两节课后,试卷发下来了,我竟然是八十分,真是太不可思议了,明明昨晚复习的好端端的,怎么会考成这样?!回去要挨老爸的竹笋烧肉了。我只能强装笑颜,其实心里已是万念俱灰。回家的路上,奶奶一个劲的数落我,回到家又被爸爸妈妈呵斥。灰头土脸的我有种无颜面对江东父老的感觉。
我痛定思痛,认真分析了每个错误点并一一订正。我暗下决心,今后一定要努力学习、全面复习,跟“认真”、“细心”做朋友,争取获得好成绩。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
亲爱的爸爸:
您好!记得有一次,我的头晕得不行,你的眼神里露出了焦急的眼色,而我却在那大喊大叫,您急忙背着我去医院。在医院里,您又一刻也没闲着。当针扎进我的肉里,我看见您的眼神里露出了紧张的神色,而我却让您买吃的。那时下着鹅毛般的大雪,您冒着大雪给我买来了香喷喷的饭菜,当我咽下去第一口饭菜,我的身体里就立刻充满了暖流。我问您,饿不饿,您却说,不饿。当我一觉醒来的时候,发现自己的身上多了一件大衣,而您却在那里裹着被子打着哆嗦。我心中突然悔恨不已,悔恨自己不该这样连累您,您为我付出的太多了。唉,爸爸,对不起您啦,看着您那样子,我的心里真的不好受。
当护士给我来拔针的时候,您还在那呼呼大睡,我告诉护士不要吵醒您,我轻轻地走到您身边,把衣服披到您身上,我看到您的脸冻得通红,我的心里又是一阵酸楚。这时,您一下子惊醒了,把衣服披到了我身上,还说:“爸爸还热得很呢!”说完,还假装扇着扇子,把我们俩都逗乐了。
爸爸,您为我付出太多了!当您打扫卫生的时候(),我会主动帮助您打扫;当我再生病的时候,我不会再大喊大叫了。
爸爸,您太累了。爸爸,您应该休息一下了。爸爸,亲亲您的左脸颊。
此致
敬礼
祝:工作顺利、万事如意!
亲爱的爸爸:
您好吗?
最近住在我们家楼上的那一家搬走了,我很开心!他们住在我们家楼上的这四年,每一天都会发出很大的噪音,影响了我的学习和休息。
记得那一天晚上,我吃完饭跑到房间写起作业。大部分作业很快做完了,就剩数学试卷上的的最后一道思考题。这是一道奥数题,我左思右想也想不出来,非常苦恼,正在思考得脑仁疼的时候,突然听到楼上传来了“滋滋”的声音。这声音就像有个电钻正在我的头顶钻洞,感觉脑子要爆炸了
我知道是楼上那一家的狗又在抓地板了,他们家天天发出这样的声音。这时我实在受不了了,随手拿起一本书,扔向了天花板,只听见那“滋滋”声音越来越快,越来越响,仿佛天花板都要被它抓一个洞。
听到响声,妈妈走了进来,说:“你不要惹它了,说不定它就消停了。楼上这家人的素质真差,早走早好。”过了一会儿,果然没动静了。时间不早了,我洗漱准备上床睡觉。没想到,刚闭上眼,“滋滋”声又开始了
如今,他们那一家终于搬走了,我很开心。他们搬走的第二天,我和妈妈决定上去看看。推开门,大吃一惊,当初租给他们的时候特意刚刷了白墙,现在成了黑墙,上面布满了很多的涂鸦、鞋印、狗爪印遍地的狗毛和灰尘;厕所的马桶池内已经成黑黄色,妈妈用了整整一瓶消毒液才让陶瓷漏出些白色出来。我们怀疑他们家这几年都没有打扫过卫生,妈妈决定以后再也不把房子租给别人了。
爸爸,以后我就可以睡好觉了,您高兴吗?希望您能早点回家,我今天就写到这儿吧!
此致
敬礼
您的儿子孙兴
20xx·11·28
to prevent H7N9 we should know some common sense. First of all, it is important for us to prevent H7N9 from ourselves. For example, clean our hands frequently.
Sencondly, do more exercises. Such as running. Lastly, change our diet to keep balence. For example, eat more types of vegetables and drink more water
How to prevent the H7N9?
As is well known,the A flu is spreading throught our country. However, if we negnect it, the deadly H7N9 may cause more infectors,or even more deaths. So what is the most important is that we should take some effective measures to prevent it.They can be listed as follows.
Firstly,it is necessary for you to realize the Avian flu can be prevented if you develop good living habits. For example,you shouldn’t forget to wash your hands before meals.Besides,don’t spit everywhere and try to cover your mouth or nose with paper or hankerchiefs when you have to cough or sneeze.What’s more, remember to wear the mouth-cover if you have to go to the public places, such as the crowded cinemas,supermarkets, buses,where the A flu may spread easily.
Secondly,of course, taking exercise more often and taking good sleep to build your body are wise choices for you to reduce the risk of being infected.
Last but not the least, if you are unlucky to be infected with the slight flu cold, try to stay at home,and take some medicine. Do pay attention to your daily body temperature. If you have a high fever, go to the hospital without delay for further treatment. Make sure you are not expected to come back to school before the cold or flu is cured.
Only by doing like this can you prevent or defeat the A flu in the end.
爸爸:
对不起,我今天又和您吵架了。
您骑着摩托带着我,路旁的街景剪辑般地向后退,我知道离考场越来越近了。我趴在您背上,还在拼命地背着“水何澹澹,山岛竦峙”。您无数次问我考试用具准备好没有,您不厌其烦,我却早已听厌:“爸,您能不能不烦我?”您终于沉默了。爸爸,您不知道,我无意间看到那发白的鬓角,我想起了妈妈藏在橱子里快要用光的染发剂,那时我突然觉得自己是一个罪人,一个***人犯,是我谋***了您的青春。我不想让您打断我背诵那些古诗,因为我不想再谋***了您美好的希望。
爸爸,您现在一定还在学校的大门外,找一张别人丢弃的传单纸,扑在台阶上坐着,捧着一瓶矿泉水等我出来。爸爸,对不起!我知道,年少不是借口;我知道,未来的路不能这样走;我知道,从前的我任性执拗。
爸爸,您一定还记得一个月前,我揉破二模成绩单,赌气地对您说:“考多少分不用你管!”您一定还记得一年前我躲在床上不去上补习班,您对我大吼:“你别在折磨我!”您一定还记得三年前我因为您不让我看《大风车》离家出走,当我望着小摊上的煎饼馃子正馋的流口水时,您伸出温暖的手把我拉走……
爸爸,您一定还记得好多好多。爸爸,每一次您都原谅了我,爸爸,我错了。
爸爸,还有十分钟就收卷了。
爸爸,还有两个月我就要上高中了。
爸爸,在有三年我就要远离家乡去读大学了。
爸爸,我要用一辈子的时间来向您说:“对不起!”因为您等我,爱我,不仅仅是这两个小时。
祝您
健康
愿意抛弃年少这一借口的您的孩子
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