Some fish are forced to leave polluted water and are flying in the sky. But unfortunately, air is also so polluted that they have to wear masks. Each of them is crying, “Where is my home?” What a terrible sight!
Mankind has brought so much pollution. Waste is being poured into rivers and seas. Poisons to kill pests in farming and chemicals go into rivers and seas, too. Poisonous gasses from factories also make the air so dirty. The whole balance of nature is being destroyed as a result of our ignorance of the environmental protection.
Personally, man can not live alone on the earth. Should fish die from serious pollution, so would man! It is high time we did something to prevent such a scene from happening.
本文格式正确,意思表述完整,行文流畅自然。作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用,还使用了以‘which,’引导的非限定性定语从句,从而使文章层次分明,富于变化,不愧为考场佳作。
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High school is regarded as the best time in a person's life. As a senior 3 student, it won't take long before I graduate.
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一是“源波讨源”、“依文论文”。“源波讨源”即要求阅卷老师要充分明白手头的作文,是考生在特殊场合和有限时间里写的“急就章”,且中学生阅历有限,因此阅卷老师应根据中学生的实际情况来评阅,按照中学生的思路来理解,不能按成人的标准来进行评价。“依文论文”就是,阅卷老师要按照文章的体裁来充分理解文章,是什么体裁(议论、说明或记叙)就按什么体裁标准来评价,不能有个人的好恶。
二是“立足给分,不立足扣分”。刘教授说,一般老师往往喜欢对学生的文章“找问题”,但考虑到考生写的是“急就章”,所以阅卷老师应立足于尽量发现考生的“闪光点”,今年作文强调感情真挚,内容充实,文体符合。此外还鼓励考生的个性发展,“个性”就是“闪光点”,因此在发展等级分方面,只要涉及标答中的一点,就可给分,直至满10分。
三是“以宽容开放心态评阅”。刘教授说,今年强调老师要以宽容、开放心态评阅考生作文。凡是和话题沾边(所谓“进了门槛”)的作文,都不当作偏题处理,当然要宽严有度。此外,鼓励阅卷老师敢于给考生作文打满分,“满分作文允许有个别瑕疵存在”。
四是“通过阅卷起到一定导向作用”。刘教授说,高考作文评卷要体现导向作用,促进教育向素质教育发展。比如说,现在倡导作文应告别模式化,端正文风,内容与形式统一,摒弃华而不实的、空洞的.东西。今年作文强调是否体现了考生的独自的、真实的生活和情感体验,思维状态是否清晰、有序展现,是否有“我”在(即个性化)。刘教授还说,今年对作文十分重视“符合文体”这一点。因此,像那种追求形式华丽、文体怪异的文章,将不受欢迎,“非驴非马”(即文体不正)的文章,不可能得高分。
据刘教授介绍,今年高考语文评卷还将严格控制速度,每位老师每天只能评120份试卷,落实到每份作文上,阅卷时间平均在4.5分钟左右。以前有媒体曾报道高考作文评分“90秒钟定生死”,这在我省是无稽之谈。
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