Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
绿茵茵的草地蓝悠悠的天,洁白的羊群远飞的雁……
去听那悠扬的歌,去走那漫漫长长的路,闻那绿草的清香……
呼伦贝尔大草原是我的家乡,这里的天气并不像南方那么酷热,而是非常的凉爽,是个避暑胜地。闭上眼睛,让微风轻轻的抚过面颊,让全身都放松、你会发现自己进入了世外桃源。我们会经常看见十字绣,那十字绣很美,但美在哪里呢?它主要美在“嵌入”这个词上。草原上那洁白的羊群,不就像是嵌在草原这块绿色画布上的一朵朵大白花儿吗?而且,绣的还那么逼真,那么袖珍,那么让人无法从它的身上挪开目光。
如果在漫漫的草地上穿梭,不听一点悦耳的音乐是否感到乏味无趣呢?百灵鸟可是一个好的“播放器”呢!在草原上欣赏美景时,百灵鸟那悦耳动听的鸣叫声就像在开音乐会一样,会使你感到来到了一个绿色的仙境,感觉听到了天籁的声音。这里的七八月份是最美的季节,每年的这个时候,都是旅游旺季。我想信很多朋友都没有来看过这片草原,现在让我来为大家做个导游,让我陪大家一起看一看这片美丽的草原吧。
首先,我要陪你去看看金帐汗蒙古部落,这个部落是呼伦贝尔唯一以游牧部落为景观的旅游景点,位于呼伦贝尔草原“中国第一曲水”的莫尔格勒河畔。这里是中外驰名的天然牧场。一代天骄成吉思汗曾在这里秣马厉兵,与各部落争雄,最终占据了呼伦贝尔草原。当你来到这里时,你可以低头看看你脚下的绿草,你会觉得她的绿让你心旷神怡,那点缀于草地之间的野花儿会引起你无限的暇思,再放眼望去,那洁白的.蒙古包像天上的点点白云,美不胜收,还有那草原上奔驰的骏马,悠然自得吃着草的牛羊,让你觉得自己到了天堂,乐不思归。
其次,我陪大家来看看额尔古纳河,这条河是黑龙江的支流,是中国与俄罗斯的界河。额尔古纳河沿岸地区土地肥沃,森林茂密,水草丰美,鱼类品种很多,动植物资源丰富,宜农、宜牧,是人类理想的天堂。这里良好的自然环境,养育过许多古代少数民族,古代蒙古部落曾经在此游牧、渔猎,并深为这片美丽的家园而自豪。后来,成吉思汗就把他的弟弟分封于此,至今,在黑山头还有其王府遗迹呢。
再次,我陪大家看看满洲里国门,现在的国门是第五代国门,目前是中国陆路口岸最大的国门,国门高30米,宽40米,建成。国门庄严肃穆,在国门乳白色的门体上方嵌着"中华人民共和国"七个鲜红大字,上面悬挂的国徽闪着的金光,国际铁路在下面通过。登上国门,俄边境内的景象就会尽收眼底。国门对面不远处是俄罗斯的国门,国门上"РОССИЯ"六个硕大的金色字母,格外引人注目,俄罗斯国徽镶在国门北侧的立柱上方。如果你到呼伦贝尔来,这里可是不能不看的地方哦!
呼伦贝尔大草原上还有很多很美丽的景致,比如:有红花尔基森林公园、海拉尔国家森林公园(这里都是珍贵的樟子松,这片森林就离我家不远噢。、达莱湖等等很多值得一看的地方。
对了,来到草原,最不能错过的就是草原的特色美食。令人垂涎三尺美食有很多,比如手把肉啦,涮羊肉啦,特色手拉肚、奶茶、风干牛肉、肉肠、米肠、羊血肠、奶豆腐等等,只要吃了第一次,就绝对还想吃第二次。所以,美食良机,不容错过哦!
呼伦贝尔草原,不但景美,而且这里的人们更是热情、善良、淳朴、好客。山美景美人更美,就是这样,让这呼伦贝尔大草原扬名天下。就是在这里,你可以将美景收于眼底,为什么还不赶快来玩呢?
呼伦贝尔大草原,我的家乡!欢迎你来做客!到时我来为你做导游,我来陪你一起看草原,请你喝上一杯醇香的奶茶,共渡草原最美丽的季节。
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