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英语作文点评如何写【一】

表达不准确，详略不当

屠夫非常困窘急迫，恐怕前后一起受到狼的攻击。屠夫看见田野里有一个打麦场，打麦场的主人把柴草堆积在打麦场里，覆盖成小山（似的）。心里暗自高兴：“天助我也。哦哈哈”于是屠夫跑过去靠在柴草堆的下面，放下担子拿起屠刀。两只狼不敢上前，瞪着眼睛朝着屠夫：“小样吧，想把我给***了，你还嫩点，也不看看我在这山上混了多少年了。凭你这智商，想打败我，除非太阳从西边出来。”

一会儿，一只狼径直走开了，另一只狼像狗似的蹲坐在屠夫的前面。时间长了，那只狼的眼睛好像闭上了，神情悠闲得很。屠夫突然跳起：“这明明是摆着让我砍死你嘛，真是个低智商的狼。”于是用刀砍狼的脑袋，又连砍几刀把狼***死。屠夫刚想要走，转身看见柴草堆的后面，另一只狼正在柴草堆里打洞，打算要钻洞进去，来攻击屠夫的后面。身子已经钻进去了一半，只露出屁股和尾巴。屠夫从狼的后面砍断了狼的大腿，也把狼***死了。屠夫这才明白前面的那只狼假装睡觉，原来是用这种方式来诱惑敌方。屠夫不禁心里赞叹：“这狼，真是狠。”

狼也太狡猾了，可是一会儿两只狼都被***死了，禽兽的欺骗手段能有多少呢？只给人们增加笑料罢了。

英语作文点评如何写【二】

Expert tips on how to prevent avian influenza H7N9 collated by current argument data dictionary

1.平时加强体育锻炼，多休息，避免过度劳累，不吸烟，勤洗手;注意个人卫生，打喷嚏或咳嗽时掩住口鼻。

1 usually strengthen physical exercise, rest more, avoid excessive overworked, do not smoke, wash their hands; pay attention to personal hygiene, when sneezing or coughing and cover your nose and mouth.

2.保持室内清洁，使用消毒液清洗的地毯，避免使用难以清洗的地毯，保持地面、天花板、家具及墙壁清洁，确保排水道通畅;保持室内空气流通，应每天开窗换气两次，每次至少10分钟，或使用抽气扇保持空气流通;尽量少去空气不流通的场所。

2 keep the room clean, use disinfectant cleaning carpets, avoid the use of hard to clean the carpet, keep the floor, ceiling, furniture and walls clean, to ensure smooth drainage channel; maintains the indoor air circulation, ventilation windows should be at least two times a day, 10 minutes each time, or use a fan to keep air circulation; as little as possible to airless places.

3.注意饮食卫生，进食禽肉、蛋类要彻底煮熟，加工、保存食物时要注意生、熟分开;养成良好的卫生习惯，搞好厨房卫生，不生食禽肉和内脏。解剖活(死家禽、家畜及其制品后要彻底洗手。

3, pay attention to food hygiene, eating meat, eggs should be thoroughly cooked, processing, preservation of food to the attention of raw, cooked separately; develop good health habits, good kitchen hygiene, do not eat raw poultry meat and offal. Anatomy of living (dead to wash hands thoroughly, livestock and poultry products.

同时，在户外洗手不方便的时候，可以使用免洗洗手液，随身携带，随时随地隔离病菌，呵护您的健康。

At the same time, when the outdoor hand-washing is not convenient, can use hand sanitizer, carry whenever and wherever possible, isolate the pathogen, take care of your health.

4.发现疫情时，应尽量避免与禽类接触;公众特别是儿童应避免密切接触家禽和野禽。

4 found in the epidemic, should avoid contact with poultry; the public especially children should avoid close contact with poultry and wild birds.

5.注意生活用具的消毒处理。禽流感病毒不耐热，100°C下一分钟即可灭活。对干燥、紫外线照射、汞、氯等常用消毒药都很敏感。

5 pay attention to disinfection and living appliances. Avian influenza viruses do not heat, 100 ° C, one minute can be inact

英语作文点评如何写【三】

依稀想来，已有几年未踏上这一条洒满月光的小路了。小路是父亲亲手用鹅卵石铺成的，在月下泛着朦胧柔和的光。路的那头，连着河边的小屋，连着我的父亲。父亲呵，你是否依然执著地坐在岸边，哀怨地吹着笛子，等着儿子归来？

父亲爱好吹笛。小的时候，父亲的笛声载满了我童年的乐趣，像那条丝带一样的小河，牵引着我的童心在父亲爱的港湾里晃悠，父亲很疼我这个唯一的儿子，老喜欢用粗糙的双手捏我的脸蛋，不顾我疼得哭起来，还兀自傻呵呵地笑。每天日暮，父亲带我到河边的草地上放牛，父亲常常放开牛绳让牛自己去吃草，他便从背后的草篓里摸出笛子，鼓起腮，吹出世间最美妙的音乐。我就靠在父亲腿上，看着天边的夕阳将父亲的头发染上点点金色。我爱父亲，父亲的笛声最美。

随着年龄的增长，我开始讨厌起父亲来，讨厌他满嘴烟味，讨厌他的黄牙；讨厌他背个草篓到学校找我，还从窗外傻傻地盯着我看；我还讨厌他没有本事，只知侍弄几亩薄地，连我的学费也没能赚回。我和父亲逐渐隔膜了，在被我吼了几次后，父亲不再打着赤脚去学校看我，不再唠叨着让我好好学习。他保持沉默，而打破沉默的唯一方式就是吹笛，如怨如诉，而在我看来，这又成了他不务正业的标志。

我要到外地上学去了。离去的前一天晚上，我走上那条熟悉的小路，感觉到一丝眷恋与不舍，路像是月光在地上划过的痕，也划过我的心。几年时间里，我未回过一次家。母亲在电话里告诉我，我走后，父亲整日像掉了魂似的，茶饭不思，只知去河边吹笛子。最终，我应母亲的请求回到了家。到家里已是夜晚，月刚升起，当我怀着无尽的思绪在小路上行走时，遇到了等我的父亲。我忽地一下子哭出来，紧紧抱住了他——我的父亲。我请求父亲给我吹笛，他答应了。硬咽的笛声又在耳畔响起，响在洒满月光的小路上，勾起我曾经的回忆。我感觉到父亲眷眷的爱子之情，感到愧对父亲的笛声，父亲爱我，爱着自己的儿子。他为我吹了十八年的笛子，而我此刻才发现它和我的心竟产生如此强烈的共鸣。

路很美，很美，是月划过的痕。月是路的魂，父亲的笛声是我的心魂！

英语作文点评如何写【四】

从写法上看，这是一篇常规的记叙文，结构并不新颖，但因为作者将最朴实的生活融入文中，运用了朴实却最动情的语言来行文，所以文章能在常规中脱颖而出。。

记叙文有别于议论文，它不要求推理十分复杂，也不要求抽象地表现不同层次的思想观点，只要能表现出一个主导性的主题思想就行了。重要的是要看人物、情节、环境的描写是否准确、生动、形象，是否能调动多种艺术手段表现生活。

这篇记叙性散文对“感情亲疏与认知的关系”作了含蓄而形象的诠释：儿时爱父亲，其笛声最美；年龄稍长讨厌父亲，吹笛被看作“不务正业”；到外地时复苏了爱父的情感，其笛声与我的心产生强烈的共鸣——“我”对笛声的认识就是这样受着感情的支配！笛声原本没有大的变化，"我"的认知发生巨变皆因 "我"受感情（即对父亲本人的感情）的支配！这样的内容，这样的主题，非常准确、非常形象地论释了"感情亲疏与认知的`关系"这个话题。

文章中的月、路与笛声既构成了朦胧的意象美，又成了结构全文的线索。特别是笛声，既是父亲情感的宣泄，又是“我”认知的对象，还是刻画“父亲”性格的道具。父亲带“我”放牛时用笛声抒发“美妙”的感情，父亲与“我”有隔膜时用笛声传达“爱子之心”。

作者调动了叙述、描写、议论和抒情等多种表达方式表现生活。由于作者十分熟悉农村生活，所以文中描写逼真而感人，如"日暮听笛"、月下路景"等，其悠远的意境，优美的语言，深挚的浓情，无不留给读者美好的回味。

本文语言优美而形象，“路是月的痕”、“月是路的魂”，多么新奇而富有诗意的比喻！还有“用粗糙的手捏我的脸蛋”，“兀自傻呵呵地笑”，“讨厌他满嘴烟味，讨厌他的黄牙”，“讨厌他背个草篓到学校找我”等细节，刻画了“父亲”的质朴、憨厚、隐忍、痴心的性格特征，蕴含着浸渍乡村的风味的浓浓亲情，不乏感人的力量。

英语作文点评如何写【五】

Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.

So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.

In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.

首先，提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。

第一段：提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….

第二段：正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….

第三段：摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….

其次，提纯范文“段落写作”。

段落写作分为统一性，连贯性和完整性三方面。

统一性(unity：段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛，也不可太具体，做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明，另一方面从坏的方面说明。

连贯性(coherence：关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰，层层展开。

完整性(completeness：以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头，这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。

再次，提纯范文“句子写作”。

1. It has been shown that … …

类似句型：It is known to us that … …

It is said that … …

It is reported that … …

It is controversial that … …

2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单，注意练习并接句的使用，会使句子显的更加饱满。

3. enable v. 使…能够

I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.

4. in that = because

表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as，如：

The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.

此句以我们常用的人称开头，句式简单，我们可以通过把since提前改变句式，如：

Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。

最后，提纯范文“措辞”。

1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。

2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的

形容“多”的表达方法：millions and millions

a multitude of

a great deal of

a large amount of

plenty of

many a

3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论，辩论”的意思，而是“认为”。

I argue that … …

I maintain that … …

I claim that … …

I insist that … … = I think that … …

I hold that … …

I assert that … …

I assume that … …

4. negative adj. 否定的.，相反的

hold negative view = hold opposite opinions

5. phenomenon n. 现象

social phenomenon 社会现象

natural phenomenon 自然现象

6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever

(选词策略：使用最近所学的单词，如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever

在分析并掌握范文之后，我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文，以供参考：

1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会

2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会

3. 我的看法

Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.

However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.

In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.