亲爱的爸爸:
您好!
您知道吗?您一年到头都在外地打工,为我们一家挣来那得之不易的血汗钱作为生活费,可是钱回来了,却不见你的人回归家里啊!
去年,您好不容易从百忙之中抽空回家,我高兴地为您打开门时,却被一个我从未见过的景象惊呆了:您的身上沾满了灰尘,手上还有石灰留下的印子,在咳嗽声中,你伸手拍了拍身上的水泥,这些水泥是从工地上带下来的,它们是些害人精,沾了水泥的皮肤通红的,也是身上痒的原因。
您的这个形象让我在大脑中构建出了您在工地工作的样子,可您还高兴地说工地是您挣大钱的地方。我心中想:这哪里是挣大钱的地方呀?这分明是一个害人的地方!您进了屋,高兴地在家里转来转去,时不时还伸手去抓痒,我在旁边看着,真心疼啊!
您还有一个坏习惯,我真希望你可以戒掉,那就是爱打麻将!
以前您在家时,一有时间就去打麻将。早上起了床,第一件事就是去打麻将,中午回来吃过饭后,又去接着打,晚上吃了饭后还是去打麻将,一直打到晚上十二点左右才回来。就在去年,你去打麻将,一打就是十二个小时啊!望着您那黑黑的眼圈,我真希望世上没有麻将这个害人的东西,在这里,我想问一下你在外地还有没有打麻将呀?
我希望您可以早点回来,并改掉打麻将这个坏习惯。
祝
万事如意,身体健康!
您亲爱的儿子:xx
20xx年1月3日
爸爸:
对不起,我今天又和您吵架了。
您骑着摩托带着我,路旁的街景剪辑般地向后退,我知道离考场越来越近了。我趴在您背上,还在拼命地背着“水何澹澹,山岛竦峙”。您无数次问我考试用具准备好没有,您不厌其烦,我却早已听厌:“爸,您能不能不烦我?”您终于沉默了。爸爸,您不知道,我无意间看到那发白的鬓角,我想起了妈妈藏在橱子里快要用光的染发剂,那时我突然觉得自己是一个罪人,一个***人犯,是我谋***了您的青春。我不想让您打断我背诵那些古诗,因为我不想再谋***了您美好的希望。
爸爸,您现在一定还在学校的大门外,找一张别人丢弃的传单纸,扑在台阶上坐着,捧着一瓶矿泉水等我出来。爸爸,对不起!我知道,年少不是借口;我知道,未来的路不能这样走;我知道,从前的我任性执拗。
爸爸,您一定还记得一个月前,我揉破二模成绩单,赌气地对您说:“考多少分不用你管!”您一定还记得一年前我躲在床上不去上补习班,您对我大吼:“你别在折磨我!”您一定还记得三年前我因为您不让我看《大风车》离家出走,当我望着小摊上的煎饼馃子正馋的流口水时,您伸出温暖的手把我拉走……
爸爸,您一定还记得好多好多。爸爸,每一次您都原谅了我,爸爸,我错了。
爸爸,还有十分钟就收卷了。
爸爸,还有两个月我就要上高中了。
爸爸,在有三年我就要远离家乡去读大学了。
爸爸,我要用一辈子的时间来向您说:“对不起!”因为您等我,爱我,不仅仅是这两个小时。
祝您
健康
愿意抛弃年少这一借口的您的孩子
××××年×月×日
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
To see a world in a grain of sand,
And a heaven in a wild flower,
Hold infinity in the palm of your hand,
And eternity in an hour.
一沙一世界,
一花一天堂,
手中即无限,
永恒亦短暂。
亲爱的爸爸:
您好!
您的工作很忙,您忘记了自己的节日吧!这个星期日是父亲节,爸爸您是伟大的,我爱您,但我又不曾表白,如果再失去父亲节这么一个机会,留下的恐怕不只是遗憾了,爸,您说人为什么拥有时不知道珍惜,到失去了感到他的宝贵呢?
爸,您还记得“世上只有妈妈好”这首歌吧,但是在我小的时候,我就已经改了这首歌,改成了“世上只有爸爸好”,爸,我不管心里想什么,我都会告诉你,在您面前,我想说什么就说什么,但是为什么我不会说“我爱您,爸爸”呢,我曾经试过,但是每次说的时候,又说不出来。
爸爸,您的大度包揽了一切,从未计较过什么。每当看到您头上的一丝白发时,我感到一丝愧疚。
爸爸,每次我受了委屈的时候,您那宽厚的胸膛是我避风的.港湾。年少气盛的我,不谙世情,倔强的性格使我处处碰壁。您微微笑着轻轻拭去我脸上的泪珠,与我侃侃而谈。谈人与人之间的关系,谈人生的意义。抚慰我的伤口,告诉我人是为了什么而活着。
爸,每当我考试考的不好的时候,您对我说,你努力了吗?如果你已经努力了,尽力了,失败了其实也没有什么,你应该失败了在爬起来,不过,你一定要记住别忘了在抓一把泥土,一定要知道自己为何失败了?您还说,其实你考的不好,应该感到快乐才对,因为你已经知道了自己差的地方,以后就应该加把劲。
爸,每当我陷入莫名的情结时,您为我举起了导航灯,引导我走出恼人的旋涡,重新鼓起勇气站在竞争的起跑线上。
爸,祝您节日快乐!
亲爱的爸爸:
您好吗?
最近住在我们家楼上的那一家搬走了,我很开心!他们住在我们家楼上的这四年,每一天都会发出很大的噪音,影响了我的学习和休息。
记得那一天晚上,我吃完饭跑到房间写起作业。大部分作业很快做完了,就剩数学试卷上的的最后一道思考题。这是一道奥数题,我左思右想也想不出来,非常苦恼,正在思考得脑仁疼的时候,突然听到楼上传来了“滋滋”的声音。这声音就像有个电钻正在我的头顶钻洞,感觉脑子要爆炸了
我知道是楼上那一家的狗又在抓地板了,他们家天天发出这样的声音。这时我实在受不了了,随手拿起一本书,扔向了天花板,只听见那“滋滋”声音越来越快,越来越响,仿佛天花板都要被它抓一个洞。
听到响声,妈妈走了进来,说:“你不要惹它了,说不定它就消停了。楼上这家人的素质真差,早走早好。”过了一会儿,果然没动静了。时间不早了,我洗漱准备上床睡觉。没想到,刚闭上眼,“滋滋”声又开始了
如今,他们那一家终于搬走了,我很开心。他们搬走的第二天,我和妈妈决定上去看看。推开门,大吃一惊,当初租给他们的时候特意刚刷了白墙,现在成了黑墙,上面布满了很多的涂鸦、鞋印、狗爪印遍地的狗毛和灰尘;厕所的马桶池内已经成黑黄色,妈妈用了整整一瓶消毒液才让陶瓷漏出些白色出来。我们怀疑他们家这几年都没有打扫过卫生,妈妈决定以后再也不把房子租给别人了。
爸爸,以后我就可以睡好觉了,您高兴吗?希望您能早点回家,我今天就写到这儿吧!
此致
敬礼
您的儿子孙兴
20xx·11·28
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