I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
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第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
你像素衣的仙人,周身缥缈着云雾、仙气,轻轻向我走来,我的生命中充满了你的神奇色彩我用崇敬的语气唤了一声:“太白!”
我高傲自豪之时,也是你飞黄腾达之时。那是,你深受玄宗赏识,金碧辉煌的大殿之上,贵妃研墨,力士脱靴,舞动着豪迈潇洒的风姿。你满腹经纶,才高八斗,一壶美酒,让你的身上满是醇香,百世流芳!
我灰心丧气之时,正是你落魄失意之时。你的辉煌让满朝文武心怀嫉妒,最后,你才明白,你只是皇帝手中把弄的玩物罢了。让他开心的,立刻荣华富贵一生享用不尽;而让他发怒的,便会落入万丈深渊,永远爬不起来。于是,你离开了那个是非之地,开始了放荡的流浪生活。
“俱怀逸兴壮思飞,欲上青天览明月。”你的志气如大眼青云直上,把我沉入深谷的心提捞上来,一直冲到九天碧霄,我重新恢复了往日的自信。你微笑着对我说:“天生我材必有用,千金散尽还复来。”那时,我发现,我的生命中不能没有你。
“仰天大笑出门去,我辈岂是蓬蒿人。”你的脸上写满自信,写满豪放。
“桃花潭水深千尺,不及汪伦送我情。”汪伦的一句“万家酒店,十里桃花”将你引去,未料是空谈,而你却永远记住了他,把他视为知心朋友。一封素筏为你寄去相思,一壶浊酒让我们永记潭水般深厚的友情!
你是否在街上捡起过垃圾?是否为维护班级的利益而争斗过,是否送过一个孩子回家……其实,这些都是我们应尽的责任和义务啊!
人人都说父母抚养孩子是天经地义的事情,是他们的义务和责任。那么,我们又想过没有,孝敬父母也是我们作为孩子的责任和义务呢?
人们都认为大自然应该为人类做贡献,那是它的义务和责任。可是我们想过没有,我们人类无休止地开发和利用资源,破坏大自然,这又是在尽我们的责任吗?我们都在怪大自然的灾害使我们的经济受到损失,但是我们却没有深邃到我们的这些做法其实也是不负责任的行为。
还有,我们无时无刻不在践踏着生命。一棵小草,一只蚂蚁,一朵花朵在我们的脚下死去了,我们还一点儿也不会觉得心痛。这,难道不是我们缺乏责任心的表现吗?我们是应该反思反思了。
几十年前,内蒙古草原一望无际,满眼的绿色,充满着生机和活力,各种动物在草原上奔跑着。可是,后来人们却干涉了它们的正常的生活,非要搞什么开垦荒田,使草原狼销声匿迹。这,难道这是我们的责任吗?看看现在的草原,枯黄的荒地,人们又开始植树种草,为什么只有在做过之后才知错呢?
责任,责任是什么?是我们的负担。正是因为我们大都是在错过之后才知道后悔的,所以我们的责任才会越来越重。
希望人们以后能够越来越强地意识到我们的责任。
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第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成\"总—分—总\"结构
山,犹如圣哲,沉稳敦厚;水,犹如豆蔻女子,灵动,聪慧。山水造就了世间生命的美丽。
有人生活在绿柳如阴的江南,却向往千里冰封、万里雪飘的`北国风光;有人生活在浩瀚无边、波澜壮阔的海边,却期待一览驼走大漠、长河落日的壮美;有人生活在明月松间照,清泉石上流的乡间,却向往过灯红酒绿的都市生活。“生活中并不是缺少美,只是缺少发现美的眼睛”。生活中的人们往往忽略了身边的风景,静思品味时,就会发现风景这边独好。
我的家乡在日照,那青幽幽的山,清粼粼的水,无时无刻不留在我的记忆深处。
家乡的山上有许许多多姿态各异的石头,有的相互依靠,像是在说悄悄话,那神情宛如羞涩的少女;有的则高高站起,抬头向上,似乎要仰天长啸,抒发心中的激情;更有趣的是像顽童一样的石头,这儿一堆,那儿一块,好像是在做捉迷藏的游戏。春天到来山上百花齐放,万紫千红,争奇斗艳;夏天树木翠绿,树荫遮阳,凉风送爽……真是一派迷人的好风景。
山有山的灵秀,水有水的空灵。在山腰平坦处有一水渠,终日流淌着清澈见底的河水,水流到远处的小河里面,小河河面宛如明镜一般,清晰地映出蓝的天、白的云、红的花、绿的树。小河是活的,层层粼粼细波随风而起,伴着跳跃的阳光,伴着我的心,在追逐,在玩耍,河中偶有小鱼自由自在的游玩;小河是软的,微风吹过,波纹道道,像一幅迎风飘舞的丝绸;小河是硬的,像一块无暇的翡翠,闪烁着美丽的光泽。我经常在河边散步,在静静的河边徜徉,偶尔投一块小石子,或放一只小纸船在河里,随着河水轻轻飘荡。正是这充满活力的水造就了那秀丽的山,滋润了花草树木,也滋润了我的心田。
无须去名山大川,无须到沧海大漠,怀有一颗赤诚的心和一双善于发现的眼睛,无论世事怎样变化,无论走向何方,我依然爱你,家乡的山河。
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