虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
这类考生往往缺乏刨根究底的精神,总是在主旨周围绕圈子,不达中心。这也是中国考生的通病,看似八九不离十,却总也不愿把话点破,让考官怎能不又急又气。
在所有的扩展方式之中,因果推理法是最受用也是最透彻的方法。凡事先追溯到其原由,再扩展其结果,这是将主题阐述清晰、论述有力并且具有逻辑感的最佳手段。例如在“出国留学利弊”这一题目之前,若考生单纯说“有可能会使青少年学坏”,难免缺乏说服力,但若紧接着扩展“因为孩子高中毕业后思想上还不成熟,若认识不好的朋友会难以抵抗社会上不好的诱惑”,那么此论点一定会让考官眉头舒展,点头认同。由此可见,善用此推理法会让议论文如虎添翼,事半功倍。
引出原因的表达方式主要有:Because../Since.../As....
引出结果的表达方式主要有:so.../Therefore,.../Consequently,.../Accordingly,... /As a result,.../In this way,.../result in.../Thanks to.../Due to.../ Owing to..
【写作真题】Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or ate out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. Discuss.
【名师献计】It is important to note that imports are now increasingly affordable to the general population. Thanks to the rapid development of the freight transport industry, air travel has become an economical mode of transport, resulting in the subsequent decrease in the cost of importing. Meanwhile, technical advance in the food processing industry has made it much easier to preserve fresh fruits and vegetables over a long-haul air flight. Because of the wide availability of imported crops, there are more varieties...
此类例子往往缺乏客观性和说服力,由于第一人称的局限导致所叙述事件难免“鸡毛蒜皮”。要明白,个人不代表整体。
例:I keep my dog to avoid my loneliness and I find a lot of fun.
这样的例子让人犹如在看记叙文,和议论文很不搭调。
写作我也一直不差,因为以前背过新概念的一些文章。雅思的其实想要提高也不是难事,我买了一本《雅思万能八分作文》,还不错,里面有很多句子值得借鉴;然后我看了一些从3G上下载的范文,又从里面挑了一些句子和表达;在最后一天的时候,把我挑的句子和表达都罗列在一起,大概也就50条左右,我背了一下,接着就计时练了一次,结果在规定时间内直接写超了,TASK1写了200多,TASK2写了350,当时把我吓了一跳,因为我怕考试的时候按这样的思路写这么多时间会不够。所以在考试的时候,我写的比较慢,控制好节奏,每句话都是想好了再下笔的,最后字数差不多。
建议:1,一定要看一定数目的
有一天,小猴背着箩筐从小熊门前走过。小熊忙走上前问:“上哪去呀?” “到地里收割东西呀,你去吗?”小猴说。“你收割的东西给我一半,我就去。”小熊回答。小猴想了想,说:“好吧,那一块儿走吧!”
他们俩高高兴兴地来到地里,小猴指着一片绿油油的箩卜菜地说:“快动手拔吧,土上面的全归你,我只要下面的,行吗?”小熊不假思索地答应了,说着他们就动手干起来。小熊用两手抓住一把叶子使劲一拔,拔出了一个又大又圆的萝卜。它一看,忙说:不干了,不干了。你分大箩卜,给我分不能吃的叶子,我才不干呢!”小猴说:“哎,说话要算数呀!不是说好了吗?”小熊无话可说了。
拔完箩卜,小熊坐在那儿很不高兴,小猴指着旁边的几棵长杆作物,说:“来,咱们换一下,这瘦瘦的秆归我,土底下的全归你,好吧?”小熊想这回还差不多,于是它痛快地答应了。小熊抱住一根秆儿使劲拔了出来。可是,土底下除了一大把“胡子”什么也没有。这有啥用呢?小熊把它丢在一边。
“哎,我的一半还在上面呢,别丢呀!”小猴说着,就把秆砍下来削了削,津津有味地吃起来,还分了一节给小熊。小熊吃了一口,甜得眯起了眼睛:“呀,真好吃!这是什么?”“甘蔗呀!”小猴得意地说。“不干了,不干了!甘蔗这么好吃,得分给我一半!”。“别吵,别吵,那边还多着了哩!”小猴又把小熊领玉米地到里,说:“这一次秆和叶子归你,我只要上面的小棒棒就行了。”小熊听了又蹦又跳,心想:这下我可有吃的了,还可以带一些回去给妈妈呢。几根小棒有什么好的,我才不稀罕呢!
小熊越想越开心,拿起砍刀就使劲砍起来,不一会儿就砍了一大堆,小熊心里有说不出的喜悦,他顺手拿了一根啃起来,怎么一点也不好吃?小熊抬起头一看,小猴正剥去棒棒的皮,吃着上面珍珠般的粒粒呢。小熊见了“哇”地一声哭了起来:“你骗人,你骗人,你真坏”,小猴笑了,说:“我是故意逗你的,只是让你知道,事情还没弄清处之前,不能随便答应别人,要不然会上当的!”最后,小熊和小猴都背着自己分到的东西高高兴兴的回家了。
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