考场作文时间性特别强,一般五、六百字就行了,这就要求我们能够迅速切入主题。虽然不要求同学们写出“虎头”的效果,但简洁明了是最起码的要求。考场作文中常见的问题有两种:一是没有注意文章的布局,随心所欲。一篇以《感激》为题的\'中考作文,一位同学用四个自然段,写了同学、老师对自己的关心与帮助,到结尾时才出现一些让人感动的画面,这样,文章就显得主次不分,情节不集中,这类文章一般只能评为三类或四类文;二是一些写作基础较好的同学,总想把最好的内容、最美的句子全写下来,出现了词语堆砌、拖沓冗长的问题。一篇题为《享受家庭的乐趣》的中考作文,第一段就用了200多字的景物描写,语句虽美,但由于没能抓住重点,文章还是落入了三类文的行列。
从湖南某市一万多份作文的卷面来看,字迹完全看不清的多达500份以上,勉强看得清的占1/3,真正称得上美观的试卷只有3%。主要有三种情况:一是少部分同学对于汉字的书写特点没有掌握,不会写字;二是有些同学虽然态度端正,但由于平常没有注重练习,写出来的字不是东倒西歪,就是参差不齐,无法辨认;还有一部分同学字写得不错,但由于书写基础不太好,书写时缺乏耐心,以致字迹潦草。从评分看,书写分一般占4分,但它给作文带来的损失远不止这个分数,阅卷老师反映,对于无法看清的文章,评分是同类文章中最低的,60分作文评分一般在20—30分之间。相反,少数书写美观的作文,文章没有太大的特色,但评分往往比同等文章要高出2—4分。
Long, long ago, there were two brothers, the one rich and the other poor. When Christmas Eve came, the poor one had not a bite in the house, either of meat or bread; so he went to his brother, and begged him, in God's name, to give him something for Christmas Day. It was by no means the first time that the brother had been forced to give something to him, and he was not better pleased at being asked now than he generally was.
"If you will do what I ask you, you shall have a whole ham," said he. The poor one immediately thanked him, and promised this.
"Well, here is the ham, and now you must go straight to Dead Man's Hall," said the rich brother, throwing the ham to him.
"Well, I will do what I have promised," said the other, and he took the ham and set off. He went on and on for the livelong day, and at nightfall he came to a place where there was a bright light.
"I have no doubt this is the place," thought the man with the ham.
An old man with a long white beard was standing in the outhouse, chopping Yule logs.
"Good-evening," said the man with the ham.
"Good-evening to you. Where are you going at this late hour?" said the man.
"I am going to Dead Man's Hall, if only I am on the right track," answered the poor man.
"Oh! yes, you are right enough, for it is here," said the old man. "When you get inside they will all want to buy your ham, for they don't get much meat to eat there; but you must not sell it unless you can get the hand-mill which stands behind the door for it. When you come out again I will teach you how to stop the hand-mill, which is useful for almost everything."
So the man with the ham thanked the other for his good advice, and rapped at the door.
从全国各地的中考作文题目来看,不少试题有“叙说真实故事”或“写出真情实感”之类的要求,一些同学为了让所写的事情意义“深刻”,所写的人物形象“高大”,喜欢凭空编造,任意拔高,结果出现了内容虚假的情况,2002年湖南某市一万多份中考作文中,这类文章达到了50%左右。有的写父母双亡,有的写亲人患绝症,有的写自己断腿断手,有的写“掉到了急流中”……由于缺乏生活,生编硬造时闹出了不少笑话,这类作文最让阅卷老师头疼,评分也往往偏低。如一位农村考生在《感激》一文中说:洪水暴发时,解放军给村民送来了海鲜,城里的小朋友给自己简易的住房安上了空调,内容如此失实!
财富是音乐,达芬奇、莫奈的财富是色彩,父母的财富是丰富阅历,我的财富是青春。青春包容了希望,包容了憧憬,包容了欢乐。
清水涟漪是鱼儿的\'财富,广阔天空是鸟儿的财富。清水、天空、鱼儿、鸟儿是人类的财富。财富归工业主?否则他们怎能将清水污染,向空气排放毒气?财富归猎手?否则他们怎能将鸟儿捕尽、射死?财富归我?否则我怎敢安闲地呼吸着空气中的清新软气?生态环境是财富。财富到底属于谁?不仅属于我,更属于大家。为保护我的我们的财富做出努力吧。
我没有金银财宝,汽车洋房,也没有很多money存在银行,但是我拥有青春的友谊,装得下满满的一箱。它是人生最大的一笔财富,足够一辈子享用。青春的友谊是无私的、纯洁的,不带任何功利之心。它像一杯清香的茶,在若干年后,才发觉是那么地令人怀念。因为它,我珍惜自己的拥有;因为它,我的青春才不会显得寂寞;因为它,我就是全世界最“富有”的人。
一个人坐在空空的教室里,此时陪伴我的只是那台似转非转的电扇和一盏迷离的灯。今晨激烈的争吵言犹在耳,窗外肆虐的雨水倾盆而下,实不知回家的路该如何出发。
父亲会来接我吗?怕是不会了吧?今天早上我还将他批评得一无是处,极尽言辞之恶毒。应该是不会来了……
我出神地望着窗外那迷离的烟雨发呆。江南的雨的确如此多娇,似烟,似雾,更似情……回首早晨发生的事,回想以前的种种往事,我的脾气确实暴躁了些,总是叫父母亲不要管我的事,动辄怒火冲天,颇有些九头牛都拉不回的架势。可其实我最害怕的,就是他们真不管我了。也许按可笑的星座书上所说,双子座的人是有点双重性格吧……雨雾突然润湿了我的眼睛。
街旁的路灯似明似灭,远处的楼房若隐若现。这雨,还会停吗?父亲,还会来吗?
记得我三岁时体弱多病,时常突发支气管炎,有时还转化为肺炎。有一天深夜,也是这样迷离的烟雨、缥缈的\'凉风、润眼的薄雾。可宁静的夜中总有不宁静的人,我又因患肺炎住院了。躺在病床上,我用似醒非醒、半睁半闭的眼睛看着在病床前坐立不安的父亲,心里感到很踏实很欣慰。而当我第二天早上一觉醒来时,发现父亲已伏在病床上睡着了,只有床头的灯还发着微亮的光。
“砰!”教室门突然被推开了,我的思绪被戛然打断。父亲那熟悉的身影出现在门口,纵然不高,此刻,我却觉得很高大。
“今天的雨这么大,我来接你回家。走吧。”
透过弥漫着雨雾的镜片,清晰中有点模糊,模糊中又是那么清晰。这声音是如此的沙哑,或许因为刚才一路小跑爬楼的原因,说话声中还夹杂着些许喘息声。那额间,隐约藏着几丝银发,眼角的鱼尾纹越发明显。
父亲老了,我也长大了……车,行在烟雨中。学校,在暮色深处隐去。尽管我的眼睛又一次被雨雾润湿,却仍能看清家中的灯光闪烁。
雨,仍在下着,如同一幅写意的山水画,在这个江南烟雨之城。
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