作文原稿和修改稿对照【一】
1、找你们班的大力士上前来砸蛋，老师有两个要求：一是要用你最大的力气去砸；二是听老师命令，老师喊砸你再砸。（我还要看看谁有一双慧眼，一双巧嘴，能成为我们班的观察小明星、表达小明星、合作之星）让学生拿起铁锤，摆好姿势，准备砸蛋。
师：谁仔细观察到了这位同学的动作？
生1：这位同学屏气凝神地望着这只鸡蛋……手用力地握着铁锤……（师：你的有词很准确，一听就知道他非把这蛋碰破不可。但是，这个句子有点别扭，把“地”改成逗号更好。别的句子如果有错，也要指导学生说正确，说通顺，说完整。（这是在告诉学生这个词的作用和正确用句子表达。）把它写到黑板的词语宝库）
生2：我觉得他脸上呈现出紧张的神态，眼睛死死地盯着那只鸡蛋……（师：看你多棒，还注意观察到了他的神态，尤其是这个“盯”字用的好，他一定想一下子就碰中它。你就是第一个观察之星，继续到黑板写词语）
（他怎么举的？——高高地举起。）
2、师：我想知道，同学们此时，你心里想些什么？生1：我很紧张，怕一不小心这只蛋被砸破了。生2：我很兴奋，很想看看到底这只蛋能不能被砸破？生3：我的心都快提到嗓子眼啦
3、好，既然大家如此期待，我们现在开始砸吧！同学们可要认真看了啊！三二一砸！
蛋被砸破了，同学们一片哇哇声
4、师：你们刚才看到什么了，听到了什么？谁来说一说？
生1：我看到同学的锤子下去，鸡蛋被砸得稀巴烂 生2：听到“砰”得一声，这个鸡蛋就蛋花四了……（这个蛋花四溅用的好啊，把蛋的可怜样儿描述得真形象啊。）
5、看到这个可怜的鸡蛋，你有什么话说？生自由发挥
6、想对何老师说些什么？生：老师你骗人，这只鸡蛋明明被砸烂了，你怎么说砸不烂呢？
7、别人的话就一定可信吗？是不是真的，还要靠自己做出正确的判断，有时候还要亲自试试才行，是不是啊。今后，要养成多问个为什么的习惯，才能学到真正的知识。（学生要能反思出这一点，有多好，哈哈。这要靠你引导。）
作文原稿和修改稿对照【二】
Three bulls fed in a field together in the greatest peace and amity .A lion had long watched them in the hope of making prize of them, but found that there was little chance for him so long as they kept all together .He therefore began secretly to spread evil and slanderous reports of one against the other ,till he had formented a jealousy and distrust amongst them . No sooner did the lion see that they avoided one another ,and fed each by himself apart ,than he fell upon them ,and so made an easy prey of them all.
The quarrels of friends are the opportunities of foes.
作文原稿和修改稿对照【三】
作文原稿和修改稿对照【四】
A jackdaw, as vain and conceited as jackdaw could be, picked up the feathers which some peacocks had shed, stuck them amongst his own, and despising his old companions, introduced himself with the greatest assurance into a flock of those beautiful birds .They, instantly detecting the intruder, stripped him of his borrowed plumes, and falling upon him with their beaks sent him about his business .The unlucky jackdaw, sorely punished and deeply sorrowing, betook himself to his former companions, and would have flocked with them again as if nothing had happened .But they, recollecting what airs he had given himself, drummed him out of their society, while one of those whom he had so lately despised, read him this lecture ："Had you been contented with what nature made you, you would have escaped the chastisement of you r betters and also the contempt of you r equals。”
作文原稿和修改稿对照【五】
When a lion was asleep, a little mouse began running up and down beside him. This soon wakened the lion. He was very angry, and caught the mouse in his paws.
"Forgive me, please." cried the little mouse. "I may be able to help you someday." The lion was tickled at these words.
He thought, "How could this little mouse help me?" However he lifted up his paws and let him go.
A few days later, the lion was caught in a trap.
The hunters wanted to take him alive to the king, so they tied him to a tree, and went away to look for a wagon.
Just then the little mouse passed by, and saw the sad lion.
He went up to him, and soon gnawed away the ropes. "Was I not right?" asked the little mouse.
狮子与报恩的老鼠
●狮子睡着了，有只老鼠在他的周围爬上爬下，很快吵醒了狮子，狮子很生气，一把抓住了老鼠。
●“饶了我吧，”老鼠请求说，“也许有一天我能帮上你的忙呢。”狮子觉得很好笑，他想：“这只小老鼠怎么能帮上我的忙？”但他还是抬起爪子放他走了。
●不久，狮子被陷阱困住了。猎人们想将活狮子献给国王，就把他捆在一棵大树上，然后去找马车。
●这时，老鼠路过这里，看到了绝望中的狮子。他走过去，很快啃断了绳索，说：“我虽小，可是我也能帮上你的忙。”
寓意: 有些朋友也许平时看似微不足道，但却有可能在我们身处困境的时候提供巨大的帮助。
