大不仅在于为全中国人民付出,更在于作为父亲,他的爱更令人沉思,更让人感动。当国家危急,战火欲燃之时,他决然地将自己的儿子送上战场,他的爱随着儿子的远走去到了战火纷飞的阵地。谁说领袖的孩子就应该在国内养尊处优,他应该到最危险的前线去感受艰难!一张张的战报牵动着无数父母的心,主席的.心何尝不牵挂在这一张张的战报上!他的爱是默默的,却又是最震撼人心的,他没有让自己的儿子?享安宁,而是让他接受炮火的洗礼,从而变得更坚强。
有度才是真爱,其实伟大的爱也就在于无声无息。她无声地来,无声地去。她衡量尺度,不会付出的过多,也不会使自己更名为溺爱。过多的爱,只会让奔腾的江水怒吼着冲进城市,只会让无垠的大海掀起滔天巨浪,只会让花朵变得更加脆弱易折。
有度才是真爱,我们何不让绿洲时时流淌着清泉,何不让炭火不停地送上温暖,何不让驼铃不歇地送出希望,何不让孩子经历风雪、踏过山川,寻找属于自己的坚强!
有度才是真爱,我们应把握好爱的分寸,爱有尺度。这样才能成就他人,完善自己!
今年五月是自治区第32个民族团结教育月,新疆天山电影制片厂将阿尼帕·阿力马洪的真实故事改编拍摄成电影《真爱》,在五月开始全国公映。5月24日,公司组织全体员工观看影片,《真爱》用真实自然的故事与唯美的表现形式感动了我,观影中,我的眼泪止不住的流淌,即使写这篇,我也能感觉到自己内心的激荡,我的眼角竟然再一次泛起泪花,我甚至无法找到合适的语句来做这篇观后感的题目,人间的伟大莫过于此,如此的真爱该如何诠释?
《真愛》是觸及人們命運和靈魂的電影,影片中,19個孩子從過去的苦難到現在的幸福,用了3個時空來表現,其中最難的是上世紀70年代,在那個時代還沒有進入商業社會,人和人之間的感情直接簡單,那時生活條件雖然艱苦但是幸福指數並不低,雖然時代不一樣,但人們對幸福的感受都一樣,那就是“愛”。
►給19個孩子“當”母親不是容易事。阿尼帕媽媽的事蹟讓我們感動,影片中老人滄桑的臉,她那雙粗糙的手,我們可以想像阿尼帕媽媽撫養19個孩子的不易,能感受到劇中人物的豐富情感。
►這部影片非常適合各家長帶著孩子去觀看,可以讓孩子們用自己純真的心去感受新疆的美,新疆人的美。為今後孩子們的成長樹立了正確的世界觀、人生觀、價值觀。這是一部好電影,沒有誇張手法,沒有超越生活,人物有血有肉。來自烏魯木齊市二年級的莎依達克,看完電影也是紅著眼睛出來的,用稚嫩的聲音說道:“阿尼帕媽媽把孩子們養大真不容易,我回家一定要對我媽媽更好一些,聽她的話,再不惹她生氣了。”
►影片結尾處,看到了一張有著各族面孔的全家福,這張全家福是我們中華民族的縮影。在民族和諧的中華大地、民族融合的華夏九州島,只有各民族相互團結、相互幫助,才能建設起我們幸福美好的`家園。真情無限、大愛永存,讓祖國各民族和諧共存、永續發展。
►觀看整部影片的過程,讓人的心揪在一起,如坐過山車一般,時而為他們的天真童趣而開懷大笑,時而為他們的坎坷辛酸而輕聲啜泣,時而為他們的無私博愛而低頭思索。讓我們經歷了一場暢快淋漓的情感歷練,更讓我們經歷了一場充滿人間大愛的道德洗禮。更讓我們明白民族團結不是口號,是真心、是真情、是不分彼此的相互融合,是關心、是關愛、是和衷共濟的相依相伴,同呼吸、共命運,是任何困難都無法分割的水乳交融。
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