早晨天麻亮月亮还挂在天边公园已经热热闹闹了瞧!人们抓紧时间、晨炼、朗读诗句……一年之际在于春嘛!我和爸爸也早起来到公园晨炼刚到公园就传来一阵悠扬的乐曲声我顺着乐曲跑过去原来是一群老爷爷、老奶奶们正在舞剑他们手舞长剑时而“蛟龙戏水“,他们的动作是那么优雅,深深地吸引了我,我也情不自禁地从地上捡起一根树枝把它当成长剑跟着这些老爷爷,老奶奶们舞起剑来,要不是爸爸叫我去跑步,直到现在,我还在舞剑呢!我只好遵从父命,爸爸一起跑步,没跑多久我就累得气喘吁吁,正在我跑不动的时候,我身后来了一个年轻的小伙子。他也正在跑步,从他的肌肉里可以看出他是一个经常锻炼的人。
天是这么冷,都过冬至了,他还只穿着一件单薄的背心和一条平脚裤,他似乎没有感到天气的寒冷,我不禁倒吸一口气,不经意之间他已在我身边跑了好几圈,虽然他的背心已经被汗水渗透了,但从他的样子好像一点也不觉得累,他还是接着跑。我的身体里突然涌起一股力气,我的跑步速度加快了。啊!公园的早晨真美啊!呈现出一派生气勃勃的动人景象。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
to prevent H7N9 we should know some common sense. First of all, it is important for us to prevent H7N9 from ourselves. For example, clean our hands frequently.
Sencondly, do more exercises. Such as running. Lastly, change our diet to keep balence. For example, eat more types of vegetables and drink more water
Smoking is a bad habit that does harm to smoker and others. Many kinds of diseases and cancers are caused by smoking, such as tracheitis, lung cancer and many other diseases. Recent years, there are tens of thousands of people dying of smoking. But there still are many people enjoying smoking, because they think smoking is a kind of fashion and smoking is so cool, especially among teenagers. In addition, smoking does harm to others as well. Second hand smoking has been recognized harmful to other people. Even worse, it may cause more damages. Therefore, people should remember that smoking is harmful to others and those people who smokes should give up smoking as soon as possible.
吸烟是个坏习惯,它对吸烟者和别人都有害。很多疾病和癌症是有吸烟引起的,比如说气管炎,肺癌还有很多其他疾病。近年来,成千上万的人死于吸烟。但是仍然有很多人喜欢吸烟,因为他们认为吸烟是一种时尚,很酷,特别是青少年。另外,吸烟也会对别人有害。二手烟是公认的对别人有害的。更糟糕的是,它会带来更多伤害。因此,人们应该牢记吸烟有害他人,那些吸烟的人应该尽可能戒烟。
最后他决定去学校啦,穿好衣服,往学校去了,半路上就在想怎么讲课,后来一想还在高三啦,没有多少讲的课,大部分时间都是在复习,所以他的担忧暂时没了,但是他的家里他又不知道,回去肯定暴漏身份,该怎么办呢,最后他决定去找张宇,想想办法,而那边张宇呢,也在想办法,他突然变成李奕啦,把他吓拉一跳,一上午也一直在想办法,而这时真正的李奕也过来找他了,他们一看都是一个想法,很高兴,他们上一边想办法了,可是最后也没想个好办法,最后他们讨论的睡着啦,而这时李奕给惊醒啦,一看周围的环境,都是自己的家,他自己拍啦拍自己的\'胸口,幸亏是梦,假如真要那样,自己都不知道要怎么办了,他又睡过去啦,早上吃完早饭,骑着车子上学去啦,还唱着歌,明显的高兴,因为,那是梦,不是现实,过啦5分钟,他到班里了,都没有变,过啦一会,他的老师张宇来了,他过来找李奕啦,问他是不是做啦一个很奇怪的梦,他一听说有,然后两个人开始谈做梦的细节,好多人也在听他们讲故事,后来终于讲完了,同学也在说幸亏是梦,假如是李奕当啦老师,那就完蛋了,成绩都得退步。
他和老师一听,也说,幸亏没有交换,要不然双方的家长和家里会发生大事情,都拍啦拍自己的胸口,惊险。
人生的旅途上处处长满了荆棘,鼓起你的勇气,大步向前。请相信,路是人踏出来的,别说“不行”,自信,让你成功。
谁一生下来便会走路,便会写字?知识靠积累,勇气靠磨练。别再红着脸,腼腆地说:“我不行。”
课堂上,有问题时只管站起来发言,不必紧张,不必害怕。勇敢发表自己的见解,即使未必正确,没有人会讥讽你,即使说的结结巴巴,投向你的,只会是敬佩的目光,同学们只会在心里为你鼓掌。因为你远比只敢在课桌边点点评评、窃窃私语的人了不起。喔,别说“我不行。”一个生活的勇士,是敢于在别人面前展露自己缺点的。
万事总是开头难,义无反顾地面对挑战迈出决定性的第一步,紧接着会有第二步、第三步,别说“我不行。”
运动场上,请迈开步伐去拼搏、奋斗吧,别因身体孱弱而退缩。禁不起波浪的鱼儿永远不能跃出水面;只会躲在安乐窝中的雏鹰终究无法在苍穹中翱翔。不必害怕跌倒,它只会使你的脚步更踏实、矫健;不必担心失败,失败乃是成功之母。通往胜利的路充满着坎坷,爱迪生为发明电灯曾试验过一千多种灯丝,每次失败他从不气馁,当有人嘲笑时,他却自豪的说:“我发现了一千多种物质不适合做灯丝。”这是怎样的勇气和自信啊!朋友,困难在强者面前只能是纸老虎。当你成功时,你就会发觉“这并不难,我行。”
不要让美好的青春在一片“不行”声中蹉跎过去,等到醒悟时,双鬓已斑白。莫让一生碌碌无为,举步踏入长满荆棘也充满阳光的大路,让生命散发光和热。
朋友,请别说“我不行”。自信,会让你更成功。
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